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"His Winter" by your_only_love

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      This parchment has shredded beneath my fingers. I can remember it. I can still feel the pieces fall apart, damp and sticky, clingy and without form.
      Yet here it is, and my blood is no longer splashed across the lines, no longer burning through the words.
      There are no words, but the pen is in my hand, its quill razor-sharp, and the paper quivers masochistically.

      I paste images of the winter to cover it, hide the sun-yellowed lines and dust. The snow collects dirt, the washed up grime of city sins, and I trace angels out around my translucent figure.

      “They’re just images,” the dead reflections whisper to me. I hear them cackle with my voice, and I wonder who made whom. A baby chick fresh from the egg, cursed, a frozen body with a future forged in the ice.

      “Let me whisper,” she begs. Her eyes speak it all- she begs him to leave, but closes the shutters, looks away. Just come back to me. The words sting with the commonality.

      The time ticks on. The hour hands of the clock have the sharpest blade, writing out the letters the pen was too afraid to speak. And each bloom the flower puts forth measures another flake of snow.

     Somewhere, it’s summer now.

     But here and now, to leave the fire of blood and friendship, love and lust, is to freeze in the drifts of eternity.



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On Sunday January 27th, 2008, BoldSolitude (277) writes:
Taking your instruction of constructive comments and no bullshit praise here is my opinion. First I'll start with the bullshit praise: I think it is all well written and and you create images so easily in my head it makes me feel like i'm there. I do really like it.


On Sunday January 27th, 2008, BoldSolitude (277) writes:
However, for the constructive comments I would say that the two stanza's that start with “They’re just images,” “Let me whisper,” don't seem to fit with the way rest of the poem is told. I think those stanzas are still good but you may want to put them in another poem. Other than that I would remove the line that says "And each bloom the flower puts forth measures another flake of snow." for some reason it doesn't seem to fit


On Sunday January 27th, 2008, BoldSolitude (277) writes:
I like "The snow collects dirt, the washed up grime of city sins" the best. It really captures you


On Monday December 3rd, 2007, your_only_love (163) writes:
*laughs* the irony is, I was trying to head away from that, but the images I was given made it rather unavoidable, and in the end, I decided it fit.


On Sunday December 2nd, 2007, Aunty Depressant (711) writes:
I like the tangible analogy within..cutting.



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