DarkPoetry -|- King_Crazy_Dave -|- I'm relieved.

I'm relieved.

It’s been a seemingly slaughter filled
Teeter totter built
To drip unbalanced
To told you so soil
Soiling the perfect innocence we
Come to expect to be free of
Far too soon
And I’ve
Made more than a couple car wrecks
Worth of reasons to
Run and
Rewrite my memories with
This exciting new life we paint the
Other side greener with.

And all along the push and shove
I never smelled the rotting love
I somehow burn up in the static
To you it seems I am an addict

Consider this a crystal vase with
Roses and a dinner and
Me all washed up
Free of greed
A gift or five or
Take what you need

I’m done playing off negative feedback

We look to crash soon
I know we wont
We had to worry
Now we don’t.

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On Monday August 4th, 2008, bloody LOVEly (112) writes:

you give me the feeling that the people i would most enjoy to meet will never be real to me. it's been good enough to know your words, Crazy Dave.

On Wednesday July 9th, 2008, Dancing_Monkey (1763) writes:

Lyricaly sweet. I'd favor you again if I could.

On Tuesday July 8th, 2008, wilted (307) writes:

Definitely sing-songy. The whole thing was so well put together that I hardly noticed it rhymed. It was so natural and flowed so well. Lovely.

On Tuesday July 8th, 2008, wilted (307) writes:

Of course i mean.. I hardly noticed it rhymed... where it did. Of course, of course.

On Tuesday July 8th, 2008, insanemonroe (35) writes:

wow i like it alot, your quite a talented writer very good read. ~katiemonroe~

On Monday July 7th, 2008, glasshouse (780) writes:

this kills. rips. drags me to tears and you are one of my favorite writers ever to touch a word with golden fingers. glorious. i hated it. write more.

On Sunday July 6th, 2008, Alanarchy (1704) writes:

Could easily be a really, really cool song. I love that couplet stanza in the middle. It's a vocals solo over a sinister bass line. "a gift or five or take what you need." Write on.

On Friday July 11th, 2008, Bast (895) writes:

I think that was the line that struck me- "a gift or five". You're a brick hidden in a bouquet of daisies.

On Sunday July 6th, 2008, Evil (547) writes:

i'll come back with something to say. i promise.

On Friday September 19th, 2008, Evil (547) writes:

you have all the talent in the world, even though you may not believe it. you break my heart every time you spill lines of honestly like this. i love you, dave.

On Sunday July 6th, 2008, Lipstick Whore (469) writes:

Cool, cool write. Very creative.

On Sunday July 6th, 2008, elisa (1990) writes:

very matter of fact... notches and all. i like.

On Sunday July 6th, 2008, Bunny Manic Moon (611) writes:

*wonders how the hell you do it* ^_^ likes this, it bends in just the perfect places

On Sunday July 6th, 2008, Six-Out (1820) writes:

Don't rewrite, just throw the book away and stick with crayons. the world would be a brighter place that way.

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