"One Eye Weeping" by Soulseeker
| Six-Out |
| stormtalk |
| anth |
| Angel With The Scabbed Wings |
| MEATGRINDER MAN |
| A bit on the possessive side |
| These Tears (Bittersweet Time) |
| A True Heart Break |
| The PoeT's giFt/The PoEt's CurSe |
| The Struggle For Sincerity |
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Green iris filled with pain,
crying is proof of being sane. One eye remains weeping, whether I am walking or sleeping. The other eye is open and fully aware, it does all the thinking while the other is in despair. A new tear emerges with every blink. It;s not that you have won if that's what you think. I've lost me, found me, and got lost some more; but always regrouped when I fell to the floor. Pain was found, hope was lost; I never knew "love" had a cost. Yet the fact remains that beauty has a curse, but everyone sees the glory first. My heart has found no "forever" remaining, but the thought was always entertaining. So just as truth always peeks through, my one eye weeping will remain too. Copyright 2004 Soulseeker
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On Sunday October 3rd, 2004, FallenFaith (47) writes:
This is my favorite of yours so far. This poem has to have some of your true emotions mixed into it, it couldnt be just randomn writing. You are very talented, GO TO THE POET CONVENTION!
On Friday September 24th, 2004, An Expired Member (6) writes:
Very illustrative and holds an astonishing emotional deepness to it
On Saturday August 21st, 2004, MEATGRINDER MAN (510) writes:
My own eyes are green. Introspection never sleeps. I agree w/Lifeless here.
:-)
On Friday August 6th, 2004, DarkWolf (447) writes:
"I've lost me, found me, and got lost some more..." I love this line. I really like the way you write, it's lovely. Thank you for sharing your works. -Michael
On Tuesday August 3rd, 2004, Lifeless (59) writes:
I liked your message here. Very strong and passionate too.
On Tuesday August 3rd, 2004, stormtalk (909) writes:
Nicely done. I like the content of your poems very much, although I think it would hit harder and be more intriguing if you let yourself give up AA BB CC rhyme schemes.
On Tuesday August 3rd, 2004, Dolly_Fatale (31) writes:
i adore the contrast in this...and adore it even more due to how much i can relate
On Thursday July 29th, 2004, ONEANDLONELY (137) writes:
i llike your work ...you are talented...but...this piece is especially good...but...don't get me wrong...i read you
On Thursday July 29th, 2004, anth (1611) writes:
i really understood this one, i love how youve expressed more clearly this thought, excellent work
On Monday July 26th, 2004, An Expired Member (15) writes:
love the metaphors, beautiful words...but maybe try some things that don't rhyme? you might find it easier to flow. great job none the less.
On Saturday July 24th, 2004, An Expired Member (13) writes:
I liked how you had the one weeping eye and the one open and fully aware eye...its very interesting.
On Wednesday July 21st, 2004, Railway_Butterfly (464) writes:
But other than that,this was a good piece...just maybe be a little more careful with the rhythm of your pieces...nice work..Butterfly..xxx...
On Wednesday July 21st, 2004, Railway_Butterfly (464) writes:
To be honest,i'm not really a huge fan of rhyme...For rhyme to work well,in my opinon the flow has to be very strong,and I feel it was perhaps a little inconsistant in this piece...perhaps its just me...
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