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evol i eno eht ot

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day after day
we walk
through this provocation
crossing paths
crossing thoughts
among the same foundation
of this building
through each other
in silence
instead

yet ....
im so FUCKING sick of this ...

i want so bad
to just.....try
just to speak .
just. to .DiE. ......

again and again
in that one moment
when i find it,
i begin ....
crumbling & gushing
inside

upon my vomiting -
chest
and stomach
as she passes by
i feel pin pricks
as she says .... "hi" ....

i want so bad
to just..... .try
just to speak.
just. to .DIE.

she walks by again .... and just like her
all i can say ... is almost .... something,
but not quite,
i have no remote, i have no design.
but with only our eyes
is something said,
is there nothing more ..
that silence can end?

there must be something ..
[im wondering] - [im dreaming]
im thinking the same exact thing ... .. .. as she
i silently SCREAM ....
'I WANT YOU'
'I WANT YOU'
'IWANTYOU"

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On Friday June 20th, 2008, WickedAngel (12) writes:

I cried...Still the tears are stinging my eyes. In my experience I spoke, but never the words I so desperately wanted to say. Thanks for sharing this emotional rollercoaster. -Trish

On Wednesday May 30th, 2007, Sin (1639) writes:

damn our desires and bitten tongues...the yearning in this was staggering..i hope you finally got the courage to approach her :) ~kristy

On Friday January 27th, 2006, NikesRain (1505) writes:

oh the internal insanity, frustration wanting doubt... i think i finally took a breath for you at the end after i finally unclenched my jaw... perfect

On Wednesday August 3rd, 2005, Sticky Kitty (322) writes:

stunning. lovely work. -kitty

On Thursday April 14th, 2005, sIo (893) writes:

ahhh i adore it. i adore it all. it's as if you speak from your delicate thoughts, as they breed and extend themselves into pictures and scenes. WONDERFUL!

On Tuesday March 15th, 2005, An Expired Member (42) writes:

I love this!

On Saturday January 1st, 2005, Astra Dei (645) writes:

this was awsome!!!

On Monday July 26th, 2004, Twilight (2104) writes:

holy shit...its still got it. beautiful.

On Tuesday May 25th, 2004, Instant Insanity (769) writes:

Well, This one made my head Ache, I love It

On Tuesday May 18th, 2004, anth (1612) writes:

this poem felt like it was my own voice screaming in my head such was the way you wrote it, a brilliant work , different but so full of emotion and feeling

On Friday May 14th, 2004, Liz (408) writes:

"so FUCKING sick of this" "DIE" -usually those two passages would be all it takes for me to stop reading and write the poet off as whining. But you weren't. You have great rhythm and you back up your feelings with good explanation.

On Friday May 14th, 2004, Liz (408) writes:

Thank you for taking a frequently used topic and not writing it the same way as everyone else.

On Thursday February 12th, 2004, flying_fox (770) writes:

Bravo doc... you've captured the essence of the emotion just perfectly. I felt every line. FF

On Wednesday February 11th, 2004, Lydia Jade (788) writes:

this peice seems so searching and hopless it captures those feeling deeply very awsome write! ~Lydia~

On Wednesday January 14th, 2004, wilted (310) writes:

This has a great way of describing what i'm sure a most people have been through. Great job... it flows so well and the sheer emotion of it captured me.

On Tuesday November 25th, 2003, Amandasauris rex (72) writes:

"im thinking the same exact thing... as she, i silently SCREAM...'i wANt YoU'" Is what everyone feels at one time. This was incredable. I hve felt this before and you stole my memories from it and wrote it. this was great. *kitten*

On Wednesday November 19th, 2003, Twilight (2104) writes:

doc...this one got me. every emotion rose in me and i cant stuff them down. they are gushing out of me. man...this hit home completely. not close to home. it hit home. i know how you feel. i know what its like. amazingly beeautiful doc.

On Monday December 15th, 2003, Twilight (2104) writes:

i cant get enough of this poem i meant what i said about it. it takes hold of me. it does something to how i feel when i read it.

On Tuesday November 18th, 2003, SamoneDrone (409) writes:

i want so bad to just..... .try just to speak. just. to .DIE. i love these lines. it gives me the feeling of not quite being able to say wut you want, when you can't make the words come out the right way (i tend to do it a lot wen speaking to th

On Tuesday November 18th, 2003, SamoneDrone (409) writes:

*the ones i love)

On Tuesday November 18th, 2003, blackdarkness (312) writes:

well done...I always love you stuff...your so unique...i am jelouse of your skill...

On Tuesday November 18th, 2003, Zahgurim (34) writes:

BA-BWAM!!! that smacked me in the head. I relate to this. I am this. JESUS CHRIST...has nothing to do with this. BRAV-fuckin'-O!! I really like this...no joke. Great, now I'm thinkin' about Deanna.

On Sunday November 16th, 2003, Bast (902) writes:

beautifully done... i feel in this the anguish and the desire to just say it... but the fear of what will happen when you do... desire can and will delight in breaking you.

On Sunday November 16th, 2003, nell (328) writes:

sad how this happens so often to most of us, good piece describing an unsaid desire.

On Friday November 14th, 2003, maddin foxxxy (381) writes:

Secret wishing and desiring makes of silence the best of tools though we'd wish to scream it all...happens more than we'd wish to..well done Dr. you always know ur own way to make it good.

On Thursday November 13th, 2003, CharlottesWeb (586) writes:

I was confused in the beginning, my thoughts splitting several different ways. The end tied them together and left me a bit sad. I agree with Cre...your writting conveys reality all too well. ~JMDW~

On Thursday November 13th, 2003, AlluringDescent_darkbride (765) writes:

Heh...that's it exactly. Knowing that you two would be perfect yet never saying a word...You conveyed this perfectly.

On Thursday November 13th, 2003, cre (508) writes:

i admire the gut-wrenching reality of the way you write . . there's something very physical about it . . and unique . . no one else writes like you do. Nice.

On Thursday November 13th, 2003, Urban Shipwreck (990) writes:

I know we've all been here before. This is pretty much the downfall of my existance since I have no balls to ever say a word even if I think they want me to. Nicely done. ~Urban Shipwreck~

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