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As Yet Untitled

My convulsing mind throbs to the thought
Of the downfall my pride has brought
And sorrow fills my being with fire
That burns so intensely without tire

When I think of the things I did wrong
I know that I did them not to be strong
But rather to pass the gruelling test
To finally attain status of being the best

In my shadows eye do I see
All the things handed to me
And none of this will truly do
Until the day I rise above you

I will last that little bit longer
I will grow infinitely stronger

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On Friday February 11th, 2005, An Expired Member (8) writes:

this is a great poem definately adding it to my favorites

On Sunday September 21st, 2003, Nadir (615) writes:

Shame on the shameless, Tears on a dying soul, Where shall tears fall? Shame is gone. Tiger

On Tuesday August 19th, 2003, _Andrew_ (298) writes:

awesome write, crazily good, especially at the end, jus sick as hell man *~*aNDReW*~*

On Tuesday August 19th, 2003, urbanhumility (1374) writes:

i feel this one sleek, it is powerful, and flows well. we must look inward and bring forth that what will make us stronger.......well done.....urban

On Tuesday August 19th, 2003, TropicalSnowstorm (751) writes:

Wonderful flow - great one! Ciao, T/S

On Saturday August 16th, 2003, manywalks (947) writes:

...In my shadow's eye I do see...damn, what a perfect line. Loved this piece, very nice texture to it, thanks. ~ mw

On Saturday August 16th, 2003, Dancing_Monkey (1761) writes:

This is great, you are the master rimer.. Monkey

On Thursday August 14th, 2003, Audrey_Star (29) writes:

"Of the downfall my pride has brought" a great line and a great piece. but it almost reads like it could use more.but the fact that it feels like it could use more only makes it better because it leaves the reader with the ability to conclude the thought

On Tuesday August 12th, 2003, Delphoid-Q (255) writes:

Nice, Chris... I especially like the image of, 'my shadow's eye'. Original and meaningful. Well done.

On Monday August 11th, 2003, Aurora_Light (575) writes:

very nice indeed, to keep going is the best thing we can do to raise up ur pride.

On Monday August 11th, 2003, Ophelia (305) writes:

very nice the flow was beautiful................O.

On Monday August 11th, 2003, An Expired Member (42) writes:

I'm diggin this. Invinsible. Lovin it. ^aura^

On Monday August 11th, 2003, boughtwithblood (293) writes:

cool stuff Greek. i was able to identify most with the first stanza. in the third stanza, i think you could drop " [DO] I see" it might flow better without that..

On Monday August 11th, 2003, Six-Out (1798) writes:

I hate you.

On Monday October 6th, 2003, An Expired Member (3) writes:

I love this. you really write good.. GrTz

On Wednesday October 15th, 2003, Lydia Jade (783) writes:

wow! just wow! ~ Blood~

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