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"Sonnet #2" by Liz

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While William had his dark lady as muse,
For worship, love, abuse, disgust, and sex,
I had myself; my acting prop was you.
As aide in devious ways, you felt the best.

But in reality your life's worth more
Than waste, betrayals, and debauchery.
Like whiskey, you past parched lips I did pour,
And yet please know you meant so much to me.

'Twas beauty I perceived behind the black,
though sexy eyes you cast to seem a man.
Musical mind held talent most men lack,
And vision you have yet to understand.

To you, I know I'm vanished and not missed.
Yet still I long to know your forgiveness.




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On Thursday December 16th, 2004, Spiritus_Frumenti (359) writes:
i love this...such language and melody...the last lines were incredibly..-l-


On Monday December 13th, 2004, MelvinOliverDrauma (546) writes:
ahhhh......smooth......so very smooth


On Sunday December 12th, 2004, OLd SouL (833) writes:
You know I am not one to critique, well most of the time.. and especially will not to someone who is on a different plane than I. But, I still have to leave my words of appreciation. This was elegant, smooth, with a sour twist. :::OLd


On Thursday December 9th, 2004, Clerik (49) writes:
Different subject same appeal,nice work.


On Wednesday December 8th, 2004, Revolting Theatre (36) writes:
What a beautiful sonnet...loved the shakespear refrence, not to obvious not to subtle. And since you'd give me crap about not critiqing...perhaps in stanza two third line there might be something you could find that slid into that iambic on better words


On Wednesday December 8th, 2004, Revolting Theatre (36) writes:
for example, throat seems like to strong a word to pass on that unstressed beat. Other than that I just wished I knew who the lucky person is.


On Wednesday December 8th, 2004, Liz (401) writes:
Well, you're totally right and I don't know what to do about it right now, so I'll be taking suggestions to save me the effort of anymore thought on this. As for the guy, if you were a closer reader you'd see he didn't make out so well...


On Friday December 10th, 2004, Liz (401) writes:
Ok, iambic shifted, how about the word order? It's the overall similie I don't want to lose...


On Friday December 10th, 2004, Revolting Theatre (36) writes:
Love the changes, It feels much more full. Id say you have a little bitch of a line that wants to give you trouble (line 3 stanza two). This was even better than the first time. Liz I dont think you can improve this much more.


On Wednesday December 8th, 2004, Liz (401) writes:
There was a comment here from physicalgraffiti, but I deleted it because the work's been changed slightly since then.



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