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Romeo Took a Lover

she wrote her name on my
heart with a dry erase marker
needing to leave some trace
but not one that would last

loneliness makes eyes sparkle
and it's possible to make love
to the same woman for years
even if they have different faces

no need to push her away as each
time she leaves on her own with
her heart locked safely away from
any chance of pain or real intimacy

one day i'm afraid she'll try to take
it out of the box and find it's turned
to dust in her absence but caring too
much seems to be against the rules

in the end it's all about not being
alone yet i hold to the hope there's
more someday because i'm tired of
hanging Picasso's on bathroom walls

-- by Steve McKennon
3/29/04

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On Saturday July 1st, 2006, Sin (1637) writes:

this was precise..and cut to the quick internal honesty..the whole write was superb but the 2nd and 4th stanzas especially struck me ~kristy

On Monday February 7th, 2005, An Expired Member (27) writes:

Jeeeeeeez.....Goddamn are you GOOD.

On Friday August 6th, 2004, GirlintheBox (50) writes:

i love the first stanza....great poem *krystal*

On Friday July 23rd, 2004, liquid_emotion (417) writes:

maybe thats exacty where it belongs.

On Friday July 23rd, 2004, shortandpretentious (9) writes:

i love how you end each line in the middle of a clause, it gives the poem a dizzy, stumbling feeling.

On Thursday June 24th, 2004, Delphoid-Q (255) writes:

'it's possible to make love to the same woman for years even if they have different faces' Oh, inspiration! As always, your style leaves me awed.

On Tuesday April 20th, 2004, CharlottesWeb (593) writes:

This has that long faced sadness of a grey day harboring a slight wind...the kind you've seen your self in a hundred times, but never actualy expereinced. I loved this...your writting has a power and a..a...grace to it.

On Saturday April 10th, 2004, worm (131) writes:

ah...T/S, you have a way of striking the deep nerve! I know that I've been through this very thing time and time again... but then, I AM an old fart!

On Saturday April 10th, 2004, worm (131) writes:

and Picasso, I think, needs a better view! love it! worm...

On Thursday April 8th, 2004, Cinn (188) writes:

i love this peice its sad and being so truthful its even more sad but its so good

On Wednesday March 31st, 2004, Ophelia (305) writes:

left wanting more but taking what you can get, the metaphors were as every one has said wonderful, , , O.

On Wednesday March 31st, 2004, Loomer (21) writes:

This piece is so incredibly well written. Just the line "loneliness makes eyes sparkle" struck me. I enjoy your work greatly. ~Loomer~

On Tuesday March 30th, 2004, purr_verse (1437) writes:

yes, this is beautifully poignant indeed, with aching descriptives and marvellous, deepsubtle and clever metaphor. great work.

On Tuesday March 30th, 2004, Bast (896) writes:

oh, beautiful... so sad, so lonesome... resigned was a good word to put to it. brilliantly done.

On Tuesday March 30th, 2004, capt_funguy (999) writes:

i find your views/insights/ whatevers ... on on relationships , and loneliness , to be very interesting ... sort of forever hopeful with a sprinkle of already resigned .... very cool man ... funguy

On Tuesday March 30th, 2004, Johny_D_Lewis (607) writes:

well done same woman different face, well done

On Tuesday March 30th, 2004, OLd SouL (837) writes:

yeah, I have to agree with ff. 'making love to the same woman for years even if they have diff faces' really stuck with me. Because it can be so true. Your pen is driven by a powerful mind which I truly appreciate. :::OLd

On Tuesday March 30th, 2004, sulkylime (258) writes:

i really enjoyed all your twisted warped expressions.. and the way you structured it is great. kept me entranced.. --

On Tuesday March 30th, 2004, flying_fox (769) writes:

the Picasso/bathroom metaphor is superb... I had to think twice about it. I also love "it’s possible to make love to the same woman for years even if they have different faces"... this is an amazing poem. Fox

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