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eraser dust

three hundred
thousand mountains
of eraser dust

unable to capture
eyes like those
imperfect lips
(i like it that way)
in a sky unmatched in
three hundred
thousand years
of revolving
in a breathless
fish tank
of fireflies
a moment so long
(i felt myself grow)
it hit
that a living beathing
forest
forced into
three hundred
thousand sheets
of chemically treated
possibility
could not capture
a moment that
belongs to two
by one

three hundred
thousand piles
of eraser dust

i would know
ive tried

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On Monday August 13th, 2007, Dancing_Monkey (1879) writes:

I love returning to this

On Saturday August 11th, 2007, Mylissa (1130) writes:

I'm impressed deeply with this.

On Saturday June 23rd, 2007, carlosjackal (1611) writes:

Man, that yearning to capture that moment of absolute gorgeous beauty who stares right at you with eyes that want you. The struggle to do so, wonderfully captured here. -Carl

On Monday April 2nd, 2007, OttOEviL (98) writes:

This was a badass write my friend... -_OttO_-

On Saturday September 16th, 2006, Railway_Butterfly (477) writes:

I was moved by this again tonight. It fills me with pretty sadness, for some reason. I feel like I want to cry.

On Tuesday December 27th, 2005, Bakkhus Unbound (1119) writes:

"three hundred thousand piles of eraser dust" What a concept. Love the feel of this piece, like all that eraser dust it keeps building even after the poem has finished...

On Tuesday January 4th, 2005, Exodus (224) writes:

the sweetest poem i've read by far....what can i say....its simply lovely..

On Wednesday November 24th, 2004, AlluringDescent_darkbride (803) writes:

I've read this prolly 30 times now and I still can't come up with a comment that would explain my thoughts on this poem. But I had to let you know that I'll read 30 more just to try...

On Monday November 8th, 2004, sIo (895) writes:

realistic and heartbreaking.

On Saturday June 19th, 2004, Lydia Jade (796) writes:

brilliance hardly describes it....beatifull....simply beautifull

On Tuesday November 25th, 2003, Amandasauris rex (72) writes:

i just had to say Eraser Dust is fucking Brillant! I often indulge myself on the thoughts of a girl so perfect no amount of words or paper or ink could capture the pure essence of her being. I thought i had it......ha -Kittens friend

On Tuesday August 19th, 2003, Deliverence (813) writes:

Its good stuff man. Your like a write of kodak moments or sumthin.-Kefka

On Saturday August 9th, 2003, Marek (145) writes:

Definately more original, a different method of description, I see those synapses have changed their patterns. Cool stuff man

On Saturday August 9th, 2003, An Expired Member (5) writes:

Hmmm... Interesting... I like it though... *Nadia

On Friday August 8th, 2003, Griffin (135) writes:

nice

On Friday August 8th, 2003, Blood of Winter (375) writes:

incredible, truely vivid

On Friday August 8th, 2003, Nadir (631) writes:

Wuaow ... whata-whata! Hah i loved it you got the thing going man. Its all yours. Ill read more of your stuff now.

On Thursday August 7th, 2003, Bast (1007) writes:

i love this! and i know exactly what you mean. :D i'm an all right artist, but i could never hope to capture the moments, the people i wish to...

On Wednesday August 6th, 2003, Amandasauris rex (72) writes:

Dave, this is unlike any of your other work I have read. It's okay, but I like your other works. Can't wait for your next one. *kitten*

On Tuesday August 5th, 2003, Demosthenes (226) writes:

i am completely without talent in the wordingness of comments. therefore ill just tell you i love it, just like i do to everything you write. *goes and makes MORE dave groupie t-shirts* -B

On Tuesday August 5th, 2003, Stranger (291) writes:

Gorgeous words. It would take four hundred thousand mountains of eraser dust to produce a comment worthy of its beauty.

On Monday August 4th, 2003, Inevitability (645) writes:

I can see you, trying to capture the beauty of your woman, the beauty of the world that is her backdrop, and not capturing it in a sketch, you instead caught it in words...

On Monday August 4th, 2003, Inevitability (645) writes:

this is so damn good, Dave..really... when you joined, I wasn't so into what you wrote, didn't like it much, but you've grown so much in such a short time...

On Monday August 4th, 2003, Inevitability (645) writes:

if I was the one responsible I could be proud, but as I'm just watching it happen, I'm just in awe, little boy turning into a man...

On Tuesday August 5th, 2003, Jonas (885) writes:

i absolutely love what comes out of your brain... this is beautiful... eraser dust/i tried... the metaphor is mcnifty supersized... trying eternally to capture that beauty

On Monday August 4th, 2003, SageoPhoneus (147) writes:

It's like I'm tripping while reading this, brings some vivid memories back. Good write

On Monday August 4th, 2003, Armand (73) writes:

some really brilliant, muse-inspired lines. a profoundly mature piece.

On Sunday August 3rd, 2003, A Velvet Tongue (532) writes:

wow I had to read it twice and it is simply beautiful...The mountains of dust, so vivid in the minds eye. Love the metaphoricals used in this too, Always , your stuff is great babe..Thanx! ~Vel~

On Sunday August 3rd, 2003, Six-Out (1832) writes:

Dave, you are such a crack baby, good write whore.

On Sunday August 3rd, 2003, Dommi_of_Baphomet (112) writes:

this makes me wanna escape and experience.. you are simply one of the best, dave. <3always Dommi

On Sunday August 3rd, 2003, DoctorAsh (512) writes:

hmmmm, i like this one a-lot mr.super pee .. its very strong in it's contentual metaphoric blast of rainy soda like writing droppings. Excellent piece. [D&A]

On Sunday August 3rd, 2003, hate_doll (331) writes:

ooh...I love..it reads so well, and creates such an image in my mind. I could read this over and over...and be even more impressed with it everytime. Amazing...

On Saturday August 2nd, 2003, cre (532) writes:

Ohh .. I like this moment you have captured. Nothing else could quite compare . . . exquisite write . . .

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