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The Canvas

cleaned up
yet uncleansed

all dolled up
yet a dirty whore

make me pretty i ask
make me pretty i beg

but the canvas
they have to work with
makes sucha simple take
completely impossible
no matter how skilled
the artist may be

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On Monday April 12th, 2004, sulkylime (258) writes:

ho... what a fun piece.. i like the curt, bluff feel of this, and the thoughtful idea behind this.. the first three stanzas hit a chord, but i think you can do better on the last stanza. just my subjective two cents

On Saturday April 17th, 2004, Jedi_MindFuck (311) writes:

i like this one also. i agree with sulky about the last stanza...for me,the 3rd line should be rethought. other than that...great write. ///Jedi\\\

On Tuesday April 13th, 2004, SilencedAngel (60) writes:

Not sure how to change the last stanza so if you have any ideas, I would be grateful. And I like it when people point out how I can make my work better. Thanks. :)

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