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Framed form Of you

I carry
this picture
so well preserved
of your face

lighting up
the dark of the day...

No one could
ever tell that
somehow you've let
everything

fade up
in change...

You photographed
yourself as this
free being
misunderstood
inside

thrown
by the tides...

And you smiled
like a child
But cursed
like a man

I was wasting my view
in closing my eyes...

I know I'll
see you again
and try to unWraP
the layers
you hide...

I know I'll be
thinking in where
and how and when
I'd let go
of I...

I'll be using my view
to open my eyes...

And you'll appear
as cristal clear
just as you were
last time
today

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On Wednesday February 18th, 2004, flying_fox (769) writes:

By the way, I think you are beautiful - what a lovely smile and gorgeous skin. FF

On Wednesday February 18th, 2004, flying_fox (769) writes:

I think this is wonderful. The flow is sublime. It left me with a feeling of sad serenity. I particularly like the stanza "And you smiled like a child But cursed like a man"...for a reason I can't explain this really got to me. thank you. FF

On Saturday January 24th, 2004, Midnight Phoenix (313) writes:

I wish you would have kept the original version on here for us. I feel like I'm missing an emotion or a thought that added to this wonderful piece. The beauty you've found is desired by so many of the jealous eyes reading this art.

On Thursday January 22nd, 2004, shadowsinthelight (211) writes:

Yes, very beautiful and S_F is very good at what he does. S.

On Wednesday January 21st, 2004, OLd SouL (838) writes:

:) *shakes head* You are something else. :::OLd

On Wednesday January 21st, 2004, girlafraid (579) writes:

i didn't read the other version...but i love it the way it is

On Tuesday January 20th, 2004, Spiritus_Frumenti (343) writes:

this is such a humble piece...but i have to say the last stanza was unneeded, with the 'fucked' word....this poem was perfect if you ended on 'today'...that word just has no place in such an honest and sweet poem...-l-

On Tuesday January 20th, 2004, maddin foxxxy (381) writes:

thanks 4 the tip

On Tuesday January 20th, 2004, purr_verse (1437) writes:

I guess you altered this since Spiritus commented... it certainly reads beautifully as it stands now... lovely work. purr

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