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Hey Baby (Don't ask - I'm pissed)

I know this is a little nutty, I'm all kinds of pissed.

hey baby

give me a smile

want to beg me

while

i make my choice

between your death

or drawing out your breath

i might like to watch you scream

i think i could get used

to watching you cry

while you die

wanna whine a little bit?

tell me 'bout the pain?

oh, im sorry,

did you think i was sane?

after all the hell

you dealt

baby you just better pray

you die sometime today

cause i've no plans

for tomorrow

and i just might enjoy

dragging out your sorrow.

what's that?

you're sorry?

you never meant to hurt me?

excuse me, please

while I laugh a little bit.

You think I still buy that shit?

baby, your blood is mine

don't think i dont remember

the times

you cracked my bones

and left me alone

you thought the glint in my eye

meant i was sad and might cry

sorry baby

that glint was madness breaking loose

now that madness . . .

is visited on you.

poetic justice, baby

aint it grand?

I kinda think it is

and . . .

oops, were you trying to speak?

kinda hard when you can't breathe.

it's ok baby

I'll be sure to craft your epitaph

maybe some words to make me laugh

cause i'll be breathing precious air

and you'll have worms

in your hair.

regretful much?

bye bye baby, i'm off to lunch.

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On Friday May 12th, 2006, Kinkypoptart (766) writes:

This write has always been enjoyable for me. I just keep coming back and reading it over and over. Great job ~*~Tart~*~

On Sunday September 4th, 2005, precarious pixie (20) writes:

hell ya.Right On Girl.way to describe the madness in all of us.but chicks are especially precarious.and once we let loose theres no turning back.

On Thursday December 30th, 2004, An Expired Member (7) writes:

NICE!!! I LOVE THIS

On Tuesday August 10th, 2004, An Expired Member (1) writes:

that so kicks ass! frickin ya it rocks i luv your writting

On Monday April 5th, 2004, BoldSolitude (277) writes:

"Oh, i'm sorry, did you think I was sane" I liked that, :) Oh, and the glint of madness too.

On Friday January 9th, 2004, Methos (154) writes:

So much underlying within the depths of this one..a truly great write..-Methos

On Wednesday December 17th, 2003, An Expired Member (10) writes:

Woah... I like the sarcasm in it!! REALLY Great!!

On Saturday November 22nd, 2003, wilted (299) writes:

A lot of people can't write very well at all when they're overly upset, but this was good. i'm impressed.

On Saturday October 25th, 2003, Cinn (188) writes:

wow just wow, what else can i say really?

On Friday October 24th, 2003, SilentStalker (1341) writes:

...I'm very surprised to see you write like this...though I like it, I agree with Fawn...whoever made you feel this way...I hope they got what was coming to them...

On Friday October 24th, 2003, SilentStalker (1341) writes:

...honestly, though, I prefer your lighter works...but nice work, anyway... -Darun

On Thursday October 9th, 2003, Sky Singer (212) writes:

no, i don't find it "nutty" at all :) very well said, as meesed up as it may be. bravo!

On Saturday September 20th, 2003, Nadir (631) writes:

To be ripped of air by a choking soul. Tiger

On Wednesday September 3rd, 2003, Demosthenes (222) writes:

QUIT BEING SO BLOODY TALENTED! or not. actually, no. dont. EVER. stay this good. -B

On Wednesday September 3rd, 2003, HeLlSeND (58) writes:

Fuckin beautiful.....rip his still beating heart out and allow him to watch it stop.....i love it..

On Monday August 25th, 2003, angelunderneath (75) writes:

I know you were pissed but this one made me laugh a little. Oh, the things we think!!!!!! Nice write

On Thursday August 21st, 2003, CharlottesWeb (593) writes:

I be a bit scared now...no critique I promise! Mmmm... so fun to see this fun demonic side come out. It was like a childs ring around the rosie...only darkend.

On Thursday August 21st, 2003, CharlottesWeb (593) writes:

I enjoyed it. It sounds very, very releasing too. Like it was a true bit of therapy...did you type it fast?...hehe...wondyful!JM

On Tuesday August 19th, 2003, GreekPhilosopher (181) writes:

Alcohol Often Induces People To See Clearly... Clearer Than When Sober... Clearer That Ever Before. Great Write. GPhD.

On Tuesday August 19th, 2003, TropicalSnowstorm (689) writes:

I'm frightened... : ) I like the ending about going to lunch - that adds levity to the piece. Love it! Ciao, T/S

On Tuesday August 19th, 2003, OLd SouL (837) writes:

Let it out. Seriously, let some more out. I like it.

On Tuesday August 19th, 2003, _Andrew_ (298) writes:

lol, obviously someone pissed you off and it seems they deserve to die :P, excellent way to put how you felt down on paper, you could feel the anger through the lines, loved it *~*aNDReW*~*

On Tuesday August 19th, 2003, AlluringDescent_darkbride (765) writes:

I think that who ever the hell is inspiring you to write this should burn in hell. I have some serious anger issues with this person now. By the way, congratulations...not many poems make me extremely pissed at who they're writing it for. You're emotio

On Tuesday August 19th, 2003, AlluringDescent_darkbride (765) writes:

emotion is astonishing. And flows perfectly together. Kick his fucking ass.

On Monday August 18th, 2003, Unbridled Pain (65) writes:

I like everything you have written, but lately the anger and emotion you have put into your poems has been a welcomed change. this is very good. i truely enjoyed the way you put this one together.U.P.

On Sunday August 17th, 2003, morgue_white (195) writes:

hahaha, you sound like eminem

On Monday August 18th, 2003, ColdScaredAlone (121) writes:

ha, yeah... except a lot better

On Sunday August 17th, 2003, Sharon Rose (637) writes:

kill...I think it's best you and me get that drive on paper. I've felt the rage that deep and sadistic: it's the nastiest part of being human. Words hurt the way you want, without actually leaving a physical mark: powerful things, words like those.

On Sunday August 17th, 2003, Naked_Faerie (170) writes:

You have the ability to write about anything and make it perfect. You are like an actor that can play a role in a comedy, a horror, a mystery, a drama, a romance...the list goes on. I will forever applaud your endless talent.

On Sunday August 17th, 2003, Six-Out (1824) writes:

I agree with Kitty. It's about damn time you get a little angry. Well, more than a little. This is full of rage. Much power in your words. Now to be myself...Kick his goddammed ass!

On Sunday August 17th, 2003, Bast (896) writes:

damn right! kick his ass cre! it's time for a little angry revolution from you, darling.... there are people and things that deserve it. ::hugs::

On Sunday August 17th, 2003, SageoPhoneus (147) writes:

You dish out being pissed like it was a buffet. This piece is angry and well crafted. Great write Jane.

On Sunday August 17th, 2003, Urban Shipwreck (989) writes:

Wow I really, _really_ like this one a lot. I have enjoyed everything of yours I have read so far and so far I think this one is my favorite. Great job ~Urban Shipwreck~

On Sunday August 17th, 2003, Urban Shipwreck (989) writes:

I especially like the stanza beginning with "you thought the glint in my eye" and ending with "is visited on you." Very well done.

On Sunday August 17th, 2003, Dancing_Monkey (1825) writes:

nice.. like the anger put to words.. Monkey

On Sunday August 17th, 2003, Vampira (98) writes:

Don't get rid of this it's perfect!!!!!

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