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Whiskey Dreams and Snowglobes

crystal clear glass of a whiskey bottle
rings louder than the phone left off the hook
my only friends gathering will be the smoke rings
and the distant dreams... of all the things
I should have done right.

But I will smile knowing I did everything wrong

and it wasn't my lungs that grew blacker
with every draw on the cigarette...

and it wasn't the winter air around me
that became colder with every passing hour...

It was your heart.
...that changed everything inside of me

All my innocence and childhood dreams lie inside
the snowglobe that left the impression on the wall...
shattered on the floor

I'll pluck the shards of glass out of my feet
for the rest of the night and think...
if I glue this thing back together
will it all be alright again.

Knowing this feeling inside of me,
I will forever be broken.

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On Saturday December 22nd, 2007, italianbella (299) writes:

this is breath takingly beautiful its like the words flowed from youre soul and some how managed to touch mine amazing write:)

On Sunday October 28th, 2007, Lynaes (1133) writes:

"it was your heart... that changed everything inside me." Between you posting this, and me commenting again now, I have gained a deep acknowledgement of this. And I don't regret it anymore, because you've made it beautiful with this poem. Thank you.

On Monday October 1st, 2007, glasshouse (803) writes:

This still takes my breath away. I can't begin to tell you what this sparks inside of me except to call it, perhaps, a lingering shard of that snowglobe. You've touched me a thousand times with this write and I still love it every single time. --Jes

On Tuesday August 14th, 2007, Reefer_rave (230) writes:

" and the distant dreams... of all the things , I should have done right ".. Haunting and gorgeous

On Friday February 23rd, 2007, TheDismantled (21) writes:

nice title

On Friday January 12th, 2007, glasshouse (803) writes:

You'll never know the way this moves me. Still.

On Friday January 12th, 2007, Bakkhus Unbound (1110) writes:

"I'll pluck the shards of glass out of my feet for the rest of the night and think..." Tragic love splendidly told w/ a blacker shade of the [old]soul. I can feel the rhythm, the hours passing like used cigarettes; well done!

On Wednesday May 3rd, 2006, TaintedButterfly (1058) writes:

Still as awesome as the first time I read it!

On Wednesday February 15th, 2006, Drayvinio (14) writes:

Beautiful. Loved the imagery. Excellent write.

On Saturday February 4th, 2006, MindRape (894) writes:

geezus did everyone just drop off the face of the earth or something

On Friday February 3rd, 2006, TaintedButterfly (1058) writes:

A mended snowglobe has character. Wow... I'm just reading your works and I must say, you freakin rock! This was not only crippling but sweet in its surrender. Wow all I can utter. Julia~

On Wednesday December 7th, 2005, Michelle Xiao (508) writes:

This is softly aching, heart-twisting, and I can't quite catch my breath. Your self-assessment brings such rawness and honesty to the imagery and reflection, that it hurts to feel it.

On Tuesday December 6th, 2005, WinterGrave (337) writes:

a sad poem, but a great first to read sence last i visited DP. Thanks for the comment on my latest.~~~Grave

On Friday December 2nd, 2005, Raven (378) writes:

Give me a moment to uncrumple myself ... This was pristine, beautifully melancholy, deeply touching... lovely.

On Wednesday November 30th, 2005, Lynaes (1133) writes:

Oh Oldie, it's been so long.. I've missed you so much. this.. is just so you. If there was no name on this, I would just *know* it was you.

On Wednesday November 30th, 2005, Lynaes (1133) writes:

your use of metaphor is as elegant as always.. I told you your poems leave pictures and colours in my head, and they linger. Thank you for that. *big small bear hugs*

On Wednesday November 30th, 2005, Lynaes (1133) writes:

..*clicks favourites*

On Tuesday November 29th, 2005, Urban Shipwreck (990) writes:

Shit Oldie. This hit hard. ~Ship!

On Tuesday November 29th, 2005, purr_verse (1438) writes:

i've missed you...and you come back and i'm smiling and then... this piece hurts... Powerfully crushing; the penultimate stanza in particular cuts in several ways.

On Tuesday November 29th, 2005, evolve (2220) writes:

..the title drove this home for me.. a punch in the stomach .. and it stings so much to regain your breath .. you may stumble, love, but you will not fall .. achingly gorgeous. I've missed your words..

On Tuesday November 29th, 2005, evolve (2220) writes:

..but I wish you were not so supressed with this feeling that you had to write this in particular..though, I do think the honesty of emotion made the snowglobe you created here..more vivid. Thank you. ~ June

On Monday November 28th, 2005, An Expired Member (4) writes:

one word to describe this beautiful

On Monday November 28th, 2005, urbanhumility (1343) writes:

your words sting my own memories of regret and distance......each word is perfect here........so very well done.................urban

On Monday November 28th, 2005, Sin (1639) writes:

every time i click on something you write im left moved...im always hoping its a happy emotion because the sadness you deliver is crushing... ~kristy

On Monday November 28th, 2005, elisa (2025) writes:

The lacuna..........of a delicate sanctuary........i believe there is a healer for every broken soul.........this wrecked me..

On Monday November 28th, 2005, An Expired Member (8) writes:

speechless. . great work

On Monday November 28th, 2005, Railway_Butterfly (464) writes:

I am quite stunned by this to tell the truth. I don't really know what more I can say? The mere weight of the words almost seems too much to bear.. I really wish I had something more I could say..

On Monday November 28th, 2005, Railway_Butterfly (464) writes:

I've been thinking of you, lately, whilst wandering around dp.. I think the effect this had on me was stronger for the fact that this almost says.. this is how life has been in my absence?

On Monday November 28th, 2005, NikesRain (1504) writes:

precise and intensely affecting in its imagery and feeling...my gods Bri this was so heart breaking and breath stealing at the same time...poignant truth overflowing .... outstanding as ever

On Wednesday December 7th, 2005, NikesRain (1504) writes:

truth be told this had me in tears..touching so close but you know how i get...and your work always affects me in a strong way...you're amazing

On Sunday November 27th, 2005, Rone4611 (157) writes:

a snowglobe... how perfect! I commend u for this one

On Sunday November 27th, 2005, Sharon Rose (642) writes:

incredibly effective imagery, excellently executed metaphor...stale comment, I know, but what else can I say when it's the truth?

On Sunday November 27th, 2005, TwilightMelodies (1079) writes:

"It was your heart. ...that changed everything inside of me" Good god, have you managed to remind me of my own glimpses of these emotions. This is terribly painful...and yet mortally beautiful. Wonderful write. *Evangel*

On Sunday November 27th, 2005, suicideseason (2146) writes:

Dave is right...this is utterly devastating...the regret chews away at the pit of your stomach...a movie that keeps replaying itself...frame by frame...the snowglobe explodes on impact...you're left empty...regretfully wiser...Damn,man.

On Sunday November 27th, 2005, leluna (14) writes:

beautiful- soulful. so much of it i can relate to personally. it moved me, and i will return.

On Sunday November 27th, 2005, King_Crazy_Dave (421) writes:

crippling, you bastage.

On Sunday November 27th, 2005, An Expired Member (19) writes:

You've left me speechless. this is a stunning piece and I think I broke a sweat in the middle of reading it. ~Empty Soul~

On Sunday November 27th, 2005, glasshouse (803) writes:

oh my god............... *clicks the button and walks away* i'll come back to this. -Glass

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