DarkPoetry -|- Dr Benway -|- They told me I paid my debt to society, I laughed.

They told me I paid my debt to society, I laughed.

I can't believe I am standing here again,
trying to clear it all from my mind,
waiting, wishing for it all to burn away.

It was never suppose to be like this,
This was never part of our deal.
"Ok I've learned my lesson,
You've made your point,
now please let me go home!"

Back then I painted a golden landscape,
and wrote of a fantastic mind fuck.
These days I forget my own middle name,
and yesterday they came to take my car.

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On Tuesday January 9th, 2007, flying_fox (764) writes:

wow - talk about hard-hitting words. The gentle beginning makes the ending all the more powerful. great write.

On Saturday September 30th, 2006, Astra Dei (632) writes:

Oh god. . . that last stanza was amazing. kudos

On Tuesday May 9th, 2006, Elegant Kiss (263) writes:

I always come around and hope you've peeped in.. It saddens me greatly. I worry about you too much.

On Wednesday January 11th, 2006, TaintedButterfly (1021) writes:

It read to me like you were gonna just give up but something kept you going anyway, despite losing it all. That's how I read it. I liked this a LOT! Awesome.

On Saturday April 23rd, 2005, Trichotillomaniac (49) writes:

I enjoyed the last line, it made it laugh. I'm sorry if this wasn't your intent.

On Thursday March 31st, 2005, A Velvet Tongue (527) writes:

life sucks rat shit and then we must face the fire and walk on coals...hardly seems fair..but this write is honest..and that is what I love about you...Muah

On Thursday February 10th, 2005, Zara Synn (75) writes:

I really liked this...especially the first two lines of the last stanza. I'm glad to see you have the power to take horrible life experiences and turn them into beautiful words.

On Monday February 7th, 2005, An Expired Member (29) writes:

haha! i really liked this, but one thing i want to point out... "dept" is spelled with a b. ive also had some issues with previous accounts. i just started up again today. good luck! it looks like you dont need it though...

On Tuesday February 8th, 2005, Dr Benway (51) writes:

Thanks, I missed that, only bothered spell checking the poem, not the title :)

On Sunday January 30th, 2005, Brenya Rose (187) writes:

Very wow. This really defines this bitchiness of life.

On Saturday January 29th, 2005, ShardsofSilence (325) writes:

direct, straight to the point, original and interesting write. nice work

On Saturday January 29th, 2005, Alec Pure (328) writes:

i like how you just got to the fucking point on this one by the way you were right about the poem of mine you commented on

On Saturday January 29th, 2005, sIo (845) writes:

i agree with phant-this was an interesting and truly original piece.

On Sunday February 13th, 2005, sIo (845) writes:

i have to say...reading this again i don't understand it...one....bit...

On Wednesday January 26th, 2005, stormtalk (881) writes:

Very interesting write... the nonsequitur taste of the last stanza really pulled it together. There's something very harsh and raw about how you write, almost as if you're vomiting up your words; choking on them, but feeling better after for it.

On Saturday January 22nd, 2005, frozen (741) writes:

This was a great poem.

On Friday January 21st, 2005, call to arms (38) writes:

The last 2 lines are devestating, but they pull this together soooo nicely. This as a wonderfully written piece.

On Friday January 21st, 2005, call to arms (38) writes:

I just re-read this and decided that I am in love with it. ::adds to favorites::

On Friday January 21st, 2005, The Crimson Queen (1221) writes:

sad....but we make our own decisions in life...nice write. ~A

On Friday January 21st, 2005, Emptyness Inside Me (194) writes:

damn that must suck, great write ~Emptyness~

On Friday January 21st, 2005, Six-Out (1798) writes:

It's a bitch, ain't it?

On Friday July 29th, 2005, Six-Out (1798) writes:

I still love this this.

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