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Thank you Father

This is about my step father...It was hastely put togeather,I did not want to lose my ideas I will finish it later but fell free to critisize

You would yell and scream
If I did not make the team
You would drink all the time
Then beat me as tho I commited some crime
Then one day I came home with a bat
when I found out you beat my mother
And lucky for you not my little brother
I was going to kill
You looked in to my eyes and began to cry
The day of reckoning had come
For 11 years you made me shed tears
A murderous impulse was beckoning
Lucky for you the PIGS rolled in too

A while later you called on the phone
While I sat in MY home, promisimg me it was't over
I told you that day to stay away
For if you did not, and I saw you bring harm
With a big happy grin
I would send you to whatever God you belive in

You showed me the way to be the man i want to be
wich is the opposite of you
For this I offer thanks

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On Sunday February 13th, 2005, Sticky Kitty (312) writes:

nicely done this rocked -kitty

On Monday December 13th, 2004, An Expired Member (8) writes:

i love it, nice job-kit_kat

On Tuesday June 1st, 2004, Beautiful Scars (245) writes:

some powerfull shit man, Nice work. ..::Rage::...

On Monday April 26th, 2004, murder_in_clubland (497) writes:

fucking amazing...my mother is the same way ~ss

On Tuesday April 13th, 2004, An Expired Member (9) writes:

strong, powerful, excellent...i loved it

On Thursday November 27th, 2003, A Velvet Tongue (527) writes:

everything happens for a reason they say...this is a classic case of monkey see...monkey does different...Nice write..Leonard Cohen is a God btw...*grins*

On Thursday October 16th, 2003, Daughter_Of_The_Moon (203) writes:

very strong feeling there... great job and keep venting, the writing from it is good

On Thursday October 16th, 2003, nell (327) writes:

this is a strong write,holds a powerful message. Nicely done=)

On Thursday October 9th, 2003, The Fallen Angel (289) writes:

I agree with Kefka, this write is very personal, but I will criticize for what is...strong, powerful and encouraging...I will be a greater father than my father...that's what "real men" do+Fallen One+

On Monday October 6th, 2003, Silver Spectre (90) writes:

i like the way you expressed yourself in this...not overly aggressive and understanding the lesson learrned... and i think you are right ...there is no real form because if there was you would feel satisfied afterwards.~silver~

On Thursday October 2nd, 2003, Twilight (2084) writes:

i agree that there is no room for criticism in the art of your personal life but i think that you are a strong person from what i read in your two poems...hehe. you can rise above these assholes and come out on top.

On Wednesday October 1st, 2003, Drea (920) writes:

i know how you feel. this hits close to home. great write ~Drea~

On Tuesday September 30th, 2003, Deliverence (797) writes:

I have no place to critize personal writing..one could never do that..I see it for what it is..Nice name btw..-Kefka

On Thursday September 25th, 2003, An Expired Member (43) writes:

I like this a lot,i understand exactly how this feels,unfortunatly.But great to read,very strong and very emotional..xxx...

On Wednesday September 17th, 2003, Dancing_Monkey (1761) writes:

did I do ennything to encurage this? good write..

On Wednesday September 17th, 2003, urbanhumility (1377) writes:

profound in many ways, strong, well said well done.........urban

On Wednesday September 17th, 2003, Crystal Passion (257) writes:

oOo they don't call you hatebunny for nothing, i hope the venting out helps a little, good write -Kryz

On Thursday September 25th, 2003, UnsilentMajority (22) writes:

there is no real form of venting

On Thursday November 27th, 2003, Chaos-Slayer- (8) writes:

You also have some damn good works.-CS

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