Surgical Butterflies

My mouth's still sore
From the last time you kissed me there.
I'd tell you where I'm bleeding
But it's not like you'd care
To hear the words that gape from open wounds
The sentences form a bruise;
The blackest of the blue..
Even that
Won't change your point of view;
Down.
And I know when you're looking at me
It’s your perspective;
The way you see.
So stitch my lips when talk gets cheap
From all the secrets
That I can't keep..
You promised nights of dreamless sleep;
I drown in rooms
Of sleepless dreams
As sutures silence my insomniac screams...
... I'll wait for you to tear the seams..


(I really don't like the last two lines.. I may remove them and write more.. arg )

• On Sunday, May 17, 2009, Mylissa (1128) wrote:
  
  oh yes!
  
  
• A former member wrote: I dont like the last line, but I love the three before it. This was very creative.
  
  
• On Tuesday, May 1, 2007, Moonflower (431) wrote:
  
  crushing, honest, and just like every other poem of yours, insanely beautiful.
  
  
• On Tuesday, May 1, 2007, asphyxia (61) wrote:
  
  I like the last two lines...
  
  
• On Tuesday, May 1, 2007, asphyxia (61) wrote:
  
  aww did i come off as "getting" the other day? (Tania's comment) i didn't mean to if i did! sorry!
  
  
• On Monday, April 30, 2007, GraveFlower (295) wrote:
  
  love it, the title, the gorror, everything, the crushing emotion...LOVE IT! i totally agree with bella, fuckin fabulous *bites dissasembly's stitches open and kisses him*........i dont care if i taste bad too or not!. your amazing ~*dani*~
  
  
• On Monday, April 30, 2007, Bella Butchery (947) wrote:
  
  gha! i loved every bit of this! if you remove the last two lines, i will roadtrip to hunt you down, kill you, and steal all your bad ass pictures, and put the last two lines back in!
  
  
• On Friday, April 20, 2007, Tania (235) wrote:
  
  yep. love the title.. some great lines..i actually especially like the last two.
  
  
• On Wednesday, April 18, 2007, prettydisgrace (109) wrote:
  
  the title drew me in.. I really liked this write.. I would agree with mab in saying I also liked the last two lines switched.. but yes..very good read.
  
  
• On Wednesday, April 18, 2007, DarkDruidess (162) wrote:
  
  I love the words here and even the last two lines...just felt like it kinda just cut off...like there was more you needed to "not say"...but I think it is really good.
  
  
• On Wednesday, April 18, 2007, Mab (1193) wrote:
  
  "stitch my lips when talk gets cheap"..this was really good! I like how the last 2 lines sound when they're switched. ~Meg
  
  
• On Wednesday, April 18, 2007, Mylissa (1128) wrote:
  
  outfreakingstanding.
  
  
• On Wednesday, April 18, 2007, Alanarchy (1483) wrote:
  
  Awesome as is, though I do think it is a bit anticlimactic. not that it truly needs a flashy finish, still I agree with you that this, while very good, might do with a little working over. "So stitch my lips when talk gets cheap" Oh hell yeah.
  
  
• On Wednesday, April 18, 2007, Alanarchy (1483) wrote:
  
  This would make some great lyrics for a song. Are you a musician? Just thought I'd ask.
  
  
• On Wednesday, April 18, 2007, Bella Butchery (947) wrote:
  
  *gives a standing ovation* your pictures rock socks
  
  
• On Wednesday, April 18, 2007, raskal (213) wrote:
  
  ' you promised nights of dreamless sleep; I drown in rooms of sleepless dreams' - brilliant write - i know all about insomnia/ silent, heady screams and the strange/dark place between sleep and wake.