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Rain & Jazz in Rm 272

outside it was raining & I was
inside with Miles Davis & we were
speaking of the past I told him
hey what's done is done

he smiled and walked out into the rain
i asked if he wanted my umbrella
he replied love will keep him dry
and walked off parting the concrete sidewalk
like Moses did the Red Sea

ever since he left I've wondered
why I threw my umbrella out of the window
a beautiful girl picked it up
I told her she didn't need it
that love would keep her dry:
she laughed with her friends and kept walking.

as the rain continued to fall
I wished it would slice through her umbrella

it never did but I'll be damned if I wasn't dry all day.

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On Monday March 17th, 2008, MercyRain (135) writes:

i do think this could be a freaking awesome poem, its just the ending leaves one feeling like there is something amiss here

On Monday March 17th, 2008, MercyRain (135) writes:

all this talk about love keeping us dry and whatnot, but then the only real emotion the narrator shows herself is the spiteful wishing that the girl with the umbrella would get wet and then the narrator stays dry despite her only displayed emotion as spite

On Monday March 17th, 2008, Dancing_Monkey (1881) writes:

awsome write. Has a jazzy feel. and it's funny and sweet aswell. I realy realy like it

On Monday March 17th, 2008, MercyRain (135) writes:

i have mixed feelings about this poem... the rhythm, the flow, the wording, all that, it is an excellent write... it is just the last two lines of this poem though that seem to let me confused...

On Friday December 7th, 2007, Zen (656) writes:

sweet

On Sunday April 22nd, 2007, carlosjackal (1608) writes:

I've read this many times now but only now feel like I'm ready to comment. I can only echo everyone else and add this was magnificent magic created in so few lines. Amazing -Carl

On Friday November 10th, 2006, Magic Hatter (2382) writes:

I found this through mozarts cat whose taste is impeccable and this....oh my gwads....beatific as the woman who guided me ...rain my cure; love washed upon timeless streets...

On Tuesday May 23rd, 2006, flying_fox (801) writes:

this is awesome. I too found it on Purr's homepage. Magnificent write... the last line gave me the broadest grin I've worn all week.

On Tuesday April 25th, 2006, Anna Helianthus (1165) writes:

gah. i love this. i found it on purr's profile a while ago, and i've been at a loss for words. this is just marvelous.

On Monday February 13th, 2006, purr_verse (1483) writes:

well, it was 2004 when I first found this piece; this is just a little postscript to say that these days I can recite it verbatim, and it runs in my memory at all sorts of moments. It's magnificent.

On Sunday February 20th, 2005, anth (1621) writes:

so, this is what poetry really is

On Sunday December 19th, 2004, Twilight (2114) writes:

wow-as i can see you have gotten that same reaction from everyone else. but just let me tell you that this piece of poetry has more to say then anything i have ever written in my life. i thank you for the privilege.

On Wednesday December 22nd, 2004, Lotophagi (459) writes:

ditto that. awesome write. I love it. Thank you.

On Tuesday December 7th, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (588) writes:

*clicks faves*

On Tuesday December 7th, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (588) writes:

whoa, SO glad that I have come across this. amazing work. . . reminded me of different bands I love all combined together with wonderful words to sing. simple but beautifully delicate. a lovely write, well done. . .

On Thursday November 11th, 2004, Bakkhus Unbound (1119) writes:

"as the rain continued to fall I wished it would slice through her umbrella" The wet feel of jazz is straight on, sketches of Miles (perfect); I can hear his jazz'd breathing & feel the rain. I love the 'dry & umbrella' motif. This poem is black & whi

On Thursday November 11th, 2004, Bakkhus Unbound (1119) writes:

... black & white, like an old photograph torn and fading; excellent! Delicious imagery:"...and walked off parting the concrete sidewalk."

On Tuesday September 14th, 2004, Dayer (204) writes:

Excellent

On Saturday September 4th, 2004, Railway_Butterfly (477) writes:

excellent work,*clicks faves*...Butterfly..xxx...

On Saturday September 4th, 2004, Railway_Butterfly (477) writes:

'I never did,but i'll be damned if I wasn't dry all day'...Just as lyn said,you reach a level of of class here thats hard to touch...this is wonderful work,you capture the...mood...the astmosphere...perfectly..

On Sunday August 29th, 2004, purr_verse (1483) writes:

all-around fantastic piece, excellently written. it's stolen my commentary; left me with banalities like "wow" and suchlike. sorry... *faveclick*

On Saturday August 28th, 2004, Lynaes (1148) writes:

This is wonderful, so abstractly enchanting. The way you've put this across is absolutely perfect. I envisioned as a black and white movie.. 1920's.. you've reached a level of class that's hard to touch. Excellent work.

On Friday August 27th, 2004, Six-Out (1831) writes:

That....was damn good. I was wondering where you were going with it, and am glad I stuck around. Keep 'em coming.

On Friday August 27th, 2004, urbanhumility (1325) writes:

fantastic memory............brilliant......urban

On Friday August 27th, 2004, ShadowFlight (140) writes:

wow... I like this a lot... captures the mood directly and abstractly... coooool... flows, kinda like one of miles' solos.....

On Friday August 27th, 2004, mysticventures (554) writes:

very, very cool write man!!!

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