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blink-breathe-repeat

.blink.

I tasted heaven- in her tears
and breathed a bittersweet breath. of acrid emotion
amotion. of self.
and break me down in the process.

punch-drunk and bereaved. head hung low.
thinking. of this first taste of defeat- on the brink of relief
gritting teeth- with broken dreams
and self afflicted semi-something. no.
it's nothing in the least.

at least. that's what she said to me.

.breathe.

but never blink- life exists on the brink
between what we live and what we see.
and what we hate- it's impossible to retrieve.
and no. I'll never fucking believe.

a despondant- redundant, rhetorical piece.
of illusion. dillusion seems to bring.
brokendown peace. there's a choice- or so it seems
retracing starplexed voices
and noises that mark the decease. and we're lost.
the cost of the dream
is inevitable. someone save me.

.fail.

we're invisible.
life is lived on the edge of credible.
and tonight. I'll just be.

yes. I'll just be.

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On Tuesday October 10th, 2006, Instant Insanity (773) writes:

mmm...Nope

On Tuesday May 9th, 2006, PoeticHellion (250) writes:

Mmm. Yes. Just... being. Wow. Beautifully written. Poigent in fact. Just... mmm. Perfection, rather Buddhist in a way.

On Tuesday May 2nd, 2006, Crumpled Dragonflies (111) writes:

This is still fucking awsome...

On Monday April 24th, 2006, Michelle Xiao (518) writes:

These are moments of soft discreet beauty, and I feel you have captured the essence of them, and if you did not, they would escape into the universe unlived.

On Monday April 24th, 2006, Michelle Xiao (518) writes:

That and the inner philosophical turmoil, perhaps present in all of us, but is made conscious here, as though it's at the surface and can be understood, almost.

On Wednesday April 12th, 2006, AniDayz (1297) writes:

i have missed your fukking voice.

On Thursday March 23rd, 2006, Vicious Pixie (53) writes:

i like this. alot. speaks or brokenhearted despondency.

On Sunday March 19th, 2006, An Expired Member (14) writes:

nice. song lyrics or somethin?

On Thursday March 9th, 2006, heartdripsblack (769) writes:

kool poem i liked it im ijustkilledmyself i just started yesterday i have 10 poems on here so far would like some feed back on what u think thanks

On Wednesday March 8th, 2006, Nightingale (579) writes:

you forgot to rinse.

On Saturday March 4th, 2006, Lotophagi (459) writes:

I think this has to be my favourite piece of yours.... it's incredible, stunning write, a knock to the jaw and an eye-opener to life and living, being human, emotional torment and turmoil and acceptance of such. brilliant write. Thank you.

On Saturday March 4th, 2006, Future of Despond (95) writes:

huh.

On Thursday March 2nd, 2006, Rain In The Willows (876) writes:

I say kick her in the shin...this was beautiful./

On Sunday February 26th, 2006, suicideseason (2161) writes:

She lied...I hate her.Just be you.You rock...you know.:)

On Saturday February 25th, 2006, Sky Singer (225) writes:

breathless indeed. i'm sorry i took the haitus, but it was much-needed. and yes, my dear, i do miss our little chats ^.^ as always, an excellent work, friend.

On Friday February 24th, 2006, manywalks (972) writes:

This was.....elegant. ~ wen

On Wednesday February 15th, 2006, Drayvinio (15) writes:

Beautiful. Simply beautiful. Loved the emotions!

On Wednesday February 15th, 2006, Philla (142) writes:

Breathless....

On Wednesday February 15th, 2006, Velvet_Raventon (705) writes:

Talking about breathing, this left me breathless. Great work, wonderfully expressed emotions! ~V.

On Thursday February 9th, 2006, An Expired Member (7) writes:

Damn dude. I loved it. Strait foward with emotions.

On Wednesday February 8th, 2006, PoeticHellion (250) writes:

I love this. seriously. You are insane, and everything you write is fabulous, and exciting. I could keep up with the piece. Fast moving. A++

On Wednesday February 8th, 2006, An Expired Member (21) writes:

wow... this is a great write

On Sunday February 5th, 2006, saintedmad (995) writes:

reads like some final coup de gras, and the breathing... almost heard shakingly in and between the lines of need...so full....very rare write...

On Sunday February 5th, 2006, wonderlandhysteria (2195) writes:

This is gloriously painful..and I can't put words to how this has latched on and kept squeezing my heart..purity from emotion, formed by thought, written, signed as art. This is inspired..

On Friday February 3rd, 2006, Urban Shipwreck (1001) writes:

"breathe. but never blink- life exists on the brink between what we live and what we see." Fuck man. Heavy. Can't tell if the ending is a breath of relief or a breath of defeat for me, maybe a little of both.

On Friday February 3rd, 2006, NikesRain (1512) writes:

such an intense sadness and relenquishing feel, building in heaviness, heartbreaking and tearing to say the least... the ending the final undoing... outstanding

On Friday February 3rd, 2006, Raven (383) writes:

There's nothing I can say here that you don't know already. You know. *hugs*

On Friday February 3rd, 2006, dying angel (1373) writes:

wow to the millionth power...outstanding, freaking incredibule. god...you tore my soul apart in this.

On Friday February 3rd, 2006, Alanarchy (1615) writes:

Jesus... I logged in specifically to comment on this work, but now, as I reach to find the words I may as well be gropeing for the moon. You got to me here, man. Just phenomonal.

On Friday February 3rd, 2006, sIo (895) writes:

rip me in two. please.

On Friday February 3rd, 2006, Crumpled Dragonflies (111) writes:

"Yes. I'll be." I don't believe I can voice my opinions because they are silent and in contemplation. You have indeed awed me.

On Friday February 3rd, 2006, Crimson Shade (116) writes:

"life exists on the brink between what we live and what we see" - best line by far i think, so philosophical in its roots - second stanza stands out of the crowd here... fantastic write

On Friday February 3rd, 2006, indefined (726) writes:

you don't just paint words. you paint scenes in which the words emerge from. at least that is what verse 2 did for me, set a scene of you in my mind, the rest emerged from that.

On Friday February 3rd, 2006, James_the_Saint (131) writes:

You always enchant me with your poems. Love, again!

On Friday February 3rd, 2006, Anna Helianthus (1164) writes:

wow. just..wow. i can't come up with a coherent comment, and for that i am sorry. but this is beautiful, jon.

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