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worry not about my past, my love
the present displays enough confusion to last the blackened powders of futures we have not yet lived nor dreamt stare a wistful sigh whilst draping below hollow limbs entangled however the bedsheets crumble creases of creation 'twining between our forlorn fingers hang not your head against my palm for my fingers have not the substance to cradle your sorrow alongside my own rest your forehead on my heart, my dear so you know my weary pulse resides within and the ashes still flutter 'gainst their cage a vain attempt to console the embers of rage I have not the words to soothe your brow so my ashes are yours my shimmering moonlight my ashes are yours worry not about my future, my urn the past entails enough condemnation to withstand darkened chalks of yesterday so let the days to come be our dream © Aaron Mader
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On Tuesday June 20th, 2006, NikesRain (1474) writes:
this pulls at so many tears in different ways, because i know you as much as i do and yet not as much as others.. yet i know in my heart you're worth so much more than you see and ...
On Tuesday June 20th, 2006, NikesRain (1474) writes:
your palms could most likely hold back an ocean of sorrow for the right heart that would touch yours.... *much love and respect*
On Monday April 17th, 2006, The Fool (1002) writes:
This just racks my brain:) it was very lovely. I could swim in your eternal writes that just rip you open
On Tuesday March 21st, 2006, Ainsof (1838) writes:
ah, forlorn yet cool, a tinge of the sentimental and wisps of imagery forceful and seductive.... I now long for an unconsoled urn to gather me up
On Tuesday March 14th, 2006, NikesRain (1474) writes:
still, i'd crawl within this, wrap it close and fade from daylight, letting it break me quietly.... it's just that divine and beautifully written...
On Tuesday March 14th, 2006, NikesRain (1474) writes:
i also hope this wins the contest luv, best of luck well wishes and much love always
On Thursday March 9th, 2006, DoctorAsh (506) writes:
Wow man .. very complete, genuine, and respectful. My hat is off to you my friend.
On Friday February 17th, 2006, MindRape (886) writes:
*chokes on a swallow* damn...like a hot knife through butter, you swiftly cut right through my titanium hide "and the ashes still
flutter 'gainst their cage
a vain attempt to console
the embers of rage" damn man...fucking ouch...
On Wednesday February 8th, 2006, TaintedButterfly (1056) writes:
To dream with you.... any lady would be so lucky! This was just too beautiful for my words, they just aren't beautiful enough. Julia~
On Tuesday February 7th, 2006, elisa (2018) writes:
an epicurean feast......i get a very sensual feeling from this.....soft and inviting.
On Tuesday February 7th, 2006, NikesRain (1474) writes:
how many times you touch so gracefully upon emotion and feelings so intently... lifting up and slipping down with such smooth flowing mindscapes and heart aching/sighing... astounding as always
On Tuesday February 7th, 2006, evolve (2229) writes:
..I can't explain how much this piece touched me..but it's brought about feelings in me I often choose not to acknowledge..I forgot, perhaps, how beautiful mourning can be..I'll keep this close to heart..so very well spoken..
On Tuesday February 7th, 2006, An Expired Member (2) writes:
I have to agree with Raven... "my ashes are yours" makes my heart break. I love love love this poem. You did a beautiful job of getting your message across while keeping the flow going. Every line drips with eloquence. I can't stop re-reading it...
On Tuesday February 7th, 2006, ApathysKiss (463) writes:
i need to read you more, your style trickles of that probing eloquence from such looming imagery and a depth that stretches my boundaries of emotion and percipience...a captured sigh that tells everything...beautiful would be an understatement...~ak
On Tuesday February 7th, 2006, Raven (378) writes:
Never has a piece been so elusive or worth the persistence to favourite. I could wrap myself around these words for hours and hours, and write you an essay outlining all the little things I pulled from your spinnings.
On Tuesday February 7th, 2006, Raven (378) writes:
Firstly. The layout as a whole is gorgeous. I love how the first and last stanzas play prologue and epilogue to the soft insides.. sandwiching the center with their mild similarities. The soft entry and exit just leave this feeling of.. cyclic peace.
On Tuesday February 7th, 2006, Raven (378) writes:
Moving along.. the subtle use of alliteration in some of the inner stanzas just.. sew the whole thing together before my eyes. The words you used in this portion scream to be whispered and left to float on the following breathlessness they evoke
On Tuesday February 7th, 2006, Raven (378) writes:
Wrapping up this sudden novel.. There are so many quotable lines, but when my eyes hit "my ashes are yours", the air became snagged in my throat. Thank you for this shard of utter complacent perfection you've shared. Know that it's damn appreciated.
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