Alas, there are two genres that do little more than annoy me -- Death Metal and Christian Rock: both infused with silly, emotive, contrived buzz words. The former: Death, Black, Pain, Rot, Grave, etc., etc. The latter: High, Light, Mountain, Wing. Not to say that any genre is immune from such trite folly, just that these two are truly ripe with it. I've read much of your other works -- you have it in you to accomplish so much more, please challenge yourself to do so. Take this piece here, use it as the foundational draft, reach into your soul for the deeper, non-buzz-term energies, and create for us a fantastic work...