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Go ahead, rip it out again, you'll only find ice.
Not so much fun when I refuse to bleed is it?
Not so much fun when I refuse to scream is it?
Who's on top now?
Sure i've become cold.
Sure i've pushed away from everyone I love.
But at least I win!
At least you will never defeat me again.
This is the price that I have chosen to pay.
Cut me up as much as you want.
You won't get a single drop from me.
You thought you had me down but i've come back
To shove my bitter tasting victory down your throat.
I wanna see you choke on it.
I wanna see you cough and vomit and suffer.
You made my life Hell, I wanna return the favor now.
I only wish that I could take direct offensive.
What I would give to watch you bleed for once.
To watch the knife go in
And be chased out by a stream of vile rotten blood...
But instead I must defeat you by stopping your attacks. And I have found a shield.
Ice is my shield, I fill my veins with it
Just to beat you, don't ever doubt how far I will go...



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On Tuesday February 6th, 2007, GreyDividing (194) writes:
Now that's what I call heavy metal. Write on!


On Thursday January 5th, 2006, An Expired Member (34) writes:
Ice is a great metaphor. I've felt that way on and off for a while.. it means so much. I will go on to read more of yours ..I much like it. -Salem


On Sunday August 28th, 2005, abattoir (144) writes:
burrr...this was cold, driven, maddeningly angry. sick fuckin wrt.I loved it.abattoir


On Tuesday July 12th, 2005, island warrior (300) writes:
Cold and calculating write.I love it.


On Monday July 11th, 2005, Full blame (33) writes:
I've read this over a good many times. the lines read me without fail. good expression. favorites definently


On Tuesday May 17th, 2005, Ice Dragoness (18) writes:
I suppose I would be partial to the subject... The mental images painted within this piece are golden...


On Friday May 13th, 2005, BleedSilver (373) writes:
This is very good. I like your idea behind it.


On Thursday May 12th, 2005, Labitina (45) writes:
I really relate to this it's an awesome write you had a point and you made it very nice


On Monday May 9th, 2005, Serenity (592) writes:
This is powerful! I love it awesome job :)


On Monday May 9th, 2005, Forgotten Angel (474) writes:
yeah, i agree w/ Elise, somebody has hurt you bad..and this is one of the ways to vent..and protect urself (poem n the ice thing) i personally put a wall around my heart..and im very weary..great write n welcome 2 DP! -Kel


On Monday May 9th, 2005, happilydepressed (213) writes:
great write


On Monday May 9th, 2005, Elise (263) writes:
For someone new at this, you'd never know by reading your works. Someone has hurt you to the point where they can't get in anymore, powerful.


On Monday May 9th, 2005, Eladrim (61) writes:
wow you hit that right on


On Sunday May 8th, 2005, Eladrim (61) writes:
I don't know why i can't reply to comments...so i'll do it this way. thanks for the welcome kristy and the approval WhiteHorse. As my profile states i'm very new at this so i appreciate comments


On Monday May 9th, 2005, Eladrim (61) writes:
*testing reply*


On Sunday May 8th, 2005, VenomPlease (178) writes:
So raw and powerful. Nice ending as well. Great work


On Sunday May 8th, 2005, Sin (1623) writes:
trading love for apathy...what a bitter demise and what a price to pay to not feel pain...welcome to DP ~kristy



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