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The Little Girl

Quiet home
she's alone

Little girl
painful world

Broke a plate
dad's home late

Mom smokes dope
cannot cope

Little girl
painful world

Something crashes
thirty lashes

Body numb
suck on thumb

Little girl
painful world

punished often
three foot coffin

No more girl
in this world

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On Sunday November 14th, 2004, purr_verse (1435) writes:

very powerfully effective piece! i agree with the myriad of comments before me. :)

On Friday October 22nd, 2004, Ideas (56) writes:

No matter how sad, her death seems merciful. I loved the way this was written.

On Sunday July 25th, 2004, Whisper (137) writes:

I was ensnared and captivated by the emotion caught in this write. -Matt-

On Thursday July 22nd, 2004, An Expired Member (6) writes:

Absolutley breathtaking...there is so much sadness and yet its still beautiful on a painful level...excellent write.*DDP

On Thursday July 22nd, 2004, An Expired Member (3) writes:

i was there before and what's sad is that i'm stil there; i feel your pain

On Monday May 24th, 2004, aXe FactoR (428) writes:

grippingly sad.

On Monday April 19th, 2004, TheArtOfX (105) writes:

wow.. nice couplets, this is really sad, and brings forth a lot of felt grief. very well written crystal...

On Thursday April 1st, 2004, DarkNTormented (17) writes:

that is really sad but i too think its a very good peice

On Thursday February 19th, 2004, An Expired Member (14) writes:

sad, but really good...

On Tuesday January 27th, 2004, An Expired Member (17) writes:

wow...i know how that is all to well... ~LEAH

On Tuesday January 27th, 2004, flying_fox (769) writes:

oh wow... this is very good. So very sad and I can only hope this is fiction not truth. FF

On Monday January 26th, 2004, Rebel_Angel (402) writes:

this is a very sad story!...

On Thursday January 15th, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1804) writes:

nicely put together. the story was quite sad. :o( M.

On Thursday January 15th, 2004, Daemonicus (639) writes:

again... amazed. lovely how its written

On Monday December 15th, 2003, CharlottesWeb (599) writes:

Quick paced, dreadfully sprinting through every word and not wanting to reach the last. Yeah, thats it. I knew what was coming but you forced such a fast pace. ~JMDW~

On Tuesday October 28th, 2003, Bakkhus Unbound (1105) writes:

"Something crashes thirty lashes" I pray not that in saying this reminds me of Edward Gorey poisons you: C is for Crystal who faded w/ paints P for Passion who gave us pleasure w/ words

On Tuesday October 28th, 2003, Crystal Passion (257) writes:

*melts*

On Saturday October 25th, 2003, Rebel_Angel (402) writes:

very nice write but also very very sad...Why do adults take their anger out on helpless children?

On Tuesday October 14th, 2003, Drea (930) writes:

agrees with six. so sad. i just saw on tv something like this happening to a lil boy. ~Drea~

On Sunday October 12th, 2003, GreekPhilosopher (181) writes:

A Morbid Tale To Say The Least... Too Surreal! GPhD.

On Sunday October 12th, 2003, Markus Porkwing (713) writes:

A sad picture of many young ladies lives at home. Dysfunctional homes!

On Saturday October 11th, 2003, An Expired Member (43) writes:

god,this is so sad...i really like the simplicity in the structure of this poem,It almost makes it seem more chidish itself,as though written by the girl,if that makes n e sense.Wonderful erite,Dusky..xxx...

On Saturday October 11th, 2003, An Expired Member (44) writes:

The repetition of "Little girl / painful world" was very effective. A beautiful and powerful work.

On Saturday October 11th, 2003, SilentStalker (1321) writes:

...yeah, that's sad...you've said more than enough in such a short poem...well done.. -Darun

On Saturday October 11th, 2003, An Expired Member (5) writes:

It's really sad... but I like it...

On Friday October 10th, 2003, gothemite (398) writes:

aww thats sad

On Friday October 10th, 2003, _Andrew_ (298) writes:

wonderful write kryz

On Friday October 10th, 2003, Trichotillomaniac (49) writes:

tragic..=(

On Friday October 10th, 2003, Six-Out (1827) writes:

The everyday tragedies that accomidate this world...so sad.

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