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Echo of The Past by GothicBlack
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Echo of The Past

~ GothicBlack ~



No one can hear me
No one can see me
Feel me, touch me


Which means
No one can hurt me
Tease me, punch me


Because no one knows I’m here
Though my breath falls short
My heart still beats slowly, painfully

I’m a secret mist
Whispered in the deepest sleep
Just a dream of a girl

I lack substance
But carry sorrows
And cry real tears

I’m a lonely soul
An empty spirit


I drift in and out of this world
Barely connected to reality
But I’m all that’s left of me
A ghost of what I used to be

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  • italianbella On Friday, December 28, 2007, italianbella (233) wrote:

    hearttouching great write

  • carlosjackal On Wednesday, October 17, 2007, carlosjackal (1799) wrote:

    Stunning piece, very well wrought indeed. =) -Carl

  • Kinkypoptart On Wednesday, July 26, 2006, Kinkypoptart (663) wrote:

    Much like the rest of us, I can regrettably relate too much to this write. Thats why I love this place... we're all the same, yet all so different. Great write ~*~Tart~*~

  • ColdScaredAlone On Saturday, July 22, 2006, ColdScaredAlone (100) wrote:

    Now I haven't been on dp in probably over a year, and this is the kind of poem that makes me miss this site. I really feel what you're saying here.

  • Mistress Shadow On Wednesday, July 12, 2006, Mistress Shadow (326) wrote:

    Fav. lines are the last two. Very touching m'dear. ~T

  • mywristshurt On Friday, July 7, 2006, mywristshurt (449) wrote:

    you have the skills of no one ive ever seen.. the way you present yourself in a poem is strong all the way through.. and no matter what, i love the way you write

  • dp_whipping_girl On Wednesday, July 5, 2006, dp_whipping_girl (331) wrote:

    painfully lovely write; well described; i relate too much. ~pf

  • A former member wrote: *claps* i love this poem! the best part was the first and second stanzas. you showed ups and downs of being like this. it really ooked me. ~allie, the darkest rose

  • dying angel On Wednesday, July 5, 2006, dying angel (1076) wrote:

    "I lack substance/But carry sorrows/And cry real tears".....i think youve captured the secrets we all try to keep burried deep inside.

  • TaintedButterfly On Tuesday, July 4, 2006, TaintedButterfly (837) wrote:

    Omg what potent words. "I'm a secret mist whispered in the deepest sleep, just a dream of a girl"...that stanza stood out for me. Pretty damned amazing. *Bravo* Julia~


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