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Mend

The world is alive with
brilliant colors
I try to blend in
but I'm not like the others

My heart once lively, vibrant and red
Now feels cold, life less and dead

I want to enjoy life: the here and now
but death is all around me and I don't know how

my cries won't stop
the pain won't end
my soul is numb
my heart won't mend

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On Thursday February 14th, 2008, wilted (303) writes:

Lovely and simple. Seems as if it ends sort of abruptly. But i kind of like it that way.

On Thursday July 20th, 2006, mywristshurt (524) writes:

beautifully put.. your words flow gracefully together and you have a good way to write.. i like it

On Thursday July 20th, 2006, Soulfire (117) writes:

Thank you all for your comments and criticism..my poetry is constantly evolving. This one doesn't feel complete, but I just put my shit out there and let it evolve with me.

On Friday July 21st, 2006, The Zebra Warrior (2407) writes:

and thats how to learn, amen to that - but don't be afraid to take your time to develop poems.Like children , they don't grasp everything from the get go. Winks* good luck...Col.

On Thursday July 20th, 2006, AniDayz (1267) writes:

flowing...a procession, a process...of mending...this feels/tastes like a .begining.to me, riding upon the breakwater(s) of breath, anew...

On Thursday July 20th, 2006, Alec Pure (334) writes:

have to agree with the hatter here, it didn't do enough say enough really but your rhyme scheme was quite goood and didnt break for that good job ~GAP~

On Thursday July 20th, 2006, The Zebra Warrior (2407) writes:

straight foward with the rhyme pattern s and choices of words, didn't do enough for me, yes it produces it's melody, but to obviously for me, sorry to say. I admire anyone's will to men though, just make the poems stand out.

On Thursday July 20th, 2006, elisa (2017) writes:

living in a weakened state of strength.....gathering pieces of the whole.....curing the cancer of apathy.....i admire your will to mend.

On Thursday July 20th, 2006, Father_Faust (12) writes:

I beleive you just described half the population, so much better than most could for themselves

On Thursday July 20th, 2006, braindead_poet (581) writes:

a painful existance it is to not be able to fix that which is broken. Gather the pieces, reassemble what's left in dedication, and stumble into tomorrow. Life begins when we let it end.... understood and able to relate.

On Thursday July 20th, 2006, Ozymandias (58) writes:

Simple, and beautiful. I just love it.

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