Of Cracks and Perfection.

~ Echoes of Orpheus ~

Fault is not definitive
and at many a time
may be worn as beauty's mask.

I have seen
the majesty of a sunrise over a lake,
the reflective effects of
a perfectly calm and still water's surface.

But I stay longer than others
I wait for the surface to fault.
The first fish to jump,
boat to pass,
or loon to dive.

The first ripples to
roll across the mirror,
nature's proof that
breaking can be beautiful.

She always apologizes
for weak moments
as if life has given her
nothing but expectations
to live up to.

As if she would try to
face winter naked
and claim to be imperfect
if she wore a coat.
Like the coat would be filling
a fault she would not
admit to having.

She sees cracks as imperfections.

I see places where
I may grab hold

and never let go.

In this way I can
find a place in her life;

filling those little gaps.

And it's not that she is imperfect,
it's just that some things in life
require another,
no matter how perfect you may be.

Imperfect as I may be,
I will always strive
to love her
perfectly

So I will always fill
that lone crack
in her heart.

*The ending will be reworked later...*

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Comments on "Of Cracks and Perfection."

On Tuesday, March 24, 2009, A Better Way To Die (265) wrote:

Truly amazing and noble. Every word adding to an almost ethereal quality embedded in a very earthy feeling narrative.
On Tuesday, March 17, 2009, Lylani (146) wrote:

Stunning piece, there is such beautiful wisdom and love throughout this. I know this is one of those that I will come back to again and again
A former member wrote: The first section of itself would have made a wonderful piece. But the middle part was masterful. What an absolute and exceptional expression.
On Sunday, March 8, 2009, Believer (81) wrote:

the soft wisdom spoken in this is truly magnificent.
On Saturday, March 7, 2009, Dissolving Poet (784) wrote:

I think its perfect the way it is :)
On Thursday, March 5, 2009, Mona (97) wrote:

btw I think the ending is absolutely perfect.
On Thursday, March 5, 2009, Mona (97) wrote:

I really liked the poem. It made me feel like I wanted someone like this, someone who was deep, thoughtful, someone who would listen. As I read this I felt like I was looking into the horizon, and pictured someone looking beyond the distance into somewhere deep hence the 'cracks' and then the 'perfection' of love. Beautiful!
On Tuesday, March 3, 2009, BrokenAngel (57) wrote:

wow... im sorry i dont say much. but thats all i can think right now lol. beautiful. and the ending is perfect in my mind
On Monday, March 2, 2009, Mars (717) wrote:

You don't have to work on the ending. Again and again (I've read this about twenty million times by now) I can't find the more operfect stanza than the winter one. You know me better than I know myself. And I would do that, I give myself expectations that are out of human bounds. I'll never stop though. Until I can do it. Thank you. I love this so much. The ending was perfect baby. Te amo.
On Monday, March 2, 2009, Fantecstasy (139) wrote:

Capital... quite. I love the water imagery, there's always something extraordinary about it. Either I'm reading this differently or your style is changing slightly, but the intro seemed to have a different tone than most of the other pieces. Great stuff though. *tips hat*
On Sunday, March 1, 2009, Lavenia (123) wrote:

"Perfection"...we seem to be on the same page sometimes, ^_^ but your piece is written with such calm eloquence that I envy you. I think that your "mastery" in love...is your occupation Dylan, your heart. One, that I believe you will never falter in. One, that embodies who you are as a man a soul, or as a poet. This is a beautiful piece with or without the current ending. It is a writing that I will come back to again and again...
On Sunday, March 1, 2009, Echoes of Orpheus (693) wrote:

I won't ever be able to explain how much your comments mean to me... That made me feel so good about myself. Thanks for reading, as always :)
On Sunday, March 1, 2009, The Zebra Warrior (2209) wrote:

yes - I do feel the ending is a bit flat. However you pieced together some beautifully elehgant phrases that really lapped up the language without being heavy-handed or booming in unnecessary oratory. There was a touch of the 'Hartley Coleridge' to this; the understated, intellectual almost effeminate manner, as though true appreciation was breaking thru like sunlight in the cracks of darkened windows...I enjoyed that 'vibe' to it, nice start. Maybe if anything, just reconsider that ending ad you'll have one fabulous poem I reckon..
On Sunday, March 1, 2009, Echoes of Orpheus (693) wrote:

Thanks, constructive criticism is a rarity around here but you've always been one to fight that statistic. This comment is very appreciated.
On Sunday, March 1, 2009, MoonishBunny (719) wrote:

*cries* and there you go, getting it so damned perfect again. gah i new i missed something. *huggles*
On Sunday, March 1, 2009, Miss Dahlia (209) wrote:

it's about time for you to post again :P I liked this, but it made me a little sad, because I fear that she will never stop thinking she's not perfect...
On Sunday, March 1, 2009, Narcissa (752) wrote:

Its hard for me to grasp what it is I love about this piece...is it the line about nature breaking or the cracks that you can fill and hold onto...perhaps it is the combination that makes someone appreciate poetry like this.
On Sunday, March 1, 2009, Echoes of Orpheus (693) wrote:

For the life of me, after reworking the ending about 3 times I just couldn't do better today... Oh well. Enjoy my first post in a month.
On Sunday, March 1, 2009, Lady Grinning Soul (201) wrote:

i don't think you should change anything.... its awesome the way it is