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making love [is this it?]

Version I

I would like
to make
love
to you
if
you
would
love me
like I matter
to you
do
I

?

do not wait
for me
to
make
the moves
just go ahead
and kiss
me
because
I am scared
that you
do not
want
me
.

do you?

Version II

I would like
to make
love
[or sex]
to you
if
you
would
love me
[lust however is fine]
like I matter
to you
[or arouse you]
do
I
[not necessarily matter, but do you want my body?]
?

do not wait
for me
to
make
the moves
[I’m a bit paranoid you’ll laugh]
just go ahead
and kiss
me
[or fuck me]
because
I am scared
that you
do not
want
me
[am I sexy enough for you?]
.

do you?
[my mouth is dry and panties wet]

Version III

I would like
to make
love
to you
[not sex]
if
you
would
love me
[as a whole, mind and body]
like I matter
to you
[as earth and universe]
do
I

?

do not wait
for me
[if you love me]
to
make
the moves
just go ahead
and kiss
me
[but gently with depth in mind]
because
I am scared
that you
do not
want
me
[to fulfil your own self]
.

do you?
[please love me]

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On Thursday May 22nd, 2008, Velvet_Raventon (695) writes:

Short and sweet, yet overflowing with emotions. Nicely done. ~V.

On Monday April 17th, 2006, elisa (2021) writes:

yes..... just the words i was looking for......speaks for itself, this does.

On Monday April 17th, 2006, Err0r (575) writes:

Lolz I love you. :D Lolz *Faves*

On Wednesday April 12th, 2006, AniDayz (1281) writes:

dammit. this is absolute. fantastic. ...my comments are failing...this is stellar.

On Monday March 20th, 2006, Vicious Pixie (52) writes:

wow....it's like every sexual encounter i've ever had all wrapped into one delicious piece of work.....i likes

On Saturday February 4th, 2006, Michelle Xiao (507) writes:

Wow, this is hot. the intellectual deconstruction and the naked sexual energy.

On Friday January 27th, 2006, Alanarchy (1600) writes:

beckon hither, and coy. all at once. I love this one. Need without compromise, but the rules still apply. I love the composition of this, it conveys a sense of... not sure... frantic indecision, maybe? Ownage.

On Sunday January 8th, 2006, Mistress Shadow (356) writes:

I like version one the best and this actually made me angry at men for having such control in the way you presented this topic. This piece is well written and thought out. ~T

On Sunday January 8th, 2006, stuart_pid (217) writes:

i love this. it evolves very nicely but it seems like version I manages to already say what version II and III say but with a little more interpretation on the part of the reader. at any rate its amazing and that very first stanza is so pure and beautiful

On Sunday January 8th, 2006, stuart_pid (217) writes:

i am impressed as always

On Sunday January 8th, 2006, Ainsof (1820) writes:

oh yeah, sweet dreams tonight...what's the thermostat at? I kinda like the way each of the subtle changes from one version to the next reveals more, like self commentary or something...repetition with a difference (Derrida)

On Sunday January 8th, 2006, Ainsof (1820) writes:

So beautifully seductive and gentle, so penetrating and completely vulnerable; I think I now understand (too late) why my ex rarely initiated sex...thanks

On Saturday January 7th, 2006, Johny_D_Lewis (607) writes:

we all love you on here, this is a down to earth and yet very romantic peace

On Thursday January 5th, 2006, dying angel (1343) writes:

I liked Version III the most. ~*~Dying_Angel~*~

On Thursday January 5th, 2006, Err0r (575) writes:

...awe. :( I like version two, couldn't we just stay there for awhile and dance among the hesitance and insecurity? :) Beautiful write.

On Wednesday January 4th, 2006, blue (1749) writes:

I'll go ahead and echo what everyone else has said here.. masterful pin pointed accuracy in poetic motion here. Take a bow lady, take a bow. =) ~b

On Wednesday January 4th, 2006, Raven (378) writes:

This is achingly beautiful. .."because I am scared that you do not want me"... made me sigh brokenly. It hit unexpected chords in a masterful way.

On Wednesday January 4th, 2006, Sin (1637) writes:

this was done masterfully in your sexy intellectual way...the longing and doubt bleed through the words...lovely write ~kristy

On Wednesday January 4th, 2006, braindead_poet (581) writes:

this is more than great. i love it.

On Wednesday January 4th, 2006, Anna Helianthus (1160) writes:

I am drawn to this, almost, like a moth to a flame..it reveals many emotions towards this act in such a perfectly imaginative manner. Fabulously done, and thank you for sharing this.

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