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Circle Yes or No

The terrifying grind of another 6 AM slips into her shoes.
She is no one, outside of my mind.
And I'd leave her that way if I could.

she fades to black. the back end of another bus
and the pen. scribbling, ink to her skin- her life story unfolds
beginning a new day the same way yesterday ends.
tedious monotony. a life in black and white
as she closes her eyes, drifting to her lie. her written life

Truth she'll find today.

A car crash of imagination pushes her to paper.
Silent dreams are now her symphony of reality as
the pretentious routine of her mind is blinded by the beauty in her hands.

escape in the form of metaphor- and the world can hear her cry
a sullen sigh. replaced by 'once upon a time'
and her fingers plant miracles. full bloom- upon a bed of nails
as her mind dances to the beat of a broken heart
and [time.stands.still] within her fairytale

She is to me what reason is to life. -Holy-
A manifest of amusement is her palette of creation, she is not green.
She is fierce, a politic,
a bartender serving lonely martinis and heart-splitting shots of Never Clear.

Poets Crush too easy. We can't stop falling. (in love)

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Co-written with Josh, aka Revolting Theatre

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On Monday December 5th, 2005, Esau (281) writes:

well, seems everyone else has already said everything. but, yet another piece of excellence.

On Saturday October 1st, 2005, An Expired Member (12) writes:

I adore it. The last line is brilliant. I might like to quote it. For an away message or something. Let me know if it'd be all right. I loved the line "scribbling, ink to her skin- her life story unfolds..." Makes me think of myself when I write.

On Monday July 11th, 2005, Tangle Box Tales (168) writes:

You make our art sound so beautiful when you depict it, and you make the need for running so clear when you brush a face on it in syllabled hues. I love your slideshow explanations and the way you manufacture thunder. and the ending ~ poets are such in

On Monday July 11th, 2005, Tangle Box Tales (168) writes:

poets are such interesting wildlife.

On Friday July 8th, 2005, Bakkhus Unbound (1114) writes:

"A car crash of imagination pushes her to paper." Beautiful. The opening line is perfect, pulled me under. And the final line cut my breath. Bravo!

On Saturday June 4th, 2005, peril_notion (122) writes:

"Poets Crush too easy. We can't stop falling. (in love)" Never has anyone hit so close to home... I'm sure we all relate. Excellent work. ~Heather

On Thursday June 2nd, 2005, Mr King (623) writes:

brilliant... beyond that i'm speechless

On Wednesday June 1st, 2005, Serenity (601) writes:

I cannot seem to find words to describe the perfection of this. So I shall say this was amazing beyound expression and beyond beautiful

On Wednesday June 1st, 2005, An Expired Member (21) writes:

Lovely, and so very true....."Poets Crush too easy. We can't stop falling. (in love) "

On Tuesday March 15th, 2005, Lydia Jade (788) writes:

...Your mind is so vast and endlessly, beautifully,..... tragic..

On Tuesday March 1st, 2005, Green-eyed Raven (69) writes:

I love it. *Raven*

On Sunday December 12th, 2004, Northstar (458) writes:

*gasp*

On Sunday December 12th, 2004, sIo (894) writes:

wow....

On Wednesday December 8th, 2004, Solace (1419) writes:

Faaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaantastic...Fav's...

On Wednesday December 8th, 2004, BleedSilver (374) writes:

Isn't that true. and I as a poet, have fallen in love with these words.

On Wednesday December 8th, 2004, Valentine (513) writes:

"Poets Crush too easy. We can’t stop falling. (in love)" . . outstanding write . . thats all i will say, for you have rendered me speechless, as you do so often. Both Josh and yourself make such a wonderful team :) . . Rose

On Tuesday December 7th, 2004, Twilight (2105) writes:

heh...oh man this is something sweet.i cant even tell you. everytime i read you lately jon...im left at a loss. for more than just words..i feel such a beautiful emptiness. and its something i crave. and josh...damn.

On Tuesday December 7th, 2004, An Expired Member (95) writes:

i will be a six-out whore and a dirk whore, because i love your style, sugar. dirk whore zay

On Monday December 6th, 2004, purr_verse (1439) writes:

Well, this is my fourth visit now to this piece and I still can't get a decent comment to form. Wonderfully powerful piece, metaphor within metaphor very impressively done... I love the opening line; could quote too much. Excellent.

On Monday December 6th, 2004, K_Love (698) writes:

"Poets Crush too easy. We can’t stop falling. (in love)" Wow... this was awesome. Perfectly written.. *favs*

On Monday December 6th, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (586) writes:

"a bartender serving lonely martinis and heart-splitting shots of Never Clear.". . whoa, beautiful piece. written by two magnificent writers, perfectly mixes the great talent of both of you in an odyssey. . pain filled, just an amazing work ;)

On Monday December 6th, 2004, An Expired Member (45) writes:

absoultely beautiful...wonderfully written

On Monday December 6th, 2004, frozen (751) writes:

that was beautifully done wonderful work

On Monday December 6th, 2004, Rachel (391) writes:

Second comment.

On Monday December 6th, 2004, Rachel (391) writes:

Now that I've gotten that out of the way... I can't really comment properly on this work. You two are two of my favorite writers on this site (you're both on my favorites list after all.) So it's not a surprise in the least that I love this work. It co

On Monday December 6th, 2004, Rachel (391) writes:

It combines both of your particular writing styles in an exceptionally graceful way. I love it. Not just love.. I fucking love it. Everything falls into place beautifully. This is an automatic favorite. *clicks button*

On Monday December 6th, 2004, Rachel (391) writes:

I want to say so much more... I want to comment on every line.. every word.. My words fail me, though, so you're left with this sad excuse for a comment. At the least, thank you for allowing me to be graced with the pleasure of reading this.

On Monday December 6th, 2004, stormtalk (912) writes:

first comment

On Monday December 6th, 2004, stormtalk (912) writes:

there... now that i've laid claim to this piece... i can comment freely. beautiful use of metaphor, alliteration, rhyme, punctuation... one of my favorite reads in quite a while... good work you two

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