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Come Sweet Unknown.

I stand here to challenge;
Intolerant
In desire, come sweet eluminess fire
Years of hollow eyes, lack of fulfillment
A seaker of wisdom, whereby need of awareness
Clouds do gather, be they blackend or not
Life giving whines become to entangle
My prospering self, dwell;
Shivering, as I seek
To take a stand, firsthand
A life of illusions crave for yet another
This burdensome task I wielded;
Upon myself, a extinguished path.

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On Wednesday June 18th, 2008, saintedmad (1040) writes:

i think..........no-----i feel ..captured...engulfed, nearly embraced by this divine hollow beautiful dream you created; a wish of, a hope for, a need to. . .. holy egads. ... eloquence and reverence drips

On Wednesday August 22nd, 2007, carlosjackal (1619) writes:

Fucking rocked and not a line out of place. This was Shakespeare for the noughties, a cry to shake off our comforts sought from capitalism and head to a braver newer world. Wonderful :)

On Wednesday August 22nd, 2007, Mylissa (1122) writes:

Exactly what he said...:oP Wonderfully done.

On Sunday August 5th, 2007, Unforgotten (163) writes:

And may I also have the strength to challenge... I usually don't comment where so many others have but I needed these words

On Friday May 18th, 2007, me_the_messenger (173) writes:

i love the title and it really works with this amazing peice of poetry. nice work. *messenger

On Sunday October 23rd, 2005, Solace (1423) writes:

I come here so often; and leave so few words - what words could be left; not worldessness for that is silence - but perhaps an inability of expression - of complete conception...unknowing...

On Wednesday June 1st, 2005, smearedXmakeup (23) writes:

On Saturday February 26th, 2005, Forgotten Angel (475) writes:

"in desire, come sweet eluminess fire" heh...dude..i cant say anything that wont b repeated..so all i have is to agree w/ every1 below me -Kel

On Friday November 5th, 2004, Sin (1639) writes:

wow, what can i say that hasnt already been said, simply amazing ~kristy

On Saturday September 18th, 2004, purr_verse (1438) writes:

"A life of illusions crave for yet another" - fantastic line; i love it... this is a highly excellent piece with so many images in such a small space; love the conclusion. :) damn damn fine!

On Thursday April 29th, 2004, wonderlandhysteria (2189) writes:

Jedi is right...the rhythm is perfection...it's wraps around your finger nicely...ever so smooth.

On Wednesday April 21st, 2004, sulkylime (258) writes:

still it sounds like you intuitively know your path.. extinguished, is it.. years of hollow eyes but you're not blind.. only a brave soldier.. you're not taken back by the blackened clouds, you'll move forward.. the stand you take, driven by your unfulfil

On Wednesday April 21st, 2004, sulkylime (258) writes:

unfulfilled desire is a fulfilling journey on its own.. whether to be doomed or not.. reminds me of the last scene in braveheart. that's my take on it. powerful.. loved it, monkey !

On Saturday April 17th, 2004, capt_funguy (1002) writes:

ok .... i got it ... ready , ? ... acupuncture .. thats what you do ... subtle pins placed , and the effect is felt elsewhere ...insinuation , leads to a pointed gift prhaps not even fully realized ..

On Saturday April 17th, 2004, capt_funguy (1002) writes:

like an insinuation .. a feeling .. projected ..this reads as realization to me .. but with a flipped despair ..a saddening irony .. but i dont look at you , i look at myself ... know what i mean ? .. very cool man ... funguy

On Monday April 12th, 2004, Daemonicus (639) writes:

i've remembered "in desire, come sweet eluminess fire" from when i first read this.. still goes thru my head from time to time. line for line, this is so consice and meaningful. infact every line is quotable. i relate to thie a lot, a proud piece, monkey.

On Saturday April 10th, 2004, SilencedAngel (61) writes:

Wonderful poem. I truly enjoyed reading it.

On Monday April 5th, 2004, Liath (41) writes:

Fuckin' powerful. Reminds me of myself, and how I feel, everyday. I believe in fate, and I don't feel like I have fulfilled my purpose in life yet, and I feel that I am unimportant until I have. You never know, maybe this is my purpose.

On Saturday March 6th, 2004, Jedi_MindFuck (321) writes:

the rhythym was outstanding...."a life of illusions crave for yet another...this path burdensome task i wielded..." that was excellent. cheers, monkey...///ben\\\

On Saturday March 6th, 2004, Jedi_MindFuck (321) writes:

woops *tries to erase path*

On Friday February 20th, 2004, An Expired Member (33) writes:

Ah, the burdensome task we all seek to finish. I loved this. Your words flow so freely. Great work my friend, great work. -Doll

On Monday February 2nd, 2004, sweetambrosia (103) writes:

I love the disillusions in this... terrific write. --sweets.

On Monday February 2nd, 2004, Wish Upon A Star (385) writes:

You asked, and here I am. (As if you don't have enough comments, you damn popular [sexy] monkey!) Loved the poem "Clouds do gather, be they blackend or not".. Beautiful line. Great write. ~Wish Upon A Star

On Friday January 23rd, 2004, Delphoid-Q (255) writes:

As always, you suggest without revealing. You try to get a feeling across. You have succeeded. Well done.

On Friday January 23rd, 2004, Daemonicus (639) writes:

very nicely written, many things to be taken from this, many more reads to come.

On Friday January 23rd, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1872) writes:

thats better.. hehe.. *hugs*

On Thursday January 22nd, 2004, Twilight (2104) writes:

i have no doubt why this is your favorite. it seems so personal, but ignore me should i be wrong. seeking more and more knwledge and grasping for anything the world may have to offer. beautiful write.

On Wednesday December 31st, 2003, cre (508) writes:

Mmm. So many lines sort of whisper to me . . and as always I feel like I could read this write 100 times and find something new each time .. and you know, that's no small feat especially with such a concise write. Very nice job.

On Wednesday December 31st, 2003, cre (508) writes:

I especially liked the "clouds do gather" and the "life of illusions" lines.

On Thursday December 25th, 2003, suicideseason (2146) writes:

"Clouds do gather, be they blackend or not "...brilliant!i equate your work to that of a surgeon;everything is done for a reason. with pin point precision,too.most excellent!~season

On Thursday December 25th, 2003, _Andrew_ (298) writes:

awesome peter, i can see you maturing more and more, not only as a writer but as a man in itself. your sense of feel interests me, nice work here

On Friday December 12th, 2003, Amandasauris rex (72) writes:

*looks around to see if monkey saw I left a comment* Very much relateable. felt deeply within my innerself. *amanda*

On Saturday December 6th, 2003, Bast (902) writes:

brilliantly done. i like how this flows and sticks.

On Friday November 28th, 2003, sole (114) writes:

This is written like a pro man. I've really come to love your style of writing, please keep it up.

On Thursday November 20th, 2003, Urban Shipwreck (990) writes:

I still fuckin love this write man, incredible. ~Ryan

On Monday November 10th, 2003, A Velvet Tongue (529) writes:

wow monk....this was a brick-in-the-face poem...smacks ya and all you can do is sit there in the sting of it for a few moments..I swear you get better and better with each sentence you write..Loved it...* 4 snaps..and a twirl on one foot*

On Thursday November 6th, 2003, Aurora_Light (565) writes:

speechless monkey i dont what to say to this i wish i could have helped is the onlthing that pops in my mind wel done write

On Thursday November 6th, 2003, The Fallen Angel (289) writes:

greatness monkey, poetry that tickles my senses...you know that I love this kind of brilliance, you never fail in enlightening me which only a handful have+Fallen One+

On Thursday November 6th, 2003, Blood of Winter (367) writes:

this stuff would make great songs*still singing in flames style tempo in head*...

On Thursday November 6th, 2003, gothemite (399) writes:

aww its beautiful..i agree with suicidal, i like your style too in general

On Thursday November 6th, 2003, Mischevious Princess (52) writes:

Peter~ This is a very deep poem. i like it... and i also like the way you write your poems in general. keep it up with your style and you'll soon be famous! lol but it is a beautifully written and deep poem ~forever hiding in the shadows~ Amber

On Thursday November 6th, 2003, An Expired Member (33) writes:

NiCe WrItE :) you're an artist :)

On Thursday November 6th, 2003, An Expired Member (16) writes:

this is ss deep and real. this doesn't semmed forced, awesome job

On Thursday November 6th, 2003, An Expired Member (43) writes:

Meaningfull!! well done!

On Thursday November 6th, 2003, Urban Shipwreck (990) writes:

Unfulfilled desires can eat at our souls to the point where we wish even delusion to show us the way. Awsome write Peter. ~Ryan

On Friday November 7th, 2003, AlluringDescent_darkbride (765) writes:

Yeah...he always comes across sounding intelligent doesn't he? *sigh* Will you settle for my unintelligent "Good write"? This is incredible...

On Thursday November 6th, 2003, Lady_Lilith (113) writes:

Indeed. Urban's comment is poetry itself... Beautiful poem, dear. So deep... Made me sigh... *Lilith*

On Thursday November 6th, 2003, Dancing_Monkey (1872) writes:

Urban... You kill me. :o)

On Friday January 23rd, 2004, Daemonicus (639) writes:

what a bastard :P

On Thursday November 6th, 2003, Nadir (618) writes:

!!!Urban!!! your such a fucking maniac. I realy like you for saying that. Shit I cant believe you just said that!!! Well I wont comment now. *jumping in Urbans boat* woot...there.. Tiger

On Thursday November 6th, 2003, TheArtOfX (105) writes:

a very deep meaning underlies this poem.. "clouds do gather, be they blackened or not" is a line that says volumes. the scheme helps the mood also, very well done monkey, -Art

On Friday April 23rd, 2004, anth (1612) writes:

contemplation mystically and spritually written with brilliant metaphors and wonder, but i bet that now,you have answered the questions you pondered as u wrote this, something epic about this also, brillaint thoughtful poetry

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