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He hurt her
Tore her apart
Made her want to die
He doesn't really give a damn
He doesn't care that he made her cry
She runs to me
Tears in her eyes
And I can do nothing
Nothing but hold her as she cries
I love her in the wrong way
I'll kill him for hurting her
I will make him pay

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Okay, I'm not too happy with this, but, I figured I'd post it and see what all of you thought

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On Monday April 11th, 2005, An Expired Member (16) writes:

i liked it! the ass hole hurts a friend and u wanna make him pay!! awww such a priceless plot! goody goody gum drops -ariel

On Thursday December 16th, 2004, frozen (741) writes:

beautifully written

On Tuesday December 14th, 2004, blue (1702) writes:

works for me ash, nice. ~b!

On Thursday November 11th, 2004, An Expired Member (134) writes:

in some way it makes me feel protected! if it makes any sence! Well.... all i can say is that i love it even if you dont think its very good! it really is exalent!

On Thursday November 11th, 2004, An Expired Member (9) writes:

Sounds like it was written by any random boyfriend of any number of girls I've seduced and made fall in love with me before ruining them. Enjoy your victims. I'm more of a fan of the monsters.

On Tuesday October 19th, 2004, Valentine (491) writes:

Every line molded me . . it's captivation left me floored. You expressed the emotion godamn amazingly. Divine write. ~*~ Rose ~*~

On Saturday October 16th, 2004, Twilight (2084) writes:

"I love her in the wrong way " that line took sharp objects and let them prance around my heart.

On Wednesday October 6th, 2004, An Expired Member (75) writes:

i can definitely feel u here, BloodRose...check out my "Don't Push That Button"...Kinda out there; but it does give one a little knowledge on who i am and where ive been...Sometimes even where im at now...LOL Anyway, i really like it...Laterz!

On Tuesday October 5th, 2004, Bella Butchery (1104) writes:

i know how you feel, i am sorry to say that i have been that "him," and those guys are the worst... short but strong, there is no need for any more words< just shoot

On Friday October 1st, 2004, murder_in_clubland (497) writes:

I like this btw your so cute *pinches your cheeks*~ss

On Thursday September 30th, 2004, An Expired Member (46) writes:

i can relate to this all too well, only, me being the one hurt, and the one wanting revenge for the guy (who'd be my ex)hurting me, being somebody who i currently love very much. mainly: beautiful! i love it! rage and anger against somebody for emotionall

On Thursday September 30th, 2004, sexually_sadistic (488) writes:

very good expression of raw emotion and feelings here. wonderful job! ~sex~

On Sunday July 18th, 2004, An Expired Member (69) writes:

I really do like this and I know how you feel. I'm not ashamed about it though. I'm just protective.

On Saturday January 31st, 2004, SilentStalker (1316) writes:

...nothing bad at all about this; it portrays rage for hurting a loved one...the honesty of it is what comes through to the reader... -Darun

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