suitcase open in the rain

poems,
they flicker
in tandem dreams trailing
from placid mouths
plastic whispers

there is a hum
hypnotized & syntesized by shadows
of bodies, w/ prison laughter

somewhere inside her
sweetness taste of sweetness wings
beauty?s imperfection

in between,

a season faraway
inside the child?s hand
skipping pencils on chalkboard jungles
television walls

riding bicycles to the movies
the universe curved
here there is Paris, over there a blue square
watercolor pearls in her eyes
dressed in fashion rains
w/ a dandelion?s scribbled flaw?

nowhere to go,
nothing left for the haiku?s flame
just words scratched on an empty
notebook
stuffed
in
a
suitcase,
open in the rain.

More comments:

• On Saturday, September 13, 2008, Mirage (2) wrote:
  
  One of my all-time fav poems now. Really. I love the style and execution. I hope to read more like this.
  
  
• On Tuesday, August 14, 2007, Reefer_rave (185) wrote:
  
  It's all been said....
  
  
• On Sunday, May 20, 2007, carlosjackal (1798) wrote:
  
  *breathes in* Fuck me, Jon, this was fuckin' special. So fuckin' special *croons Thom Yorke-style* If I had room this would definitely be a potential fave. Nice one, Mr Red Sox!! -Carl
  
  
• On Thursday, February 15, 2007, Bella Butchery (947) wrote:
  
  oldy, but very good! what ever i say will not do service to this beauty, so ill just stop here.
  
  
• On Friday, December 1, 2006, The Zebra Warrior (2209) wrote:
  
  I should have read this a long time ago; as it happens better late than never...I can why Aim skips the light fandango o this one....sublime doesnt really get close monsieur...I just bow...greatness...blimey!!
  
  
• On Friday, December 1, 2006, The Zebra Warrior (2209) wrote:
  
  I can see*....see - see. And vision of tis: pure light against my once tired eyes.....phenomenal fantasy-licked rain saoked paragonia....eh? Yeah....dead right
  
  
• On Friday, December 1, 2006, The Zebra Warrior (2209) wrote:
  
  and sadly I still cant do it justice with the correct spelling - ha!! Still, if we laugh, its a good thing. Pack your bags....we're checking out here and into Utopia's hotel!!!
  
  
• On Saturday, December 2, 2006, Bakkhus Unbound (1055) wrote:
  
  Watch out for the holes in "Utopia's Hotel". Utopia's hotel, I like the concept. TA on the comment; the weirder the better..."fantasy-licked rain saoked paragonia" yea!
  
  
• On Saturday, December 2, 2006, The Zebra Warrior (2209) wrote:
  
  hehehehe...we make efforts to please monsieur...
  
  
• On Friday, December 1, 2006, mozarts cat (239) wrote:
  
  i'm in love with this poem =] ..
  
  
• On Tuesday, October 17, 2006, mozarts cat (239) wrote:
  
  omg .. i just found my mantra!!!! 'prison laughter' ..'here there is Paris, over there a blue square' .. this is like a silent movie .. chic .. perfection .. I adore this .. this is one to keep in the pocket
  
  
• On Tuesday, October 17, 2006, mozarts cat (239) wrote:
  
  .. this is one that I would have liked to have written myself .. timeless .. it's one of the most beautiful things i've ever read! and I shall keep it in my pocket. I think I'm gonna run out of bookmarks =)
  
  
• On Thursday, October 19, 2006, mozarts cat (239) wrote:
  
  i would like to find that suitcase =)
  
  
• On Thursday, August 4, 2005, Lotophagi (419) wrote:
  
  your words are hypnotic... lovely rhythm variation, legato, staccato, it's so precise. The questioning following a delicate melody twisting subtlely around the theme, ambiguity in conjunction with absolute detail. Wonderful. Thank you.
  
  
• A former member wrote: I love how works like this mislead me ...in the way where I seem to have to keep up as I follow each seeming tangent...only to reach the destination of the last line and see that the thought that Im left with makes such cohesive sense...when prior it seem
  
  
• A former member wrote: when prior it seemed like Id have to reread it...the climax fills me in.
  
  
• On Tuesday, July 5, 2005, Bakkhus Unbound (1055) wrote:
  
  The '?'s' throughout this poem (as you have probably figured out) are accidentally converted by DP from the apostrophes they should be... save for 'scribbled flaw?' which is quite the irony of errors.
  
  
• On Wednesday, November 17, 2004, MGood (80) wrote:
  
  I love this... ~Mary
  
  
• A former member wrote: This is such magnificent work...ive commented on this piece before and read it many times since,but my words jus cant describe what it is about this poem i find so...different,every word sits so perfectly in place.Definatly a favourite,Butterfly..xxx...
  
  
• A former member wrote: I think I can honestly say that this is one of the most original poems I've read. I love the feeling of motion throughout the poem, whether its through time or space. Fantastic ending