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this rage dignifies
escalates the erosion chilled within a calamity as a sadness multiplies across a corrosion of an iris eternal thinking between this sombre secret facets of a crystal pen dwelling long in silence save me from these hollow pages a lasting distress calling from the warming caress a soul shard recess where the thought will compress to write a page is to surely depress a wandering flame never here never there yet strangely there is no stress express an empty glass and find it never filled wasteful excess on the brink of an early winter success apon the glass will lay the face betray the maidens finest lace up on the mantle lies the case bringing her tears from mace making any sense? does it need to make sense? of course not my friend my lime i can simply twist this rhyme swirl the sheet and spin the dime but what is yours and what is mine? easy peasey lemon fucking squeezy with weezey from a breezey fo sheezey sneezey on my hankercheesey while I spit in your fucking face shit that didn't rhyme holy baby jesus on a stick i've lost the beat the time quick jack you godamn lack fry your ass on the candlewick I ramble as you rave I hunger as you crave I finger as you wave I crush as you save monotonous like the factory line at dawn eyelids wavering in the mist of early morn last night was fire in a bookshelf of porn and a scarecrow ate all my damn corn simple like the thoughts that divide listless as the eyes that do provide repetition of words that should hide and you wonder why i'm being so snide a free write does not necessarily excite but god please save me from the inane that should combust burn and ignite before they all drive me insane this rage rectifies diminish the explosion warmed outside hope as a madness multiplies upside an implosion of an iris eternal moaning between these sombre secrets dribbles of a sodden pen dwelling not long enough in the blessed silence all I see are these hollow pages © Aaron Mader
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On Wednesday April 26th, 2006, An Expired Member (60) writes:
my mind... so many thoughts
damn man
i love it!'
On Monday April 17th, 2006, The Fool (1001) writes:
This was awesome I just loved it to bits, it just played with my mind with it's tune, it drove me mad:)
On Friday April 14th, 2006, island warrior (302) writes:
I must admit most of my work is of the rhyming variety but I still enjoyed this light-hearted dig.
On Wednesday April 12th, 2006, TaintedButterfly (1056) writes:
Well I hope you "get it out" more often because this really kicks ass! I thought it was brilliant, as your work always is. With a touch of humor. Loved it! Julia~
On Wednesday April 12th, 2006, NikesRain (1422) writes:
stinging and lashing with your own brand of 'stomping on the dandelions' this just had me fitted with a quirky half grin and amazed as always
On Tuesday April 11th, 2006, JackHyde (7) writes:
Rhyme was not my favorite but it did not distract me from the emotion of the piece.
Well done and thanks for sharing.
On Tuesday April 11th, 2006, SilentStalker (1320) writes:
...all I do is rhyme, and this made me laugh my ass off, since I can see how rhymes piss people off, especially when the writer has no clue how to use them...
On Tuesday April 11th, 2006, SilentStalker (1320) writes:
...but yeah, rhyme schemes weren't made for the truly serous write, unless you're damned good at it... *gets off my high horse now* :P
On Tuesday April 11th, 2006, elisa (2018) writes:
*as if on cue*...... 'then don't read them'..........clever wording.... derided rhyme......ground down and spit out ....skillfully done, of course:)
On Tuesday April 11th, 2006, Ainsof (1831) writes:
No Doubt! I hear ya... and this is so much more than a parody and critique, this is itself beyond that on which it feeds... I love the line 'I finger and you wave' excellent!
On Tuesday April 11th, 2006, indefined (713) writes:
yes yes I'm pulling the piss out of rhymes. they annoy the crap out of me lately so I had to get this out.
On Tuesday April 11th, 2006, Ainsof (1831) writes:
yeah, sometimes they drone me into a headbanging fit.. no tunes needed. but if novel and measured, can be powerful like nothin else
On Tuesday April 11th, 2006, indefined (713) writes:
indeed, they can be. I'm still waiting for some smart-ass to say "then don't read them" ;)
On Tuesday April 11th, 2006, indefined (713) writes:
and a side note, I myself utilise my own version of rhyme schemes, so this is not an attack on people that do.
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