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your heart is like a tidal wave

i caught you looking deep
into
my ocean eyes
and i thought you were
looking into me.

and i saw you whisper
the stars
my name
and i thought you
were thinking of
me..

and i felt you
sweeping your hand
into mine
and i thought you
were holding on.

but thoughts turn to dreams
and dreams fade away
and so did your smile
along with my fate
as you turned
to me
and sunk into yourself
so i thought you were selfish

not begging for help.

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On Sunday March 30th, 2008, Echoes of Orpheus (417) writes:

Touching piece, well written. *salutes*

On Monday February 18th, 2008, Theappleofyoureye (452) writes:

well..i changed the title. thx soulwax..i went with "tidal"

On Thursday February 7th, 2008, Syringe (73) writes:

wow that left a mark on me (in a good way). i love the way used the ocean and stars in the writing. buti agree with dyingangel, i think u should change the title. idk i would call it 'Tidal' like waves. It can take you so high then crash to an all time low. idk jus a thought. and ty for ur comment on my piece. i appreciate it dearly!

On Saturday February 2nd, 2008, Theappleofyoureye (452) writes:

thank you, i feel the same impact within my own words, though i cant seem to make sense of them.

On Wednesday January 30th, 2008, The Spiral Downward (396) writes:

That was a brilliant twist of irony at the end! The entire set up the ending beautifully! The entire sonic formula here was pleasurable!

On Wednesday January 30th, 2008, heartdripsblack (758) writes:

an honest beauty of a master piece well written. ~ hdb

On Monday January 21st, 2008, dying angel (1343) writes:

i really really loved this piece. it's short but so impacting. and i can definitely relate. i think the title takes away from it though. that's just my opinion. great write. i read it a few times before i commented. i loved the way you ended it also.

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