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he walked up slowly
like this was no place special
he just had nowhere in particular
to be
just felt like stopping

he looked a bit nonplussed
when i barely nodded my head
by way of greeting
as subdued and masculine platonic a gesture as it was
recognition is uncool

i had been standing on the sidewalk outside
the window of a coffee shop
waiting for a friend and looking like it

post-everything
so progressive
he leaned on the pole of a street sign
and the light fell on him like it would
on a gangster in a prohibition era film

trying hard to not look like
we were trying hard to look dark
and too cool for words
and every bit the rock stars
we wanted to be

and i turned and looked inside the coffee shop
through the big street window to see
if my friend had slipped by me somehow and was
inside
but i made a casual way of it
and kind of slunk around one hundred and eighty degrees
like the wet asphalt i had been looking at
just bored me to tears and i expected the same from the
other side
andy wasn't inside

i glanced to the side and noticed that my compatriot
in the long leather jacket
with nails painted
concurrently and in a similarly listlessly purturbed manner
was scanning the golden lit warm social scene
inside the coffee shop

we both sneered
like billy idol
in our minds

and almost in tandem we turned back to the street
acting disgusted with all that golden happiness
our eyes fleeing the bright smiles
and caffeinated sociability
to something more becoming of two modern boys

a laugh started inside me
at the coordination of our gestures
he seemed to sense the laugh rising
and silenced me before sound with a cold look
he wondered if i was just another fucker
come to rain on his parade

i calmed myself and supressed the laugh
and i tried to look as indifferent as ever
he turned back to the street indifferent as well
giving me the benefit of the doubt



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On Wednesday October 17th, 2007, Ainsof (1838) writes:
It amazes me how the simplicity of your style can capture the most penetrating and revealing of split second gestures and the meaning, social, cultural, historical, that imbues and shapes those gestures... and I feel like a pawn to the gendered roles I un


On Wednesday October 17th, 2007, Ainsof (1838) writes:
wittingly fulfill and bravely defend as I perpetuate and instill in others the similar cookie-cutter mannerisms and expectations. Perplexing and too real.


On Thursday July 21st, 2005, doll on the rag (223) writes:
this reminds me so much of my first years in high school... trying to be that rock star, trying to be indifferent. the line about billy idol was perfect- he's my celebrity crush; i adore that sneer.


On Thursday July 21st, 2005, doll on the rag (223) writes:
it's lovely... reading this is like holding a fragment of my life in a bottle and looking at it with objective curiousity. we never see present ourselves quite as honestly as we do years later. marvelous work, dear.


On Tuesday February 1st, 2005, Nightingale (555) writes:
I've seen it and I've lived it and I Know it well. But I've never thought of how to put the absurdity into words.


On Tuesday February 1st, 2005, Nightingale (555) writes:
To recognize these little scenes as something poetic, and to trap them as such... is truly a gift. Life is made up of moments like these.


On Wednesday January 12th, 2005, Liz (406) writes:
He didn't do a very good job of silencing you, after all. Good thing, too.


On Monday January 10th, 2005, An Expired Member (4) writes:
(I couldn't post as long as comment as I wanted) :: Anyway, this is incredible, the line breaks are so fitting and within the millisecond of each line the reader's given the freedom to explore the potential outcome


On Monday January 10th, 2005, An Expired Member (4) writes:
I wish I knew what made good writing so I could point out everything that makes this piece perfect and compliment you on it. The characters could be anyone of any sex and creates any given story really well. One of my favorite pieces I've ever read .


On Monday January 10th, 2005, MindRape (886) writes:
*big grin on her face* this was AWESOME Jonas! this was absolutly poetic in every sense of the word. It was like watching a clip rather than reading a poem and you never dissapoint me with your works


On Saturday January 8th, 2005, boughtwithblood (296) writes:
this is hilarious...


On Monday January 3rd, 2005, Sharon Rose (639) writes:
it's so much easier to stand apart, a million miles at heart, when right next to you the mirror shines too bright....


On Sunday January 2nd, 2005, birdwell (176) writes:
i'd leave a comment conveying my expounding admirations.. but... how would that look... hmmph.. ;) ~db~


On Friday December 31st, 2004, urbanhumility (1351) writes:
you mesh the sublties of memory and emotion.......well done......urban


On Friday December 31st, 2004, anth (1611) writes:
i think this is an awesome write, the way youve written it had me totally absorbed,an original refreshing and very cool work. so much that is great about this


On Friday December 31st, 2004, tears of decadence (222) writes:
i liked the ending of it how it all fell... the laugh that he caught before it came... this was an amazing and very detailed description of this situation. *tears*


On Thursday December 30th, 2004, An Expired Member (31) writes:
whoa good write


On Thursday December 30th, 2004, Bast (896) writes:
i chuckled a bit at this too... simply cause i've seen that happen while i've been sitting inside coffeeshops... this is a perfectly written description of the process.


On Thursday December 30th, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (586) writes:
--very nicely written. . "he wondered if i was just another fucker come to rain on his parade". . some lovely ideas throughout this. .


On Thursday December 30th, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (586) writes:
"and the light fell on him like it would on a gangster in a prohibition era film". . whoa, I really like this. it's something I know, one of those things you dont really want to admit I suppose. reminds me of several different things all at once, very n



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