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"One Should Not Listen To Bright Eyes [when in this bad of state]" by asphyxia

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*** "So I'm pouring some whiskey, I'm gonna get drunk. Yeah, I'm pouring myself some whiskey, I'm going to get really fucking drunk. I'm pouring some whiskey right now, I'm going to get so, so drunk... That I pass out, forget your face, by the time I wake up."

--Bright Eyes, "It's Cool, We Can Still Be Friends"

-----


I’ve got news
(Not sure whether
it’s good or bad).
It’s new news nonetheless,
or the same old news
just given a yank,
a big forceful yank
right to the front of my mind.

And it’s funny because
it feels just like it did before.
Yeah, I’m pretty sure I feel
the same way as I did before
[You and I in my parents’ garage
attempting a goodbye].

Your eyes used to shine.
I loved the way they shined.
Your eyes used to shine
…I can’t even remember
them anymore.

And it’s funny because
I’m pretty sure I’ll just regret this.
[Like the first night I slept-
over and in the bed with you].

Let’s just pretend
for a moment
(Just one minute
of make-believe)
that it still hurts.

[Pretty sure it still hurts
to think of you].

And maybe perhaps
I will admit
that I was foolish
(So foolish).

Because I’m not so sure…
Yeah, I’m pretty unsure…

..

[Let’s just say
it was the wrong goodbye.]


..


Another 4 a.m.
“I pour whiskey over you.” ***






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On Saturday July 14th, 2007, Unforgotten (153) writes:
I liked the repeates. It makes you feel the obsession over the decision and the uncertainty so I was right at home!


On Thursday June 14th, 2007, carlosjackal (1724) writes:
Definitely like the lyrical feel to this. And the repetition? It fits in terms of thoughts of this kind and the internal conflict, that Disasembly Boy mentions. -Carl


On Tuesday May 1st, 2007, Disassembly Boy (100) writes:
thoughts *of internal conflict.. oops. I suck.. ha ha..


On Tuesday May 1st, 2007, asphyxia (76) writes:
Don't worry, I make silly mistakes and errors too!


On Tuesday May 1st, 2007, Disassembly Boy (100) writes:
the wound right? (that's the only conclusion drawn from this) I read this slow and with ease.. I liked the alternation of seemingly speaking aloud and thoughts internal conflict.. I enjoyed this.


On Tuesday May 1st, 2007, asphyxia (76) writes:
Pretty much, yes. Correct and a *ding-ding-ding* Haha. I am in my creative writing class right now, and I'm definitely sneaking online, but it is alright because this website is ALL about writing creatively.


On Tuesday May 1st, 2007, The Zebra Warrior (2401) writes:
it works lyrically like a song...but it actually starts to come across a touch irritating for me....this doesn't really go anyway and the repetition sort of feels like a video machine re-rewinding and then letting go...


On Tuesday May 1st, 2007, The Zebra Warrior (2401) writes:
anyway, no disrespect meant...I'm glad I helped you out in some way over the comments box....and welcome to DP, let's see what others think of this one...


On Tuesday May 1st, 2007, asphyxia (76) writes:
No disrespect taken! I like to hear what other people think, for the most part (I am human). Thank you for the nice welcome and for commenting! I'm not used to having anyone see my poetry really.



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