"The Collage" by Soulseeker
| Six-Out |
| stormtalk |
| Anth |
| Angel With The Scabbed Wings |
| MEATGRINDER MAN |
| A bit on the possessive side |
| These Tears (Bittersweet Time) |
| A True Heart Break |
| The PoeT's giFt/The PoEt's CurSe |
| The Struggle For Sincerity |
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As I look back to acknowledge what I have become,
all I see is your face. Maybe it is the only impact that counted to change all of my views, my outlook, and opinions. Some for the better. Some for the worst. Now the new says let go... Let go of you, let go of the past. How can I use lessons learned if I just let go? Memories of the bridge haunts me the most, all of the empty promises, all of the echoing laughter, all of the designed pain. How I so easily threw trust around, almost as carlessly as you threw the word "love" around. With no concept of the definition, with no concept of the emotional baggage. My mind is now a collage. You. Me. Him. Broken to peices, scattered about, resulting in the ultimate picture of life as shattered glass. The mixture of pain, the mixture of happiness, minus my reflection. Copyright 2004 Soulseeker
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On Saturday August 21st, 2004, MEATGRINDER MAN (510) writes:
Reminds me of being trapped inside a kaleidoscope. Very good. ~Shane~
On Sunday August 8th, 2004, Blood of Winter (367) writes:
this is definitely a little bit heart wrenching, but the end real brings things into a knew focus...keep up the good work.
On Wednesday August 4th, 2004, stormtalk (908) writes:
Quite an original and beautiful concept... and good work not rhyming. I think that by freeing yourself of rhyme schemes, your poem stuck more closely to the original topic and dove more deeply into it.
On Thursday August 5th, 2004, stormtalk (908) writes:
My suggestion for improvement is that you spread the same analogy (the collage) throughout the poem and use words that would be associated with it (glue, cut-outs, colors, etc.) to describe what you want to describe.
On Thursday August 5th, 2004, stormtalk (908) writes:
"Shattered glass" is an example of a spot where you could do that. Overall, though, great work - and once again, I think not rhyming for a while will put you on the path to some amazing work. Keep it up!
On Tuesday August 3rd, 2004, OLd SouL (837) writes:
a unique way to describe a familiar feeling... you will never forget.. it only fades.. I enjoyed the read ;) :::OLd
On Tuesday August 3rd, 2004, MEATGRINDER MAN (510) writes:
This reminds me of "Humpty Dumpty." The big difference is you put yourself back together again, picked up, & moved on.
Few of us are so lucky. ---Shane
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