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surrender in 5.7.5.

My words fell asleep
so I wandered in search of
glades of new brilliance

I quested for form;
seeking sonnets and wildsong
in wordforests but

cinquain and quatrain
teased elusive and wilful;
I could not dance and

on my poetry
expedition I just sank
into mere hike ooze.

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On Saturday March 1st, 2008, carlosjackal (1653) writes:

New writes!! Please**\O/**

On Tuesday November 27th, 2007, glasshouse (801) writes:

Very clever indeed. the idea of "seeking sonnets and wildsong in wordforests" is the most amazing thing i've ever heard to describe how i feel on far too few occasions but certainly HAVE felt. I love it. Most definitely. --Jes

On Thursday October 18th, 2007, Bakkhus Unbound (1108) writes:

"cinquain and quatrain" Love the jazz, & the "hike ooze" Haiku. Lovely wordwonderment, as always. Very clever. Love the 5.7.5 syllable/meter (even w/ the ending 4)... well crafted. If only there were "wordforests" we could write & wander in... Well done.

On Sunday October 21st, 2007, purr_verse (1437) writes:

"...he ending 4" ARGH! Bugger! I can't add. *sob* Dammit, I have to fix that. I'll come back when I've grown a clue. Thank you, though - now THAT is constructive criticism, lol.

On Wednesday October 24th, 2007, carlosjackal (1653) writes:

No! No! Keep it..you could say that the very last line is there to be ironic ;)

On Wednesday October 24th, 2007, purr_verse (1437) writes:

Hey, yeah! Let's go with that until I, um...get it right. ;D

On Wednesday December 12th, 2007, purr_verse (1437) writes:

Okay, I can count now. ;) Sorted.

On Saturday December 15th, 2007, carlosjackal (1653) writes:

=D -Carl

On Sunday October 14th, 2007, flying_fox (769) writes:

SO great! The lilt, the pun... ah just love it love it love it.

On Sunday October 14th, 2007, The Zebra Warrior (2406) writes:

ahhh....clever dance in haiku "hike ooze" format with syallable brilliance for a finale....that showcases poetry's ability to break and make words as new...love the teasing poetry-writing theme being a clash of inspiration...classy :)

On Monday October 15th, 2007, carlosjackal (1653) writes:

"Haikus"...hehe..brilliant :)

On Saturday October 13th, 2007, carlosjackal (1653) writes:

Yay! New purr_post! Fantabulous as ever, Natalie. P.S. You watching the Rugby World Cup Semi-Final tonight :P -Carl

On Saturday October 20th, 2007, carlosjackal (1653) writes:

P.P.S. You watching the Final tonight ;)

On Saturday October 13th, 2007, saintedmad (1164) writes:

a tangibly expressive and liliing piece; an irony of peotry within vs without in all tis myriad meanings. .

On Saturday October 13th, 2007, saintedmad (1164) writes:

egads, i cannot even spell correctly :{ "lilting" and "poetry".....[damns my brain in the a.m.]

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