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"redemption" by lajeeves

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I once knew a girl who hated herself
she blotted the sunlight brick by brick
and the wall she built to keep them out
could've been her prison to this day still

and I once knew a guy stayed locked up inside
he ran from love hit by hit
the wall he built to save him from pain
was a prison of his own will

now both of them lived behind their wall
and longed each day for some kinda help
not knowing all the while the answers they seek
lie deep within their own selves

then one day this girl let down her wall
to be hurt again it seemed
but the guy I mentioned let down his wall too
and as lovers they were redeemed




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On Monday February 18th, 2008, Nixx (168) writes:
hopefull ending but it doesnt always happen that way. nice write


On Monday February 18th, 2008, fallen (301) writes:
I'm going to echo the same comment about fairytale endings. They're beautiful in much the same way your poem is. Thanks for sharing.


On Wednesday January 23rd, 2008, bpathos (21) writes:
This would make a good story book tale. Let me know if you need illustrations... I loved it. Wish it would go on...


On Monday September 10th, 2007, dusty (35) writes:
I've heard that story before... and (in my case) also had a happy ending. Very enjoyable =)


On Thursday March 8th, 2007, Mab (1019) writes:
this was lovely.the end, endearing


On Thursday February 8th, 2007, The Zebra Warrior (2406) writes:
strangely empathetic in an almost casual nonchalant tone....very calming; we all know someone who fits the bill, ourselves often than not...charming :)



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