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Dove (falling feathers)

...I don't want to be the one that hurts you
the fragile bone structure of a feather
bend)ing... flut-tering
in my dry ice exhalation

dip the tip
in a jar full
of liquid
persuasions...
and
draw me a picture
...of the darkest cor n er
in your heart

I'd fight your nightmares in my dreams
if the morning hour
would be brighter for you
-but-
don't ask me
to
love
you
your heart is not for me to break

its a beautiful thing to watch a dove on a wire
...something I would die to touch
to know what it feels like to feel...
...to feel her

But my hands are [cages]

they belong to these words

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On Tuesday February 20th, 2007, prettydisgrace (144) writes:

lovely lovely

On Monday September 11th, 2006, NikesRain (1505) writes:

♥ *smilesighs & huge little bear hugs* yes yes i know, again, but well.... you can tell me stop once again but you know i just can't....... love ya big bear

On Saturday September 2nd, 2006, An Expired Member (15) writes:

This is probably one of the most beautiful things I have ever read.

On Saturday July 22nd, 2006, xserratedsoulx (279) writes:

love that last line. really, really, LOVE it.

On Wednesday December 7th, 2005, NikesRain (1505) writes:

i can't stay away from this, i think i'd get it tattooed on me if i could...*sigh* it's engraved into my heart already...

On Sunday March 12th, 2006, NikesRain (1505) writes:

today i needed this, today i wanted to be selfish and get lost a bit within beautiful words, today i had to ... and hope you would forgive me

On Monday December 5th, 2005, glasshouse (804) writes:

*sigh* I always come back to this, Oldie. I will never forget this poem and its impact. You are amazing. Simply amazing. I cannot do you justice. -Glass

On Friday November 25th, 2005, fushigi no kaosu (88) writes:

absoultely stunning write! beautiful style and metere...congrats.

On Thursday June 2nd, 2005, NikesRain (1505) writes:

*hugs you tight* you are truly outstanding and this is eternally beautiful like your soul

On Monday October 24th, 2005, NikesRain (1505) writes:

damn this gets me every time, tears and melting at the same time.... stunning

On Tuesday May 24th, 2005, BoldSolitude (277) writes:

I re-read this and I must comment again. I like the style you write in that makes your writting a bit mystical and yet you get the meaning without completely understanding it at first.

On Tuesday May 24th, 2005, BoldSolitude (277) writes:

Like this, after revisiting it I comprehend it even more than I initially did. The feather pen and ink persuasions and how we are limited to expression by use of words, esentially enslaved.

On Tuesday May 3rd, 2005, Kinkypoptart (768) writes:

Oh my goodness. You never cease to amaze me with your words and they always make my jaw drop *picks up jaw* Painfully true, this poem is. Great write ~*~Tart~*~

On Thursday February 10th, 2005, Elise (267) writes:

Wow, how did I miss this? This was breathtaking. I loved every moment of reading this Oldie, you're awesome! *bear hugs*

On Tuesday February 8th, 2005, CarpeDiemJane (42) writes:

woah. i love the imagery and just the pure vision i get reading this. marevlouso!

On Monday February 7th, 2005, Rain In The Willows (862) writes:

Oh christ...there's too many parts I loved...this strikes many chords...I'm just not able to find accurate words to voice them, wonderful work, Oldie.

On Monday January 24th, 2005, flying_fox (770) writes:

I just read this again... and fell in love with you. Again. This is pure magic.

On Sunday January 23rd, 2005, ShardsofSilence (333) writes:

simply amazing...such vivid imagery. i loved every bit of it. it gave me goosebumps. awesome work. really is a great piece

On Monday January 17th, 2005, stormtalk (912) writes:

I'll add my voice to the list below and say, "incredible work." "My hands are cages/ they belong to these words" was particularly striking. I still think I have a fetish for the ends of writes; it's always the most powerful part. Great job.

On Saturday January 8th, 2005, Rone4611 (157) writes:

*shivers and twitches slightly...* *looks at the work before me and sighs sadly*

On Monday January 3rd, 2005, BoldSolitude (277) writes:

Such vivid imagery in this piece. I really enjoyed it, especially the poignant "But my hands are cages" The entire piece was a wonderful use of words and imagery to reveal the depth of the desperation.

On Friday January 7th, 2005, BoldSolitude (277) writes:

I also really liked "but, don't ask me to love you, your heart is not for me to break"

On Tuesday December 28th, 2004, An Expired Member (6) writes:

This is truly something that touched my soul...I love it!

On Friday December 17th, 2004, suicideseason (2146) writes:

Damn...guys don't usually give me goosebumps.

On Thursday December 9th, 2004, urbanhumility (1332) writes:

the last two lines strike blood.........well done..........urban

On Wednesday December 8th, 2004, AlluringDescent_darkbride (765) writes:

Wow...how is it I haven't commented on this? I guess I'll join the party of comments. I feel this deeply. I want to quote so many lines of this. So many visions come to mind.

On Wednesday December 8th, 2004, AlluringDescent_darkbride (765) writes:

"...and I don't want to be the one that hurts you; the fragile bone structure of a feather; bend)ing... flut-tering in my dry ice exhalation" I see complete enrapturement (is that a word?)

On Wednesday December 8th, 2004, AlluringDescent_darkbride (765) writes:

2nd stanza: placing you in her heart but in the furthest recesses. 3rd stanza: as you would be everything to her that you could but there was one thing you couldn't give.

On Wednesday December 8th, 2004, AlluringDescent_darkbride (765) writes:

The realization in this poem is heart-aching. Aren't most of us cages, trapping the beautiful so that we might just see, just touch for a moment on that beauty...and yet, the beauty would be marred forever.

On Wednesday December 8th, 2004, AlluringDescent_darkbride (765) writes:

Fave

On Tuesday December 7th, 2004, Railway_Butterfly (464) writes:

I can't help myself coming back to read this piece again and again...I just love it,but I could never find the words to do this justice...'...and I don't want to be the one that hurts you' *sighs*

On Thursday December 2nd, 2004, An Expired Member (95) writes:

i'd fight your nightmares in my dreams...what an intense statement. absolutely dripping with depth.

On Wednesday December 1st, 2004, CarpeDiemJane (42) writes:

*eyes watering* i love the images. great job.

On Tuesday November 30th, 2004, An Expired Member (13) writes:

Very nice.

On Monday November 22nd, 2004, Bakkhus Unbound (1112) writes:

"the fragile bone structure of a feather bend)ing... flut-tering in my dry ice exhalation" This poem feels lovely; soft, like silk. Very well crafted in form [wonderful last line]. -bravo.

On Friday November 12th, 2004, sIo (893) writes:

this truly is an amazing piece.

On Tuesday November 9th, 2004, Twilight (2104) writes:

um...here i am again. reading this. and im still amazed...this is something special.

On Friday November 5th, 2004, flying_fox (770) writes:

I think I just fell in love with you.

On Monday November 1st, 2004, knightmirror (425) writes:

wow!!!!!!!!!!

On Monday November 1st, 2004, Lotophagi (451) writes:

I've read this a few times now, and still, I just, arg, it's beautiful, beyond beauty, and reading it..... my heart feels as though it's expanding to twice its normal size. And that last line..... this is sublime. Thank you.

On Monday November 1st, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (586) writes:

"I'd fight your nightmares in my dreams if the morning hour would be brighter for you"---and i come back to this again, so beautiful old..

On Thursday October 28th, 2004, BleedSilver (374) writes:

Wow...I have never really had the time to stop and read your stuff, But I feel empty now because I haven't. Your few wroks that I have read now have filled an empty void inside of me. ~Mikey

On Thursday October 28th, 2004, NikesRain (1505) writes:

i just have to keep coming back to this and reading it over and over. it's jut too lovely not to.

On Monday December 6th, 2004, NikesRain (1505) writes:

yep *sigh* had to again.

On Thursday October 21st, 2004, Grey Lies (240) writes:

exquisite and angelic...

On Sunday October 17th, 2004, Ophelia (305) writes:

The power to love is the power to let go, to watch it fall gently from your hands, catching on an uplifting breeze and dance way before you very eyes only to return and softly caress your cheek, I miss talking you to Old, I hope you are doing good, O....

On Tuesday October 12th, 2004, CharlottesWeb (586) writes:

I think, I would like to read a book of pages filled with only these words, arranged ever so delicately as you've done here...Dark, like a snow flake iced with crystals in the night. This is just...magnficent.

On Tuesday October 12th, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (586) writes:

a tragic romance, a clash of beautifully written words.. and pictures that come to mind..

On Tuesday October 12th, 2004, BeautifulCalamity (586) writes:

"...something I would die to touch to know what it feels like to feel... ...to feel her" ..wow , old.. this is just incredibly beautiful. kind of reminds me of edward scissorhands, for some strange reason..

On Monday October 11th, 2004, Valentine (510) writes:

This is so mesmerizing. It's profound and I just feel like I have fallen through a cursed looking glass, into a world of crippled butterflies and christmas robins, preening a red breast without a trace of wonderland snow. I am in awe. ~*~ Rose ~*~

On Saturday October 9th, 2004, Trapped_with_Insanity (131) writes:

Lovely...elegant and beautifull

On Saturday October 9th, 2004, cre (508) writes:

Oh .. Oldie . . this is wonderful. Incredibly well done.

On Saturday October 9th, 2004, knightmirror (425) writes:

this is extraordinary work right here...every line drips with beauty.....i stand in awe...*standing ovation*...****-knight

On Tuesday October 5th, 2004, Railway_Butterfly (464) writes:

Re is right...no one even comes close....

On Tuesday October 5th, 2004, Railway_Butterfly (464) writes:

Oldie,you have the power to render me speechless with every single word I read...I could have cried when i read this..'dip the tip in a jar full of liquid persuasions...and draw me a picture...of the darkest cor n er in your heart'..just beautiful...

On Monday October 4th, 2004, Recycled (161) writes:

No one here, holds a candle to you. You've got this site on lock down.

On Monday October 4th, 2004, Twilight (2104) writes:

"-but- don't ask me to love you your heart is not for me to break " holy shizzle. i think ive got it...

On Monday October 4th, 2004, Sin (1639) writes:

there is nothing i can say that hasnt been said...simply breath taking ~kristy

On Monday October 4th, 2004, girlafraid (579) writes:

dip the tip in a jar full of liquid persuasions-what a beautiful line...your thoughts are always so delicate...lovely work as usual...incredibly sad *hugs*

On Monday October 4th, 2004, DarkDruidess (206) writes:

I am left with a wistful yearning...for what I am unsure. Nice job...

On Monday October 4th, 2004, ElegantKiss (402) writes:

"draw me a picture ...of the darkest cor n er in your heart" This is incredibly beautiful. It made me feel beautiful just reading it. I'm left with a lingering fragile feeling. Eeeeee, you're amazing.

On Monday October 4th, 2004, Six-Out (1822) writes:

Old...dude, seriously...I think adding this to my favorites list is all I can do, since I'm left speechless.

On Monday October 4th, 2004, Zhee (640) writes:

absolutely amazing.. far too many perfect lines for me to highlight.. i loved this so much.. it was sheer beauty in words.

On Monday October 4th, 2004, Solace (1423) writes:

Your an old soul indeed...Your works remind me of something done in the old style, feather pens and rolled parchment...wanting but refraining...the virtue of observing...

On Monday October 4th, 2004, An Expired Member (5) writes:

very vivid and descriptive, I love the image of falling feathers... a moment captured in time.. still.. I love the structure of this... and the theme I can feel is a heart thumping... keep writing... please.

On Monday October 4th, 2004, An Expired Member (11) writes:

you are a true poet if ever i read ones works yours are like knives...that speak of so much truth...this is a jewel...so precious and valuable...i wish to look upon it forever

On Sunday October 3rd, 2004, An Expired Member (58) writes:

amazing...very very vivid .

On Sunday October 3rd, 2004, Lynaes (1138) writes:

"...and I don't want to be the one that hurts you the fragile bone structure of a feather bend)ing... flut-tering in my dry ice exhalation" so breath takingly delicate..

On Sunday October 3rd, 2004, Lynaes (1138) writes:

I always feel like I can reach out and touch your poetry, and it always screams a colour at me.. I know that sounds weird.. forgive me, it's 3:30am.. You're so unique Oldie.. and your writing is so wonderfully pure.. amazing.

On Sunday October 3rd, 2004, NikesRain (1505) writes:

oh Oldie..I can't say how lovely this is...I can't get the words past the tears in my throat. *sigh* absolutely lovely.

On Monday October 4th, 2004, NikesRain (1505) writes:

damn it.....this is so beautiful.

On Sunday October 3rd, 2004, FallenFaith (47) writes:

I have felt this way but I have never been able to explain it. This is absolutly beautiful. a true old soul you are

On Sunday October 3rd, 2004, purr_verse (1438) writes:

this is absolutely heartrendingly lovely. i can't think of what to say about it; it's just divine. hope my little *faveclick* makes up for my lack of words, at least in part. magnificent.

On Sunday October 3rd, 2004, wonderlandhysteria (2193) writes:

Oh, Oldie...I'm practically at a loss...this has such a peaceful aura. I love it.

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