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penitence

folded hands
bended knee
if there's a god
forgive me please

sharpened knife
muscles tense
my own brand
of penitence

blood for blood
sin for sin
let me hurt
once again

may i feel
what i deserve
unbridled pain
without reserve

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hands are bound
i'm on my knees
you know i want
what i need

singing whip
cry my pain
otherwise
it's all in vain

make me shudder
make me scream
it's even better
if i bleed

cause only blood
can make it right
i must atone
for all those nights

for all the hell
and evils done
i'm so sorry
i won't run

i'll face the chains
i'll be your slave
make me happy
be depraved

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folded hands
and body broken
i pray to god
accept this token

i've given pain
for innocence
my special brand
of penitence

my blood for theirs
my sins forgive
let me die
or let me live

folded hands
and bended knee
if there's a god
forgive me please

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On Sunday March 4th, 2007, An Expired Member (7) writes:

I loved it, very moving and powerful.

On Tuesday November 7th, 2006, darth ren (40) writes:

very very powerful

On Tuesday May 10th, 2005, Kinkypoptart (770) writes:

*picks up jaw from floor* You are so amazing ~*~Tart~*~

On Tuesday January 4th, 2005, Emptyness Inside Me (195) writes:

Wow, very impressive piece here, the reader can almost feel whats going on as they read your words, excellent job ~Emptyness~

On Monday August 2nd, 2004, An Expired Member (15) writes:

very impressive, I love all your work so it was no surprise that this one was good too.~Rachel~

On Tuesday May 11th, 2004, Liath (41) writes:

Also, this sort of made me think of what jesus was thinking or feeling..or what they've led us all to believe he was thinking, or trying to accomplish/prove..not sure if you meant it to be that.

On Tuesday May 11th, 2004, Liath (41) writes:

cre, the power behind each stanza is amazing. I love this format on your work because you know what to say and how to say it with few words. Awesome.

On Wednesday April 7th, 2004, BoldSolitude (277) writes:

The first verse draws you in immediately, I like the repetiveness of it, helps drives the point home.

On Sunday January 25th, 2004, Twilight (2105) writes:

i loved the last two verses. very emotional. the whole poem was felt and brings back some odd memories for me. a job well done yet again.

On Tuesday January 6th, 2004, VampyreAS (7) writes:

What can I say that someone else hasn't already said? It really hits the soul.

On Tuesday January 6th, 2004, subtle incandescence (5) writes:

I am at a loss. This was moving, exciting, and intense. I adore your penitence.

On Saturday December 20th, 2003, An Expired Member (5) writes:

I didn't want it to end...it was just that good.

On Tuesday December 16th, 2003, suicideseason (2152) writes:

as i lost myself in this brilliant work, i was overwhelmed by the feeling of guilt and regret.and so much sorrow. beautiful work.~season

On Sunday November 16th, 2003, sole (114) writes:

This poem just rocks, not a whole lot more I can add

On Sunday November 9th, 2003, An Expired Member (61) writes:

great job dude.

On Sunday October 12th, 2003, gothemite (399) writes:

i love it.. had a nice flow, i read part of it before a little while ago but had to leave before i could finish .. good job

On Thursday September 25th, 2003, An Expired Member (20) writes:

comment is pointless now.

On Sunday September 14th, 2003, Strabo (48) writes:

wow. powerful with a fantastic rhyme and flow!

On Monday September 8th, 2003, An Expired Member (13) writes:

what a poem full of emptyness....it leaves you so full but so empty,it's full of emotions but so empty in the same time... good work. ***

On Wednesday August 20th, 2003, Loneal (118) writes:

... very nice rhythm, very honest description ... you say you write what you feel, without editing? ... you do this very well ... ~L

On Friday August 15th, 2003, morgue_white (195) writes:

it reminds me of the monks in monty python who walk in a line and hit their head on a plank every few seconds.. haha

On Tuesday August 12th, 2003, gothness (2) writes:

kept me interested. well written, nice flow.~gothness~

On Sunday August 10th, 2003, An Expired Member (2) writes:

wow, thats really fuckin crazy, you and little nemo rock this site

On Sunday June 29th, 2003, Creation_Peace (50) writes:

holy hell thats good. I love the meter and use of words....pure beauty....--eileen

On Tuesday June 24th, 2003, celestine_moon (53) writes:

damn. that was powerful! i was so absorbed in it i nearly couldn't breathe. of course all of your work evokes such emotion in me. you have true talent. i am in awe. -kitty

On Tuesday June 17th, 2003, An Expired Member (15) writes:

This is such an awesome work. You've obviously seen those words a lot already..but I mean it. I love the way you flowed with your words.

On Monday May 26th, 2003, CharlottesWeb (586) writes:

Wholey...!!! Tragic and lonely peice. Very severe in compunction. So very singular in you...well done.~DW~

On Saturday May 17th, 2003, The_Scavenger (32) writes:

very powerful poem. great use of words. keep up the great work.

On Saturday May 17th, 2003, Johny_D_Lewis (607) writes:

damn....you take responsibility for your actions and persue justice for the sins you commit....pretty good

On Friday May 16th, 2003, CrestFallenSky (35) writes:

this has very nice rythm to it, the short lines create an interesting flow to the words ~CFS

On Thursday May 8th, 2003, alone (200) writes:

wow! i love it!

On Friday April 11th, 2003, nonhero_until_death (167) writes:

Just got finished reading your whole portfolio, as of 4-11-03. You could seriously publish your works and spread your art around for the world to enjoy. You're so talented. Never stop writing. :)

On Friday April 11th, 2003, Lady_Ahz (80) writes:

I don't know if I Told you, but I absolutely love this poem. Excellent work.. ;)

On Friday March 21st, 2003, An Expired Member (94) writes:

hell yeah! i got a good trip out of your kick ass shit! this is the first one i read gonna check out the rest>>

On Friday March 21st, 2003, MindRape (895) writes:

MY 100th comment! hehe i LOVE this poem i read it every day at least once Jane :) you are so pretty and so talented and smart and funny and fun to be around, some guy is gonna be really lucky someday when he finds you :)

On Friday March 21st, 2003, An Expired Member (15) writes:

awesome work. i love how you just essentially express yourself in this. i'll look for more like this from you, keep it up!

On Wednesday March 19th, 2003, Ravenblade (275) writes:

This is an awesome work, as usual I love the way you flow the words together. I wish I had your talent of putting words together to portray such powerful emotions, plus I love the title too, I wish I would've read it earlier in time, keep up the awesome

On Saturday March 15th, 2003, King_Crazy_Dave (420) writes:

good work, i applaud you

On Wednesday March 12th, 2003, Bast (874) writes:

Mmmm... really like how this poem flows, reading it. Reminds me of Madonna's "only the one who hurts you can make you feel better... only the one who inflicts the pain can take it away". I know the feelings well that you've conveyed.

On Monday March 10th, 2003, An Expired Member (14) writes:

I loved reading this and I will come back to read it over and over again X) Thanks for the makin this great poem public XD

On Friday March 7th, 2003, TropicalSnowstorm (687) writes:

That is pretty intense, but well put together - you conveyed the guilt and emotion quit well. By the by, love your latest pic! Ciao, T/S

On Friday March 7th, 2003, TropicalSnowstorm (687) writes:

**"quite well"...bloody keyboard...

On Wednesday February 19th, 2003, liquid_emotion (417) writes:

hmm interesting. are harshest critics ourselves

On Tuesday February 18th, 2003, Jonas (859) writes:

intense. good read. i hope to see more poems posted in the soon to come! welcome to DP (this is assuming of course that you're new... i haven't seen ya around so i'm just gonna run w/ that assumption) - jonas

On Sunday February 16th, 2003, nell (328) writes:

wow.... excellent read, it flows well and has a god tune to it, i know what you meant by your own penitance felt this way many times

On Sunday February 16th, 2003, An Expired Member (10) writes:

nice poem man, look for more of my post, i predict youll be a goo dpoet =o) -PoP RoXx n KoKe-

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