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minus eloquence

i write you in ink,
stain my hands with your name,
callus my fingers
with the effort to unburden.

and sometimes,
i just sit quietly,
wishing i had the words...

but my muse laughs,
and tells me: 'it's but a dream'.

and my hands begin to shake...

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On Sunday February 26th, 2006, Sin (1636) writes:

captivating from the title to the end.. wonderful write ~kristy

On Friday August 12th, 2005, blue (1749) writes:

I've nothing of worth to say to this.. truly remarkable! hmm, is that a contradiction? er well, most enjoyed all the same :) ~b

On Friday August 12th, 2005, not an addict (55) writes:

it can be a thin line, at times, to differentiate between dream and reality (more so, even, when it is just the dream we would have as our reality).

On Friday August 12th, 2005, not an addict (55) writes:

still, reality is only relative... and it could be argued that, in affecting the creation of such poetry as this, said dreams take on a reality all their own.

On Friday August 12th, 2005, not an addict (55) writes:

-hence, i assume, the shaking of the hands... the uncertainty associated with such passions, and the cruel accompanying idea that our reality may also be dream.

On Tuesday November 16th, 2004, Twilight (2102) writes:

this was stunning...the closing lines were intense-i can feel what your feel. it seethes from the screen. i know this from somewhere..thank you for the familiarity. it feels incredible.

On Sunday March 28th, 2004, An Expired Member (21) writes:

sometimes i feel the same way, and u jus express it so well with so much talent.

On Tuesday February 10th, 2004, stormtalk (909) writes:

Gotta love when the title makes the poem. I like the part about the muse calling it a dream, too. Overall, and as always, excellent work. Feed me more!

On Friday February 27th, 2004, red_haze (52) writes:

you are always too nice to me.

On Wednesday February 4th, 2004, flying_fox (769) writes:

fabulous - conveys so much with so few words. FF

On Friday February 27th, 2004, red_haze (52) writes:

your kindness is very much appreciated.

On Wednesday February 4th, 2004, purr_verse (1437) writes:

marvellous, with a beautifully powerful conclusive line. i love it. purr

On Friday February 27th, 2004, red_haze (52) writes:

thanks. and i thought this felt.. incomplete.

On Wednesday February 4th, 2004, TheProphetUntold (366) writes:

Second line first verse...well done. +T.P.U+

On Wednesday February 4th, 2004, red_haze (52) writes:

thank you. :)

On Wednesday February 4th, 2004, manicheism (51) writes:

i really love you work and style, although i can't find the words to properly commend it. keep it up.

On Thursday February 5th, 2004, gothemite (398) writes:

oo cool.. i like your style very much too.. it's .. weird in a way

On Wednesday February 4th, 2004, red_haze (52) writes:

i'm quite inarticulate, so again... thank you for your wonderful comments.

On Tuesday February 10th, 2004, stormtalk (909) writes:

While I'm on the compliment rampage, I should mention that you're as about inarticulate as the child of a dictionary and encyclopedia.

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