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A dying mind

Everything in life is a choice
By choosing right or wrong you give it a voice
You say it wasn’t an option you can’t control what you do
always hurting those closest to you
There were unhallowed secrets you wished to preserve
She loved you more than you could ever deserve
Making another person start over again
You turned from your lover to her best friend
Watching behind you cringing at every sound
How could you presume that you wouldn’t be found
You’ve finally shut the last door
Blood spilt upon the floor
You think of all you must leave behind
As Darkness envelopes the dying mind

**I actually wrote this one starting from the last vers to the first**

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On Monday May 10th, 2004, Midnight Phoenix (313) writes:

Last verse to the first... I admire your creativity. This turned out very well all the way from the end to the beginning.

On Saturday March 20th, 2004, Spiritus_Frumenti (343) writes:

An impressive feat in technicality...combined with the truthful and contemplative feel to this piece..all in all it makes it amazing in every angle...-l-

On Thursday March 18th, 2004, Choronzon (236) writes:

This one is awesome when read from both directions. Good shit.

On Wednesday March 17th, 2004, finaldestiny (98) writes:

wow that was an impressive piece there, it actually made me think which i have to say is amazing. then I read it backwards and it was just as good lol.The Last line says so much in few words. nice write ~finaldestiny~

On Saturday March 13th, 2004, nell (328) writes:

this was wicked and when i read it bottom to top it's even better=P

On Wednesday March 3rd, 2004, knightmirror (425) writes:

beautiful write.i felt everything you wrote cause i hurt someone i loved very much and now i'm alone.**** knight

On Wednesday March 3rd, 2004, BoldSolitude (277) writes:

I agree with pessum, impressive for a poem to sound right forward or backwards.

On Tuesday March 2nd, 2004, pessum ire animus (73) writes:

whoa... that was amazing... just read it backwards after forwards... cant say many people can do that. fucking awesome.

On Tuesday March 2nd, 2004, OLd SouL (838) writes:

Hey this was pretty cool.. I read it forward, backwards, sidewards...errmm. delicious every way. :) :::OLd

On Monday March 1st, 2004, PointlessX (47) writes:

"..She loved you more than you could ever deserve.." --more than just a great write!!--PointlessX

On Monday March 1st, 2004, Drea (938) writes:

i really like this. the flow is done well. the words speak volumes. wonderful. ~Drea~

On Monday March 1st, 2004, suicideseason (2146) writes:

what can i say...i feel like this was written about me...and if it was written about me,it would be dead on...very nice.-tim

On Monday March 1st, 2004, TheProphetUntold (348) writes:

The story you conjure is relevant to everyone in some way and mine in many. Another thing I must add is that you acheived making the aa bb cc dd rhyme scheme work amazingly and not seem boring, big kudos on that. +T.P.U+

On Monday March 1st, 2004, Bluegoddess (61) writes:

holy shit, i read it strait through and i liked it, but then i read it from bottom to top and i got chills, kinda like the playing the record backwards type of thing.. oh your god, im shaking.. *runs in the corner and hides again*

On Tuesday March 2nd, 2004, nightshade (78) writes:

hey i might just give six a run for his money on this god thing *winks* lol

On Monday March 1st, 2004, evolve (2220) writes:

Very nicely done. I like it. The last verse is my favorite.

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