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She rarely spoke of her start in life
Or the years she'd worked to overcome strife
And all anyone saw was the smile in her eyes
Too smug and self-righteous to ever realize
Her tenderness, fragile, like a dream on the wind
Made her easy to crush when she needed a friend
When the love of her life loved someone else
And spun her joy into a version of hell
She sought out her comfort in the hugs of others
But it was clear from their words they felt so far above her:
it could be worse - don't cry
do not weep you have no right
here you sit so sad and sighing
while half the world is dead or dying
they shamed her heart with verse upon verse
of "just remember - it could always be worse"
--------
She moved on and found new smiles
Worked at making life worthwhile
But soon enough the hard times hit
The kids were hungry in clothes unfit
She toiled from dawn till late at night
Though sad and worn she did not cry
Until one day in weariness
She wept to friends of her distress
But once again they could not see
Past their own big heads to their friend in need
it could be worse - don't cry
do not weep you have no right
here you sit so sad and sighing
while half the world is dead or dying
they tore her heart with verse upon verse
of "just remember - it could always be worse"
--------
Then one day on a warm spring morning
She fell to sickness with little warning
The doctor confirmed her silent fears
And told her she'd reached the dusk of her years
Her heart was sad and she ached for friends
For someone who'd hold her and help face the end
But alone she drew her final breath
And her "friends" were surprised when they heard of her death
By way of GoodBye she left a few simple words
And prayed they'd be heeded and not go unheard:

You always told me not to cry
That as for weeping I had no right
When I was sad and fell to sighing
You said just think, you could be dying
You broke my heart with your careless verse
Don't you know I knew it could have been worse?
I only wanted warmth and love
But no matter my need it was never enough
My last dying hope is that somehow you'll see
How hurtful and careless your actions can be
And maybe the next time a "friend" needs some care
You will be kinder, and you will be there
So farewell, remember, the point of this letter:
It could have been worse, but it should have been better.



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On Tuesday December 4th, 2007, Naked_Faerie (170) writes:
How can I ever read one of yours without commenting? I admit that I don't always read the poem of my day in my e-mail but when I get one like this, I am glad that I took time out of my stupid, busy life to remember why I love poetry...yours especially. You always touch me and remind me what beauty is! ~Faerie~


On Tuesday December 4th, 2007, totaltrip (43) writes:
wow. just wow. i find myself in this work. i find myself sighing, i find myself in need of friend. but at the same time i find myself saying it could be worse. but again, wow, just wow. thanks.


On Thursday September 13th, 2007, anakronistik_me (42) writes:
i've really changed since the first time i read this. i've become a better person. thank you. without reading this i might not have changed at all.


On Monday August 13th, 2007, Reefer_rave (238) writes:
I've always loved this, the trite things people say without knowing how they really make someone feel.


On Monday July 9th, 2007, An Expired Member (34) writes:
Wow, amazing write


On Tuesday March 27th, 2007, anakronistik_me (42) writes:
i'm not really sure what to say...i just can't form words to fit.


On Wednesday March 7th, 2007, prettydisgrace (144) writes:
its amazing...so emotional.words cannot explain.


On Thursday March 1st, 2007, An Expired Member (12) writes:
I just love this. Thats all i have to say.


On Tuesday September 19th, 2006, mywristshurt (530) writes:
this still makes me cry.. everytime i read this.. oh by the way i meant to tell you i put this poem in a report last year for english class.. just wanted to let you know


On Sunday April 23rd, 2006, mywristshurt (530) writes:
this poem always makes me cry.. i love it so much, and each time it touches my heart..


On Tuesday April 4th, 2006, Angst Queen (472) writes:
I can't believe I didn't see a comment from my self on this one. Reading this, especially the last part, sent shivers through my body. You're writing is incredible.


On Monday January 30th, 2006, An Expired Member (5) writes:
I hate you for your way with words that I could never dream of having.


On Thursday January 5th, 2006, braindead_poet (585) writes:
.W O W.


On Thursday January 5th, 2006, An Expired Member (4) writes:
that is just so perfect there's a great point to this and i admire your writing


On Wednesday November 23rd, 2005, Spyral (31) writes:
I'm in love with the random works button.. I wouldn't have stumbled onto this.. It helped to remind me to be there for my friends...


On Sunday October 16th, 2005, coldheartedbiatch (14) writes:
this is beautiful it reminds me of myself and my life, it is great it really brings tears to my eyes when i read it.


On Wednesday September 7th, 2005, GothicBlack (278) writes:
i think i'm about to cry cre! you've completely out done yourself this time. Theres sooo much feeling and depth to this. Only one so great as you could bring tears to my eyes. Thank You. ~gothic~


On Sunday September 4th, 2005, lollipoplips (111) writes:
this is so touching and sad! your so fuckin' talented, so true how friends over look others problems and say some catchy cliche just to get you off thier back!


On Sunday September 4th, 2005, precarious pixie (20) writes:
absolutly right.i hope everyone reads this and remembers it when a friend comes to them.bcuz i know to many times people have died bcuz their "little" problems have been pushed aside.this is beautiful and breath taking


On Thursday July 14th, 2005, Butterfly (123) writes:
Still catch tears everytime I read this. Absolutely amazing.


On Wednesday July 6th, 2005, An Expired Member (5) writes:
Is speachless....


On Wednesday June 22nd, 2005, An Expired Member (21) writes:
I loved it! It touched my heart


On Wednesday June 22nd, 2005, dp_whipping_girl (408) writes:
*cries* amazing


On Monday June 20th, 2005, An Expired Member (7) writes:
wow...this is great, for so many of us our friends are all we have,and there are times when we couldnt get through without them...so many people fail to see this...fabulous job


On Friday May 27th, 2005, peril_notion (124) writes:
beautiful, cre.... absolutley gorgeous. ~Heather


On Wednesday May 18th, 2005, An Expired Member (12) writes:
That is sooo amazing!! I loved that last verse especially, this poem is truly... no words compare to this work


On Tuesday May 10th, 2005, etarnally damnd (99) writes:
this is one of the best things i have read in a long time and is truly moving-michael


On Monday April 11th, 2005, An Expired Member (3) writes:
I'm so lovin' this!


On Friday April 8th, 2005, rondant (76) writes:
beautifully written....Ronda


On Wednesday March 30th, 2005, An Expired Member (6) writes:
INCREDIBLE!


On Monday March 14th, 2005, An Expired Member (42) writes:
I really like this, and I know I've read it in an email. I constantly come back to it, because it's just amazing!


On Wednesday February 2nd, 2005, An Expired Member (12) writes:
Dude, I love like almost all of you're poems. You're stuff is the shit guy! Just like it's touching. Keep it up


On Wednesday February 2nd, 2005, suicideseason (2161) writes:
Dude...you called her 'Dude'...she's no dude.


On Wednesday February 2nd, 2005, suicideseason (2161) writes:
Oh...and not just a girl,a babe...a royal babe.


On Wednesday February 2nd, 2005, Twilight (2114) writes:
im gonna have to agree with tim...i dont like confrontation...but cre is a girl:)


On Wednesday January 19th, 2005, An Expired Member (25) writes:
I have read this poem over and over again, each time it seems to have more and more meaning to me. This is one of my favorite poems :) --beautiful


On Thursday December 9th, 2004, Clerik (49) writes:
Very beautiful,I can relate to many things that should have been better.


On Sunday November 28th, 2004, An Expired Member (62) writes:
omg so true. i know this feeling very well. you said it perfectly. amazing write!


On Monday November 15th, 2004, indefined (726) writes:
baked to poetic perfection. such a story wrapped in relatively few words. i add myself to the vast list of accolades.


On Monday November 15th, 2004, Butterfly (123) writes:
Wow this is absolutely stunning. Almost brought a tear to my eye. I love this. Going into my fave list now.


On Wednesday November 10th, 2004, ~SHeLL*BeLL~ (73) writes:
this poem is now one of my favs.nice work


On Friday November 5th, 2004, Daemonicus (657) writes:
awwwww.. what a graceful, tragic write.. so completely told. i read this as a song, it would do so well as one, the form is perfect for it.. this fits together so sweetly, spoken softly, but cutting deeply.


On Friday November 5th, 2004, King_Crazy_Dave (420) writes:
honestly my favorite poem on the site, has been ever since you posted it. i have no idea why i have no comment here yet


On Friday October 15th, 2004, Nesfurata (67) writes:
A wonderful message. It really gives a lot of insight and things to think about. Great job -Elizabeth


On Saturday October 2nd, 2004, Ravenblade (281) writes:
GOd, I've missed reading this over and over again, I just felt inclined to reread all my favorites again tonight to just see how it makes me feel....still loved this just as strongly...>Raven<


On Monday August 23rd, 2004, MelvinOliverDrauma (559) writes:
I do not pity the girl. However this poem is smooth like silk and I do like the measage


On Monday June 28th, 2004, Lucia (6) writes:
I read this once long ago, and have now since returned tonight to find it again... Simply breathtaking, and so true... I love your style, and this piece strikes me especially. / Lucia /


On Thursday June 17th, 2004, An Expired Member (2) writes:
I've always admired this work. It's been months since I last read it. But I've found it at last.


On Thursday May 27th, 2004, An Expired Member (38) writes:
makes me feel like shit inside but understand at the same time


On Sunday May 23rd, 2004, Savannah (290) writes:
I will remember this poem next time someone tells me that and I will smile inside.


On Thursday April 29th, 2004, aXe FactoR (432) writes:
really very very true... a lot of things in life could really be much worse..but can be better... great awesome write...no wonder its a finalist poem... life transforming poem...makes me reaccess life and its complexities... powerful!


On Saturday April 24th, 2004, girlafraid (581) writes:
this is so sad...made me think of my mother, it pretty much described her life...if only people would realize this


On Saturday April 24th, 2004, Daegonna (39) writes:
yes it should have been better... (her life i mean) GREAT WRITE! ~Daegonna~


On Wednesday April 21st, 2004, Beautiful Scars (247) writes:
Oh wow...this reminds me of my own life...This poem gave such A feeling of sadness.....this is so beatifully written...-fairy-


On Tuesday March 16th, 2004, BoldSolitude (278) writes:
I remember reading this when you posted it, back before I was a member and I liked it then. It has been one of those poems that sticks with you. I looked it up again on the search option so I could make it a favorite.


On Wednesday March 31st, 2004, Instant Insanity (773) writes:
agreed. I read it before I was a member, and now its on my favorite!!!


On Thursday February 19th, 2004, Antony (44) writes:
Your comments go on and on so I am just another fan. I hope you realize how much you do by doing what you do.


On Wednesday February 18th, 2004, An Expired Member (7) writes:
this is amazing....i think you could possibly be one of the best writers on the site....you have so much talent and you show it well


On Wednesday January 21st, 2004, flying_fox (801) writes:
I really related to this - can't stand the phrase "it could be worse"...and I love the last line, so true, vey powerful. FF


On Sunday January 18th, 2004, changed_angel (59) writes:
I loved the ending.....its so very true in the sense of how "friends" can be so blind staring through you.....very good....loved it


On Friday January 2nd, 2004, Cwn Annwn (108) writes:
I could read this one over and over and over and over and over...I LOVE IT SO MUCH! ~GoNe~


On Wednesday December 24th, 2003, Delphoid-Q (284) writes:
*Shivers*. I feel honoured to have been allowed to read this. I won't praise it with exclamation marks and such. All I will say is that this is one of the best. Ever. And i'm not merely referring to dp.com, either.


On Wednesday December 17th, 2003, An Expired Member (10) writes:
Ooohhhhh *Cries* It's s-s-so SAAAAAAD!! I LOVE the last Line!! It' just makes it all so TRUE!!


On Thursday November 27th, 2003, Naked_Faerie (170) writes:
YOu are so magnificent and damn right! I know I've told you atleast a million times, but I am in awe of you. The very last line was especially powerful! Perfect as always! ~Faerie~


On Wednesday October 15th, 2003, AlluringDescent_darkbride (803) writes:
Where is my comment? I know I've commented on this before. I had to of! It's one of my favorites on this whole friggin site! Oh geez...well anyway, this is amazing Cre. The message is so very powerful.


On Wednesday October 15th, 2003, AlluringDescent_darkbride (803) writes:
I know I've told you this a million times but your works just blow my mind...you are so talented.


On Wednesday October 15th, 2003, An Expired Member (12) writes:
Damn right it should have been better!


On Tuesday October 7th, 2003, An Expired Member (43) writes:
Oh my god...i really don't know what to say hun,this is jus so,so beautiful.I felt like crying after i read this...its so touching.Im just sorry that i cant think of a better comment to leave.Dusky..xxx...


On Sunday October 5th, 2003, Drifter (378) writes:
I love this one no matter how many times i read it. Smacks you with truth and leaves you stunned.


On Saturday October 4th, 2003, Mademoiselle_Minx (147) writes:
wow...this is soo true...def a fave...dont know what to say because its so perfect...~katie~


On Saturday September 27th, 2003, gothemite (400) writes:
wow that was amazing.. dont know what else to say... its awsome


On Saturday September 20th, 2003, TheMistressBucket (19) writes:
*With tears in my eyes* How beautiful, thoughtful, and completly touching this piece is. What an amazing Poet you are!


On Saturday September 20th, 2003, Nadir (631) writes:
In fear we barely touch skin, Skin shall desire a pure touch, It will never fail to notice, Pure or shallow touch, And as it grows cold, Some shall find a final relief. Tiger


On Friday August 29th, 2003, Drea (976) writes:
it touched me deeply. so many times i have heard "it could always be worse". very beautiful. ~Drea~


On Sunday August 17th, 2003, _Andrew_ (302) writes:
LoL i loved the ending fo sho, the entire poem was tear jerking, but in the end i could only smile, awesome picture, and just... BEAUTIFUL *~*aNDReW*~*


On Sunday August 17th, 2003, Urban Shipwreck (1001) writes:
I don't know what to say that everyone else hasn't said already. VERY great write and message. This has 'Ancient Proverb' written all over it. ~Urban Shipwreck~


On Saturday August 16th, 2003, Nightingale (579) writes:
This is absolutely beautiful, cre... it's going in my favourites, it rings so true and it's beautifully written.


On Tuesday August 12th, 2003, An Expired Member (4) writes:
Truely touching and beautifully written ..but what's even more sad is that toooo many people are shitheads like that.


On Saturday August 9th, 2003, IceDragoness (257) writes:
definately something that should be read and well remembered, such an incredibly sad story with a good lesson, at the end i was wondering to myself what happened to the kids though ~Dawn


On Tuesday August 5th, 2003, An Expired Member (3) writes:
I really like this poem it made me think


On Friday August 1st, 2003, An Expired Member (21) writes:
that is such an awesome peom my god.wow WOW


On Saturday July 26th, 2003, An Expired Member (2) writes:
WOW That was really good...It reminds me of a poem one of the people I know wrote. Although she didn't die


On Saturday July 19th, 2003, An Expired Member (13) writes:
WOW....i couldnt breathe after i read this honestly, your poems make my eyes get stuck to the screen, i feel as if it is happening right before me, you truely are amazing...*stares at the screen in awe*


On Wednesday July 16th, 2003, Sky Singer (225) writes:
i wish i had something to say that isn't already here. brilliant poem, and i think i, too, will be more careful when i use that phrase.


On Tuesday July 15th, 2003, Rebel_Angel (402) writes:
wow this is good...I will try never to use that phrase again...till I forget...lol Great Write


On Sunday July 13th, 2003, Lady_Ahz (80) writes:
Cre, this is so beautiful and so true!!! Amazing piece.. :)


On Sunday July 13th, 2003, hate_doll (331) writes:
Cre...this is absolutely beautiful...so sad and treacherous. Such a tender message. You're work is treasured by me...especially this piece...simply amazing...


On Sunday July 13th, 2003, Inevitability (645) writes:
There's tears in my eyes right now, and no, I'm not exaggerating that...this is brilliant and so...oh, I'm at a loss, dear..


On Saturday July 12th, 2003, Demosthenes (226) writes:
o god cre. you have no idea how much i wish i had the words to explain how much i love this. its completely perfect. i cant usually find at least two or three flaaws in everything i read, because im a perfectionist... but i found non ein this. -B


On Friday July 11th, 2003, Jonas (885) writes:
with each piece i read you break my heart... you may have noticed i don't frequent your site so much as i did... because, i swear you touch so deeply and chip away pieces of my heart... and i'm afraid that i will have none left at the end of my reading


On Friday July 11th, 2003, Jonas (885) writes:
it doesn't so much sound like it, but that is utterly complimentary, if your work is sad, it is perfectly sad, a sadness that pierces and penetrates to the very core of a sensitive young man... you show me blue hued beauty


On Friday July 11th, 2003, An Expired Member (18) writes:
This piece is so... true. So sad but true. And i have felt this woman's pain indeed. I love this. Keep it up hun. #flower#


On Thursday July 10th, 2003, braindeadpoet (129) writes:
Your heart and sincerity pour onto the page w/ such ease. I would love to see through your eyes just for a moment. You are a truely unique writer...great job.


On Thursday July 10th, 2003, Ravenblade (281) writes:
Absolutely amazing work cre...I can't believe I've been away so long as to not have read up on your newest work, but when I get more time I shall do my best...this is sad but powerful. great rhythm, beautiful flow, unbelievably worded. Definatly a favor


On Thursday July 10th, 2003, Ravenblade (281) writes:
favorite*


On Thursday July 10th, 2003, nonhero_until_death (167) writes:
oh my god. how you come up with these insanely brilliant ideas for poetry, and then masterfully put them into the pages of literature with pure emotion and heart, is way past me... you rule. :)


On Thursday July 10th, 2003, MindRape (902) writes:
YES!!! EXACTLY!!!! ugh! i sooo know this feeling cre and wow you just said it so perfectly. Awesome write lady!


On Wednesday July 9th, 2003, GothicBlack (278) writes:
hmm.. i'm at a loss of words.. not sure what to say to this.. besides maybe thank you. i'll watch my words with friends and others.. hmmm.. i really enjoyed this, it opened my eyes. thanks. ~gothic~


On Wednesday July 9th, 2003, Ophelia (312) writes:
I have sat here trying to write a comment and I just don't know what to say except this is great..........O


On Wednesday July 9th, 2003, Aurora_Light (564) writes:
wow i think i will never use those words again. i love this write and hope that people realize "It could have been worse, but it should have been better." (to quote a great poet)


On Wednesday July 9th, 2003, anathema (66) writes:
exactly right. and cursed are the people who don't remember that. brava, dear...


On Wednesday July 9th, 2003, Six-Out (1832) writes:
Very good point Jane, very good, I know, I've used the whole coulda been worse scenario, and this makes me look at it differently. Great.


On Wednesday July 9th, 2003, maddin foxxxy (383) writes:
::tears::...this is wonderfully written as it left a tender thought aswell...you write the truth and i can really swim through that perspective..AMAZING.



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