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Whiskey Dreams and Snowglobes by OLd SouL
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Whiskey Dreams and Snowglobes

~ OLd SouL ~

crystal clear glass of a whiskey bottle
rings louder than the phone left off the hook
my only friends gathering will be the smoke rings
and the distant dreams... of all the things
I should have done right.

But I will smile knowing I did everything wrong

and it wasn't my lungs that grew blacker
with every draw on the cigarette...

and it wasn't the winter air around me
that became colder with every passing hour...

It was your heart.
...that changed everything inside of me

All my innocence and childhood dreams lie inside
the snowglobe that left the impression on the wall...
shattered on the floor

I'll pluck the shards of glass out of my feet
for the rest of the night and think...
if I glue this thing back together
will it all be alright again.

Knowing this feeling inside of me,
I will forever be broken.

© 2005 OLd SouL
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  • italianbella On Saturday, December 22, 2007, italianbella (235) wrote:

    this is breath takingly beautiful its like the words flowed from youre soul and some how managed to touch mine amazing write:)

  • Lynaes On Sunday, October 28, 2007, Lynaes (1028) wrote:

    "it was your heart... that changed everything inside me." Between you posting this, and me commenting again now, I have gained a deep acknowledgement of this. And I don't regret it anymore, because you've made it beautiful with this poem. Thank you.

  • glasshouse On Monday, October 1, 2007, glasshouse (702) wrote:

    This still takes my breath away. I can't begin to tell you what this sparks inside of me except to call it, perhaps, a lingering shard of that snowglobe. You've touched me a thousand times with this write and I still love it every single time. --Jes

  • Reefer_rave On Tuesday, August 14, 2007, Reefer_rave (188) wrote:

    " and the distant dreams... of all the things , I should have done right ".. Haunting and gorgeous

  • TheDismantled On Friday, February 23, 2007, TheDismantled (13) wrote:

    nice title

  • glasshouse On Friday, January 12, 2007, glasshouse (702) wrote:

    You'll never know the way this moves me. Still.

  • Bakkhus Unbound On Friday, January 12, 2007, Bakkhus Unbound (1056) wrote:

    "I'll pluck the shards of glass out of my feet for the rest of the night and think..." Tragic love splendidly told w/ a blacker shade of the [old]soul. I can feel the rhythm, the hours passing like used cigarettes; well done!

  • TaintedButterfly On Wednesday, May 3, 2006, TaintedButterfly (841) wrote:

    Still as awesome as the first time I read it!

  • Drayvinio On Wednesday, February 15, 2006, Drayvinio (12) wrote:

    Beautiful. Loved the imagery. Excellent write.

  • MindRape On Saturday, February 4, 2006, MindRape (728) wrote:

    geezus did everyone just drop off the face of the earth or something

  • TaintedButterfly On Friday, February 3, 2006, TaintedButterfly (841) wrote:

    A mended snowglobe has character. Wow... I'm just reading your works and I must say, you freakin rock! This was not only crippling but sweet in its surrender. Wow all I can utter. Julia~

  • Circe On Wednesday, December 7, 2005, Circe (611) wrote:

    This is softly aching, heart-twisting, and I can't quite catch my breath. Your self-assessment brings such rawness and honesty to the imagery and reflection, that it hurts to feel it.

  • WinterGrave On Tuesday, December 6, 2005, WinterGrave (305) wrote:

    a sad poem, but a great first to read sence last i visited DP. Thanks for the comment on my latest.~~~Grave

  • Raven On Friday, December 2, 2005, Raven (338) wrote:

    Give me a moment to uncrumple myself ... This was pristine, beautifully melancholy, deeply touching... lovely.

  • Lynaes On Wednesday, November 30, 2005, Lynaes (1028) wrote:

    Oh Oldie, it's been so long.. I've missed you so much. this.. is just so you. If there was no name on this, I would just *know* it was you.

  • Lynaes On Wednesday, November 30, 2005, Lynaes (1028) wrote:

    your use of metaphor is as elegant as always.. I told you your poems leave pictures and colours in my head, and they linger. Thank you for that. *big small bear hugs*

  • Lynaes On Wednesday, November 30, 2005, Lynaes (1028) wrote:

    ..*clicks favourites*

  • A former member wrote: Shit Oldie. This hit hard. ~Ship!

  • purr_verse On Tuesday, November 29, 2005, purr_verse (1324) wrote:

    i've missed you...and you come back and i'm smiling and then... this piece hurts... Powerfully crushing; the penultimate stanza in particular cuts in several ways.


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