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crush

and as i stand outside your door,
just a little nervous in the starglow,
fireflies bring erratic flametouch to darkness
and my anticipation rivals their burning.

i have waited such a long time
for this moment.
i've brought you a present.
i love it
but i'll share.

i'm hoping it will touch your heart.

the moon casts a gentle luminance -
such beauty -
and i catch my breath
just a little.

my blade glitters silverbright
and your skin is so soft.

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On Friday September 30th, 2005, evolve (2220) writes:

..this was so softly illustrated to be so sharp and almost, dare I say it, unnerving..the end line is what did it for me..I held my breath for the whole of this..delicate hands sculpt the strongest images. This is stellar.

On Thursday September 1st, 2005, Gideon Lost (189) writes:

Wow! The last 2 lines are a clencher. Freedom is a great gift. -Gideon

On Thursday August 18th, 2005, Spiritus_Frumenti (343) writes:

i love this...sweet and lovely..."fireflies bring erratic flametouch to darkness /and my anticipation rivals their burning"..you are a goddess...-l-

On Tuesday July 19th, 2005, blue (1757) writes:

holy shit lady!! thats the second time in a week.. smile, smile, gasp!! :) ~b

On Monday July 11th, 2005, wannabe_rebel (25) writes:

thank you so much for the comment! you're an incredible writer and your visions are so crystal clear, it almost hurts.

On Wednesday July 6th, 2005, TheBardOfBlasphemy (473) writes:

I was going to gag (being cynical & spitefully unlovalble) until I read the end. Deliciously evil. (the present) "I hope it will touch your heart" - so very un-divine.

On Wednesday June 22nd, 2005, dp_whipping_girl (406) writes:

sexy, romantic, haunting imagery *shivers*

On Saturday June 18th, 2005, OLd SouL (838) writes:

deviously delicious. I've missed reading you :) :::OLd

On Saturday June 4th, 2005, jaunty pill (74) writes:

I also must mention that " silverbright " is a lovely combination...Which I often find in a lot of your work. It is nice to read you again. Often you leave me crippled.

On Saturday June 4th, 2005, jaunty pill (74) writes:

I just wonder if it is a sin to indulge in such poetry today. ;) You always know how to strike a cord..Something near and dear to my own work. A female me maybe? Maybe not. Love it. Change nothing.

On Tuesday May 24th, 2005, Jay Jii (336) writes:

"i'm hoping it will touch your heart." - chilling. Gets better with each read. Just marvelous.

On Wednesday May 18th, 2005, flying_fox (769) writes:

bravo... just like Epi, I went back and read it again. Very clever indeed. xx

On Saturday May 14th, 2005, Liz (407) writes:

...starglow, flametouch, silverbright... I love the imagery, how your descriptions fit the style to make everything luminous and tightly wound. Very beautiful.

On Tuesday May 10th, 2005, An Expired Member (6) writes:

Beautiful poetry. :-)

On Tuesday May 10th, 2005, Bakkhus Unbound (1110) writes:

"fireflies bring erratic flametouch to darkness" Like a steely blade in a silken sheath, it's hard to see what the truth is made of; a serpent's smile; the shadow under the door. There is something on the edge of horror creeping behind the moon's lumina

On Tuesday May 10th, 2005, Bakkhus Unbound (1110) writes:

... moon's luminance, here, make's me just a little nervous. Well written; I can feel the crush of gentle poetry heavy in the 'silverbright' of your poetic genious.

On Monday May 9th, 2005, stuart_pid (217) writes:

i love the way you write and this is certainly no exception. i loved the ending. made me smile. good work.

On Saturday May 7th, 2005, birdwell (177) writes:

after i read the ending, i went back and read it again... fantastic!! ~db~

On Friday May 6th, 2005, Sepulcrawl (106) writes:

glad to have you back

On Thursday May 5th, 2005, Valentine (509) writes:

I loved this, purr. The unsettling undertone and deceptive style is beautifully distinguished. The misleading illusion is gently haunting and the last line was exquisite- Wonderfully memorbale. Your works possess such a unique feel. Outstanding.

On Thursday May 5th, 2005, shadowsinthelight (211) writes:

If I were Jon, I'd be sleeping with one eye open tonight, definitely DP material. S.

On Thursday May 5th, 2005, An Expired Member (38) writes:

that was really nice. i liked how you sort of give the illusion of something else...but i had a feeling what it was. good job.

On Thursday May 5th, 2005, Railway_Butterfly (464) writes:

This really reminded me of a poem I once read by Carol Anne Duffy called 'Lovesick'.. though, I feel like this has a slightly different.. edge to it. Anyway, I loved this.. truly wonderful

On Monday May 9th, 2005, purr_verse (1438) writes:

dang! I'm so curious now...I searched on Google for this but can't find that specific piece, although I found other Duffy works - who I hadn't heard of before, so...new writer discovery for me! :)

On Thursday May 5th, 2005, AniDayz (1284) writes:

ahhh...beautifully chilling my bones...this is magnificent*

On Thursday May 5th, 2005, Solace (1425) writes:

Oh love, your such a soppy romantic natalie, so beautiful...Is a letter opener a good gift to a love? Your judgement call not mine :)

On Thursday May 5th, 2005, NikesRain (1504) writes:

hehe excellent, so innocent appearing at first then the ending just gives a sly satisfying little chill....thanks for that ;)

On Thursday May 5th, 2005, AlluringDescent_darkbride (765) writes:

wicked

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