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Eclipsed

I want to be eclipsed
Again
Broken between the ends
Of lives I never knew
A bare impression amidst the greens
And concrete grey
I want to wane
In the mist of a noon after viewing
When the clouds weep
And visitors wear the crinkled visage
Of an interrupted sleep
When hands trail
And their owners linger at goodbye
Among these relics
And remembrances of life
I want to darken and dim
As shadows slip into the gloom
When the light has been removed
A blur beyond the lens
I am simply waiting
To be fading out
Again.

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On Thursday October 27th, 2005, LiP Stiches (57) writes:

it sucks cuz i have nothing to say about this poem the greatness of it makes me silent with admiration...i never read a pom about an eclipse

On Wednesday April 21st, 2004, Inevitability (645) writes:

ahhhh...sigh...

On Wednesday April 21st, 2004, purr_verse (1483) writes:

the use of colour/shade adds another level of effectiveness to this gently wistful and touching piece... i love the fourth and fifth line in particular... beautifully said. :)

On Wednesday April 21st, 2004, suicideseason (2161) writes:

_it's soo good to see you writing again,cre..."I am simply waiting To be fading out Again." stuck to me like glue...and i'll agree with many...great aftertaste.awesome.:)tim

On Wednesday April 21st, 2004, Bast (1007) writes:

i loved this in your journal, and i love it here. melancholy as only cre can do it... sweetly sad... in a way that makes you not mind the tears quite so much. they seem part of the joy of being.

On Tuesday April 20th, 2004, Lynaes (1148) writes:

A lovely, wistful write. Absolutely gorgeous pictures created in my mind by this. The feeling of wanting to simply disappear, but with beauty and grace. Fantastic work. ~L

On Tuesday April 20th, 2004, OLd SouL (848) writes:

*thumbs up* very nice piece.

On Tuesday April 20th, 2004, Six-Out (1832) writes:

*grabs Jane* Yay for new poetry. You rock, and this is no exeption, I've missed reading you....*sigh*

On Tuesday April 20th, 2004, manywalks (972) writes:

'bout time; though this was worth the wait. Superb aftertaste this left. ~ mw

On Tuesday April 20th, 2004, DoctorAsh (512) writes:

well its nice to see a new work with the name cre attatched to it . this is very lovely. [D&A]

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