Rain & Jazz in Rm 272

outside it was raining & I was
inside with Miles Davis & we were
speaking of the past I told him
hey what's done is done

he smiled and walked out into the rain
i asked if he wanted my umbrella
he replied love will keep him dry
and walked off parting the concrete sidewalk
like Moses did the Red Sea

ever since he left I've wondered
why I threw my umbrella out of the window
a beautiful girl picked it up
I told her she didn't need it
that love would keep her dry:
she laughed with her friends and kept walking.

as the rain continued to fall
I wished it would slice through her umbrella

it never did but I'll be damned if I wasn't dry all day.

More comments:

• On Sunday, October 19, 2008, TropicalSnowstorm (666) wrote:
  
  Fastastic piece! "but I'll be damned if I wasn't dry all day" - Love it! : )
  
  
• On Monday, March 17, 2008, MercyRain (111) wrote:
  
  i do think this could be a freaking awesome poem, its just the ending leaves one feeling like there is something amiss here
  
  
• On Monday, March 17, 2008, MercyRain (111) wrote:
  
  all this talk about love keeping us dry and whatnot, but then the only real emotion the narrator shows herself is the spiteful wishing that the girl with the umbrella would get wet and then the narrator stays dry despite her only displayed emotion as spite
  
  
• On Monday, March 17, 2008, Dancing_Monkey (1550) wrote:
  
  awsome write. Has a jazzy feel. and it's funny and sweet aswell. I realy realy like it
  
  
• On Monday, March 17, 2008, MercyRain (111) wrote:
  
  i have mixed feelings about this poem... the rhythm, the flow, the wording, all that, it is an excellent write... it is just the last two lines of this poem though that seem to let me confused...
  
  
• On Friday, December 7, 2007, Mari (529) wrote:
  
  sweet
  
  
• On Sunday, April 22, 2007, carlosjackal (1799) wrote:
  
  I've read this many times now but only now feel like I'm ready to comment. I can only echo everyone else and add this was magnificent magic created in so few lines. Amazing -Carl
  
  
• On Friday, November 10, 2006, The Zebra Warrior (2209) wrote:
  
  I found this through mozarts cat whose taste is impeccable and this....oh my gwads....beatific as the woman who guided me ...rain my cure; love washed upon timeless streets...
  
  
• On Tuesday, May 23, 2006, flying_fox (717) wrote:
  
  this is awesome. I too found it on Purr's homepage. Magnificent write... the last line gave me the broadest grin I've worn all week.
  
  
• On Tuesday, April 25, 2006, Anna Helianthus (972) wrote:
  
  gah. i love this. i found it on purr's profile a while ago, and i've been at a loss for words. this is just marvelous.
  
  
• On Monday, February 13, 2006, purr_verse (1320) wrote:
  
  well, it was 2004 when I first found this piece; this is just a little postscript to say that these days I can recite it verbatim, and it runs in my memory at all sorts of moments. It's magnificent.
  
  
• On Sunday, February 20, 2005, Anth (1438) wrote:
  
  so, this is what poetry really is
  
  
• On Sunday, December 19, 2004, Twilight (1917) wrote:
  
  wow-as i can see you have gotten that same reaction from everyone else. but just let me tell you that this piece of poetry has more to say then anything i have ever written in my life. i thank you for the privilege.
  
  
• On Wednesday, December 22, 2004, Lotophagi (419) wrote:
  
  ditto that. awesome write. I love it. Thank you.
  
  
• On Tuesday, December 7, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (498) wrote:
  
  *clicks faves*
  
  
• On Tuesday, December 7, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (498) wrote:
  
  whoa, SO glad that I have come across this. amazing work. . . reminded me of different bands I love all combined together with wonderful words to sing. simple but beautifully delicate. a lovely write, well done. . .
  
  
• On Thursday, November 11, 2004, Bakkhus Unbound (1055) wrote:
  
  "as the rain continued to fall I wished it would slice through her umbrella" The wet feel of jazz is straight on, sketches of Miles (perfect); I can hear his jazz'd breathing & feel the rain. I love the 'dry & umbrella' motif. This poem is black & whi
  
  
• On Thursday, November 11, 2004, Bakkhus Unbound (1055) wrote:
  
  ... black & white, like an old photograph torn and fading; excellent! Delicious imagery:"...and walked off parting the concrete sidewalk."
  
  
• On Tuesday, September 14, 2004, Dayer (180) wrote:
  
  Excellent
  
  
• On Saturday, September 4, 2004, Railway_Butterfly (411) wrote:
  
  excellent work,*clicks faves*...Butterfly..xxx...