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cigarette in the shower

skin only feels good when it isn't your own
and in a way-she was me..
i think i was the first to crush it

lay low... pretend it's your fault.
then i can be happy

the air's too fuzzy.. too hard not to concentrate on the beating of your heart
from the carpet
too soon to recognize..
she's probably mostly me

you love me and dream of my suicide
("make it go away!")
i will soon-i'll make it stop

dream of me always
behind my silken eyelashes i sleep
alone for all eternity
but you..
are smiling.

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On Friday January 21st, 2005, AniDayz (1281) writes:

i fully and completely love this. such brilliance radiates through the words.the way it all flows...just *superb*

On Thursday January 20th, 2005, anth (1611) writes:

this is a superb work, the imagery was creative and really entwined itself around me, seriously impressive

On Saturday January 15th, 2005, Astra Dei (644) writes:

agrees with valentine and sulkylime

On Thursday December 9th, 2004, Valentine (509) writes:

"skin only feels good when it isn't your own and in a way-she was me.." this is silently disturbing, yet softly-lighted, decievingly, perhaps. It delivered a sense of nostalgia and yet derranged intimacy, mingled. Wonderful.

On Thursday December 9th, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (586) writes:

this was twisted and bent in every possible way, a beautiful piece. cigarette in the shower, nice title as well. every word perfectly stitched into this.

On Monday September 13th, 2004, purr_verse (1437) writes:

compelling, evocative and highly re-readable; this piece is...prismatic somehow... lovely write; great imagery.

On Saturday May 29th, 2004, TropicalSnowstorm (698) writes:

Beautiful flow and mysterious feel - I love the notion that it's "too hard not to concentrate on the beating of your heart". Great! Ciao, T/S

On Friday April 30th, 2004, capt_funguy (998) writes:

heavy haunt here ... one but none ... great piece .... very happy i caught up with you ... funguy

On Monday April 26th, 2004, sulkylime (258) writes:

i think this is subtle yet profound.. marvelous expressions here. it gave me an impression that can't be erased like a cigarette burn in the skin

On Friday April 30th, 2004, FindAgentX (20) writes:

thank you so much for all your comments-especially you lime, i think you've commented on every one. :) it's nice to find people who actually enjoy and respond to my works.

On Monday April 26th, 2004, sulkylime (258) writes:

i'm leaving this on my favs for a while

On Monday April 26th, 2004, crush_with_eyeliner (15) writes:

some of the diction here is..astounding. ver pleasurable read for me. crush.

On Saturday March 13th, 2004, Lynaes (1129) writes:

Wow, stunning work I must say! So true, and so elegant conveyed. A very, very good job! ~L

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