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Marks

Her fingertips leave marks
in the sand, the beach deserted
and cold, as if winter
could last forever.
I guess she ruined the summer
[for me]

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On Tuesday October 31st, 2006, GreyDividing (202) writes:

My spine shuddered. Very wicked, nice.

On Tuesday August 29th, 2006, The Zebra Warrior (2414) writes:

subtle variatian of a theme - nothing too arcane; bittersweet and full of human evaluation

On Tuesday August 29th, 2006, gbuff69 (212) writes:

a perfect imprint of pain.

On Monday August 28th, 2006, Ainsof (1809) writes:

it's the "as if" that draws me in to this... I mean, does she leave marks in the sand, like clawing to get out because winter could last forever? or is the beach deserted and cold... as dead as forever? or maybe the as if winter could last forever is comm

On Monday August 28th, 2006, Ainsof (1809) writes:

commentary on her marks in the sand... somehow looking back on her making of marks as if it were foolish... the marks will not last, the beach will not be deserted forever... hmmmm the "as if" as wonderfully vague and enticing as an "as if" could be... ni

On Monday August 28th, 2006, Ainsof (1809) writes:

nice work... got bite.

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