The Ballad of Flattery's Doom

I took your face and put it on
You so inspired me with your style
I loved your voice, your confidence
And thought I’d try it for a while.

My mundane world so dull, so grey
but you were so resplendent; See,
I dreamt that if I mirrored you
That you would fall in love with me.

I took your face and put it on
and, masked, I loved my brilliant art
My insight and my imagery
My new charisma, new bold heart

I practised wearing worlds of yours
and revelled in their wondrous view
and soon I dazzled, I delighted -
I was perfect, just like you.

At first I could not comprehend
why your passion stayed as stone
Your smile was saddened, and your touch
Forever cold, and me alone.

But now I was magnificent!
I could not see how you’d be bored,
Till my reflection showed the truth
Of course: you’d seen that face before.

More comments:

• On Wednesday, June 18, 2008, DIATRICUS (83) wrote:
  
  Brilliantly scripted...
  
  
• On Friday, December 7, 2007, Lynaes (1028) wrote:
  
  Purrfect. Your intelligence astounds me. The ending as well, summed it all up brilliant. Your words are very inspiring. :)
  
  
• On Monday, August 6, 2007, Narcissa (752) wrote:
  
  Beautiful - Isn't that the truth
  
  
• A former member wrote: wow, with the ending you got me, deserved win
  
  
• On Tuesday, June 26, 2007, Lotophagi (423) wrote:
  
  wonderful write, it has been so long since I've been here... and it's just lovely that I decided to read this before anything else. Thank you.
  
  
• On Saturday, June 23, 2007, Enigma (98) wrote:
  
  That was amazing,
  
  
• On Monday, June 11, 2007, Spiritus_Frumenti (366) wrote:
  
  you are just so creative with words....there's nothing you can't accomplish with your mighty pen...-l-
  
  
• On Saturday, June 9, 2007, blue (1607) wrote:
  
  I.. ooh, goosebumps. Again, you did it again! ~b rawr.
  
  
• On Saturday, June 9, 2007, Bakkhus Unbound (1056) wrote:
  
  Congrats! Of course... you deserve the win; very well deserved.
  
  
• On Friday, June 8, 2007, SilentStalker (1255) wrote:
  
  ...this makes me proud to have been commented on by you; you're a master of metre and rhyme as well, and frankly, I can't decide which part of the poem drew me in more--the flawless structure, or the onbroken content and message...
  
  
• On Saturday, June 9, 2007, SilentStalker (1255) wrote:
  
  *unbroken
  
  
• On Friday, June 8, 2007, SilentStalker (1255) wrote:
  
  ...though being a perfectionist in my own heart, I might spot some things others may have brushed off; that, however, doesn't take away the fact that this is as close to perfect as a write can ever get...
  
  
• On Friday, June 8, 2007, SilentStalker (1255) wrote:
  
  ...I'm actually glad to see someone else masters 'ABCB' on here as well; sure, 'ABAB' done right is much more impressive, but how many times do we see it done well...? this is definitely my preferred scheme, in writing And in reading...
  
  
• On Friday, June 8, 2007, SilentStalker (1255) wrote:
  
  ...well, other than the scheme I stole from Poe; but yeah, that's a whole new ball game...anyways, thanks for the read, and I see why you won; seeing such a similar writing style gives me a bit of hope... :D -- Darun
  
  
• On Thursday, June 7, 2007, glasshouse (702) wrote:
  
  A well deserved victory. Awesome.--Jes
  
  
• On Thursday, June 7, 2007, carlosjackal (1804) wrote:
  
  Hearty Congrats, Natalie :) -Carl
  
  
• On Thursday, May 17, 2007, The Zebra Warrior (2210) wrote:
  
  iambic tetrameter seems to rollick the see saw rhyme into this wistfully tinged ballad, nice to see a metrically appeasing piece, a real versatile showing from you, a poem of intellect and emotive stress....line stress stresses the strength/huh?!?!? Yes!!
  
  
• On Friday, May 11, 2007, Sepulcrawl (94) wrote:
  
  finally something the meaning wasn't lost on me in. if you write me something personal i will send you a piece of card with my lip prints on it.
  
  
• A former member wrote: Mirrors and masks end up by becoming interchangeable, as beauty gives way to boredom. Wonderfully portrayed and infinitely true.
  
  
• On Friday, May 4, 2007, asphyxia (61) wrote:
  
  oh the last line kills. but in the painfully, wonderful way!