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The Ballad of Flattery's Doom

I took your face and put it on
You so inspired me with your style
I loved your voice, your confidence
And thought I’d try it for a while.

My mundane world so dull, so grey
but you were so resplendent; See,
I dreamt that if I mirrored you
That you would fall in love with me.

I took your face and put it on
and, masked, I loved my brilliant art
My insight and my imagery
My new charisma, new bold heart

I practised wearing worlds of yours
and revelled in their wondrous view
and soon I dazzled, I delighted -
I was perfect, just like you.

At first I could not comprehend
why your passion stayed as stone
Your smile was saddened, and your touch
Forever cold, and me alone.

But now I was magnificent!
I could not see how you’d be bored,
Till my reflection showed the truth
Of course: you’d seen that face before.

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On Wednesday June 18th, 2008, DIATRICUS (75) writes:

Brilliantly scripted...

On Friday December 7th, 2007, Lynaes (1128) writes:

Purrfect. Your intelligence astounds me. The ending as well, summed it all up brilliant. Your words are very inspiring. :)

On Monday August 6th, 2007, Narcissa (687) writes:

Beautiful - Isn't that the truth

On Thursday July 5th, 2007, An Expired Member (16) writes:

wow, with the ending you got me, deserved win

On Tuesday June 26th, 2007, Lotophagi (449) writes:

wonderful write, it has been so long since I've been here... and it's just lovely that I decided to read this before anything else. Thank you.

On Saturday June 23rd, 2007, Enigma (126) writes:

That was amazing,

On Monday June 11th, 2007, Spiritus_Frumenti (361) writes:

you are just so creative with words....there's nothing you can't accomplish with your mighty pen...-l-

On Saturday June 9th, 2007, blue (1749) writes:

I.. ooh, goosebumps. Again, you did it again! ~b rawr.

On Saturday June 9th, 2007, Bakkhus Unbound (1105) writes:

Congrats! Of course... you deserve the win; very well deserved.

On Friday June 8th, 2007, SilentStalker (1321) writes:

...this makes me proud to have been commented on by you; you're a master of metre and rhyme as well, and frankly, I can't decide which part of the poem drew me in more--the flawless structure, or the onbroken content and message...

On Saturday June 9th, 2007, SilentStalker (1321) writes:

*unbroken

On Friday June 8th, 2007, SilentStalker (1321) writes:

...though being a perfectionist in my own heart, I might spot some things others may have brushed off; that, however, doesn't take away the fact that this is as close to perfect as a write can ever get...

On Friday June 8th, 2007, SilentStalker (1321) writes:

...I'm actually glad to see someone else masters 'ABCB' on here as well; sure, 'ABAB' done right is much more impressive, but how many times do we see it done well...? this is definitely my preferred scheme, in writing And in reading...

On Friday June 8th, 2007, SilentStalker (1321) writes:

...well, other than the scheme I stole from Poe; but yeah, that's a whole new ball game...anyways, thanks for the read, and I see why you won; seeing such a similar writing style gives me a bit of hope... :D -- Darun

On Thursday June 7th, 2007, glasshouse (801) writes:

A well deserved victory. Awesome.--Jes

On Thursday June 7th, 2007, carlosjackal (1702) writes:

Hearty Congrats, Natalie :) -Carl

On Thursday May 17th, 2007, The Zebra Warrior (2406) writes:

iambic tetrameter seems to rollick the see saw rhyme into this wistfully tinged ballad, nice to see a metrically appeasing piece, a real versatile showing from you, a poem of intellect and emotive stress....line stress stresses the strength/huh?!?!? Yes!!

On Friday May 11th, 2007, Sepulcrawl (106) writes:

finally something the meaning wasn't lost on me in. if you write me something personal i will send you a piece of card with my lip prints on it.

On Wednesday May 9th, 2007, An Expired Member (22) writes:

Mirrors and masks end up by becoming interchangeable, as beauty gives way to boredom. Wonderfully portrayed and infinitely true.

On Friday May 4th, 2007, asphyxia (77) writes:

oh the last line kills. but in the painfully, wonderful way!

On Friday May 4th, 2007, Velvet_Raventon (696) writes:

Very very nice :) ~V.

On Monday April 23rd, 2007, flying_fox (769) writes:

...but you never thought to ask me if I wear it when you're gone. This is wonderful as always. I always find it interesting to see the different things people get out of a poem.

On Monday April 23rd, 2007, flying_fox (769) writes:

For me, it says (the moral of the story if you will) 'be who you really are, don't apologise, don't change. Just be.' I shall also leave you with a quote...

On Monday April 23rd, 2007, flying_fox (769) writes:

You cannot make someone love you. All you can do is stalk them until they give in. :) love you.xxx

On Friday April 20th, 2007, Bakkhus Unbound (1105) writes:

"I practised wearing worlds of yours" The wearer of the masks reveals themselves, as the student become the master. Sometimes we wear these masks that we see in mirrors, not recognizing ourselves at first - and then we stop looking at that mask and see...

On Thursday April 19th, 2007, Nuri (192) writes:

oh my God...I'm not sure if I interpreted it right but as a guilty narcissist,this hits home.Narration is effacacious,title is brilliant,the idea is simply genius.Wish I thought of it!

On Thursday April 19th, 2007, saintedmad (1188) writes:

....((Poe with his infamous ''rather be hated for who i am" quote)); this was wicked honesty with somehow a subversive persona'd sick voice of narration; what a twisted echo and narcissis endeavour; genius you .ness.

On Thursday April 19th, 2007, carlosjackal (1702) writes:

What a closing...so satisfying, the mastery displayed in this piece was magnificent.

On Thursday April 19th, 2007, torn_beauty (103) writes:

Oh wow. Where did this come from? It was just marvalous I tell you!

On Thursday April 19th, 2007, mysterylove (79) writes:

wow amazing..

On Thursday April 19th, 2007, Alanarchy (1673) writes:

So is it the truest form of flattery? Can't say. But you have this ability to express yourself so well. I ate up every word. especially that opening line. I read that and new I was in for something :D awesome.

On Thursday April 19th, 2007, Bella Butchery (1140) writes:

god, this riminded me of falling for someone.... not in love but just for anyone that inspires you... when you meet that person with unlimited potential, you want to rub it all over your skin... or at least, that what i get from this... kudos

On Thursday April 19th, 2007, dying angel (1328) writes:

heartbreaking, to say the least. sometimes we feel that we should try to 'mirror' someone in order to make ourselves relatable. in the end, we learn that people don't like another copy of themselves.

On Thursday April 19th, 2007, dying angel (1328) writes:

we're generally attracted to new faces. there's something irresistibly intriguing about strangers. a thrill in unraveling another’s secrets. somewhat of an adventure to learn the way another operates. wonderful piece. full of your signature wisdom.

On Thursday April 19th, 2007, dying angel (1328) writes:

a lesson that can only be learned through experience. and just a side note: you shouldn't be trying to mirror anyone. you're an amazing person.

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