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Heroic

A curl of grey smoke
around drops of pure blue

and the flesh and red wine
beating flashes of you.

Cotton and flannel
cologne and cold air

whispers of promise
gentle hands in my hair.

The closer to perfect
the more tragic the flaw

now forget about worries
-I am breathless with awe.

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On Monday January 3rd, 2005, stuart_pid (217) writes:

Railway_Butterfly has perfectly stated exactly what i was thinking so i will just have to humbly agree.

On Tuesday December 7th, 2004, Blood of Winter (367) writes:

this is quite soothing and beautiful...

On Wednesday November 24th, 2004, Twilight (2102) writes:

this has a very fragile beauty to it. like a precious moment that the silence holds together. and it feels almost forbidden to break..

On Wednesday November 24th, 2004, AlluringDescent_darkbride (765) writes:

This is very gentle. It has a flawless rhythm. Very soothing...

On Tuesday November 23rd, 2004, purr_verse (1437) writes:

Beautiful write. Gentle, sensuous and honest; lovely cadence, too.

On Tuesday November 23rd, 2004, MelvinOliverDrauma (553) writes:

this is so gentle.....makes me feel kind of warm inside

On Tuesday November 16th, 2004, Railway_Butterfly (464) writes:

*intriging...I find.This was really beautiful...it seems to sort of,fall over you..in tiny,sparkling fragments...

On Tuesday November 16th, 2004, Railway_Butterfly (464) writes:

..Sent the most wonderful tingle through me as I finished reading this...'the closer to eprfect the more tragic the flaw'...I love how,this piece doesn't describe everything to all detail..the small...glimpses that the reader gets make the piece so intrig

On Saturday November 13th, 2004, Litteratus (73) writes:

Beautiful, sensuous, yet simple. Very nice.

On Wednesday January 7th, 2004, An Expired Member (4) writes:

"closer to perfect, the more tragic the flaw" -- words of truth.

On Tuesday December 9th, 2003, Dancing_Monkey (1825) writes:

they said it... good write.

On Friday October 31st, 2003, CharlottesWeb (593) writes:

oh...this is wonderful. This poem makes it's point between the lines and pushes you there with a few key words. I love it. ~JMDW~

On Friday October 31st, 2003, SilentStalker (1341) writes:

...another great write from the first person to welcome me to the DP community. I really like the way your writing differs so much from others...moments captured that no one else thinks of...thank you for your sharing... -Darun

On Monday October 27th, 2003, OLd SouL (837) writes:

what a wonderful moment you've captured. words as seductive as their creator.

On Monday October 27th, 2003, Loserland (134) writes:

very enjoyable

On Sunday October 26th, 2003, King_Crazy_Dave (422) writes:

pretty, youre a good poet , i like it and i wish i had something constructive or at least more original than that

On Sunday October 26th, 2003, Six-Out (1824) writes:

Pictures painted in words so fine. Beautiful work here.

On Sunday October 26th, 2003, WinterGrave (337) writes:

Vary nice, i realy enjoyed reading this.~~~Grave

On Sunday October 26th, 2003, Nadir (631) writes:

You paint a nice picture. Would be fun to turn the flaw/perfect thing around hehe Yes, Well thank you for a well made poem. Its also kind of an original style around here, so its nice and fresh to read. Tiger

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