DarkPoetry -|- toy soldier -|- next to you.

next to you.

i sit here thinking
thinking of what to say
what to say to make
make your pain go away

all you ever gave me
is just what any one would want
and when you'd say i love you
i played it nonchalant

but now its too late
late to take it back
because im the one that made
made your heart become so black

and now i see you're happy
its hard to say, but true
you're much happier with out me
standing next to you.

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On Monday January 10th, 2005, stormtalk (908) writes:

The repetition of words definitely adds to the hesitation and feeling of regret behind this... I enjoyed how it moved from compassion to nonchalance to guilt... it was both masterful and simple.

On Wednesday December 8th, 2004, MEATGRINDER MAN (510) writes:

I like this piece of yours best.

On Monday November 29th, 2004, Crystal Passion (257) writes:

Nice piece, a blackened heart is better than heartless anyday.

On Saturday November 27th, 2004, An Expired Member (12) writes:

i like it...its beautiful!

On Sunday October 17th, 2004, lordshadow (213) writes:

Short is sometimes best... you're awesome.

On Wednesday September 29th, 2004, Savannah (290) writes:

this is so sad.. you sound deeply sorry for hurting this person

On Saturday September 25th, 2004, darkangelXlll (175) writes:

wow this is real good.. even though i felt like it should be longer... ~darlin :)

On Saturday September 25th, 2004, Six-Out (1827) writes:

It seems....short. I like this for where it can go...add to it, and it'll be great... I can feel it.

On Wednesday August 18th, 2004, An Expired Member (11) writes:

i think you need to keep writing you got that

On Wednesday August 18th, 2004, evolve (2293) writes:

The thought behind this is pure, but the rhyme seems a bit forced. Show us some of your non-rhyming works.

On Monday August 9th, 2004, Butterfly (122) writes:

Baby this is so awesome. I hate when you say you can't write. Loved it. *~*Black-Heart*~*

On Thursday August 5th, 2004, Whisper (137) writes:

A nice write, but it needs a ttle :) -BT-

On Saturday July 31st, 2004, sixsixnine (567) writes:

i agree! except i think this is a master piece! *669*

On Friday July 30th, 2004, Soulseeker (120) writes:

Very good write.... Bethany

On Friday July 30th, 2004, An Expired Member (15) writes:

I liked it , and the flow was okay.Good Job.

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