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Vinyl Nightscapes and What You Meant To Me

When we met you were
In a coked hissy-fit
Nose trickled from the drip
Bleak into a split lip

But enough semantics….

I saw you dance on stage
Blinding into a lightshow
Reminding me of a drugged movie star whore
Selling yourself to glares
And go-go girl blues

Lost…
Lost in ambience...

Ambiguity sparkles
And blinks towards
Your mirrored stare
Eyes that mist a translucent haze
While thoughts prove a hateful gaze

Like staring into the light
A delirium of spots and silver smiles…

An electric chrono-counter culture
Time moved an inch to take the sun away
And the city blankets a digital placenta…
A symmetrical skin-graphed
Neon sidewalks and skyscrapers

Walking a tenderloin wonderland
This X was marked in red
Shovels and picks dug for the crime
But cries ripped from the ground
Recording the death of a tear
*june dripped the fall of a star, mapped unparallel beauty of a scar*

Save your Billie Holiday
Stand beside me complex
Because you could never pull it off
Just take another pill
And wash it down with a hallow apology

I spoke in tongues
You spoke in vowels and slurs
All that came out was
*I _o_e _ou*
Mixed into defragmented
Sentence structures

A dead red robin huddled in the brush
*this was meant to hurt you*
.
.
.
Burn the nightscape I so thoroughly adored
And finally
Embrace the dreams I so thoroughly ignored
.
.
.
*time for me to leave, and I don’t know if I will ever return*

And though it all
Emotions left asundure
drowning
will be the last thing we remember

I kept your heart in my pocket
-whispers charred your ear-

Too bad you never kept mine…

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On Thursday March 6th, 2008, Dancing_Monkey (1802) writes:

This write is still great.

On Tuesday June 12th, 2007, sIo (884) writes:

this is intense. i adore the rhyme scheme of the beginning. i need to read more of your work.

On Tuesday May 22nd, 2007, Killswitch (27) writes:

I enjoy your work and really liked this one. You put words together beautifully. =)

On Saturday May 19th, 2007, Theappleofyoureye (450) writes:

wonderful.

On Thursday May 17th, 2007, Trigger (123) writes:

Magnificant. Complexity dancing arount one simple subject. Brilliant.

On Thursday May 17th, 2007, Dancing_Monkey (1802) writes:

This work demands comments.. so here is my one comment. Love the word build and a few lasting lines in a downwards pyramid.. whatever you desire, words on fire.. I dont know.. *blinks and dances off*

On Monday May 14th, 2007, Mylissa (1075) writes:

I didn't realize this was you...Cloud. sheeshhhhhh I am losing it. lol!

On Sunday May 13th, 2007, BeautifullyRuined (145) writes:

Wonderful...dont know what else to say.Loved the ending.

On Saturday May 12th, 2007, Sepulcrawl (106) writes:

this was totally good shit, man. i didn't like your use of the word 'tenderloin' but other than that it was immaculate. have a good one, brother

On Friday May 11th, 2007, Spiritus_Frumenti (361) writes:

good thing i found you. i loved this piece. lengthy, filled with complexity that sounds so clear. awesome! -l-

On Friday May 11th, 2007, sixsixnine (563) writes:

Damn this is powerful! I felt every word unfold a very familiar feel one that for the first time I enjoyed. Thank u. *669*

On Wednesday May 9th, 2007, Estrella Destrozada (233) writes:

It was as if I were hovering above, watching everything play out. This was astounding in the word choice, twisted in its meanings, yet beautiful beyond words that I could ever praise it to be.

On Monday May 7th, 2007, Army Barbie (492) writes:

I felt as if I was dancing naked on a stage, a stripper who didn't mean what she used to mean to the world when she was an innocent child. Heartbreaking. You are 100 percent pure tallent

On Thursday May 3rd, 2007, Bakkhus Unbound (1103) writes:

"An electric chrono-counter culture/Time moved an inch to take the sun away/And the city blankets a digital placenta…" Love your symmetrical style, and really dig the concept of this piece; that cyberpunk/SpaceNoir feel - the vivid imagery: ...

On Friday April 27th, 2007, Tonights Decision (166) writes:

lonley ambient city angst,and the smell of my vinyl collection that holds so much stained history.. i drink this deep

On Friday April 27th, 2007, prettydisgrace (140) writes:

Lovely write- written very beautifully. (BUT i do think u should change your name back to Just shoot.. just an opinion) you write wicked poems.

On Monday April 23rd, 2007, Aurora_Light (574) writes:

I read this a few times before I commented on it, this work seems to hit me and causes me to think deeply about ... well about my past mostly well done

On Sunday April 22nd, 2007, Anna Helianthus (1136) writes:

"Eyes that mist a translucent haze While thoughts prove a hateful gaze" your poetry always astounds me..and the ending of this was outstanding. brilliant.

On Wednesday April 18th, 2007, Disassembly Boy (97) writes:

I said this before, and I'll say it again.. your words kill something inside of me...but so beautifully.. this was astounding.

On Tuesday April 17th, 2007, Mylissa (1075) writes:

This weaved so much beauty and passion, intesity filled with desire. Perfect.

On Tuesday April 17th, 2007, slow.burn.star (99) writes:

Thanks for the credit. But my how you've grown and changed... it's pretty amazing to see the birth of this poet. Your first poetry, to now... it's pretty astounding.

On Tuesday April 17th, 2007, slow.burn.star (99) writes:

I very much loved this one. Some of your lines are just so fresh and inspiring... and thank you for my CD.. x. S...

On Tuesday April 17th, 2007, slow.burn.star (99) writes:

I _o_e _ou

On Tuesday April 17th, 2007, Jonas (877) writes:

it's hard to impart sincerity without melodrama with text... that said, i enjoyed reading this piece very much.

On Tuesday April 17th, 2007, Sin (1639) writes:

in your writes a lot of times i seem them as a tragic romance..like Bogart struting only newage so its more like jazz house strippers and punks...and you always deliver with a teeth rattling jolt, much respect ~kristy

On Monday April 16th, 2007, carlosjackal (1717) writes:

This was gutting to read..as beautiful as the words are, the pain seared right on through between. There's also a confusion in the pain, as though you just weren't ready for it to end..Stunning wordage, stunning write!

On Monday April 16th, 2007, GraveFlower (383) writes:

so crushing, it sucks how that works, you put so much devotion into one and they screw you over.....loved it, i admire your work, every thing so detailed, crushing, heartbreaking...awesome ~*dani*~

On Tuesday April 3rd, 2007, RepulsiveAttraction (109) writes:

that was epic, quite a trip indeed

On Tuesday April 3rd, 2007, dying angel (1328) writes:

"A dead red robin huddled in the brush *this was meant to hurt you* "...."I kept your heart in my pocket -whispers charred your ear- Too bad you never kept mine…"....god. god. god. you're so amazing, Cloud. I haven't been around lately and coming b

On Tuesday April 3rd, 2007, dying angel (1328) writes:

back to this...it's so refreshing. wow.

On Tuesday April 3rd, 2007, Lynaes (1125) writes:

"Too bad you never kept mine".. I am shaken to the core.. "you spoke in tongues".. this is swimming around inside my heart, it's words are echoing right through me... instantly a favourite. You stun me over and over.

On Monday April 2nd, 2007, Freebird (642) writes:

My heart almost stopped when I saw you posted. :) Amazing as always. -Marlena

On Monday April 2nd, 2007, Evil (547) writes:

i ache. ♥

On Monday April 2nd, 2007, Evil (547) writes:

and i keep coming back to it.. i don't know what to do.

On Monday April 2nd, 2007, Disassembly Boy (97) writes:

So happy to see another posting from you.. I love your words and I love your imagery... aaah!! makes me wanna scream. :) you rule. THIS rules.. yup

On Monday April 2nd, 2007, Bella Butchery (1140) writes:

*this was meant to hurt you* coined by slow.burn.star *heart*

On Monday April 2nd, 2007, Tania (304) writes:

This is beautiful...so emotional. i feel you have poured your heart right out onto the page.. you dont cease to stun me.. im enthralled.

On Monday April 2nd, 2007, Loketha Angel (157) writes:

This was depressing and beautiful all at the same time. I want to take you and put you under my pillow so when you speak I can hear your elogies first. Just wonderful.

On Monday April 2nd, 2007, Mylissa (1075) writes:

I agree with everything said before, this is magical...you have a way with words.

On Monday April 2nd, 2007, Spiked Tongue (32) writes:

beautiful expression of feelings! we are one step closer to understanding whats inside you ~ though i'd be willing to guess we still couldn't wrap our minds around it all

On Monday April 2nd, 2007, An Expired Member (16) writes:

This was mindshattering! "Burn the nightscape I so thoroughly adored And finally Embrace the dreams I so thoroughly ignored". Fantastic write!

On Monday April 2nd, 2007, Mab (995) writes:

I never feel worthy enough to comment on your work.Just let me say that your talent blows me away everytime..~M

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