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"I Can’t Breathe Because I Feel Like I’m Going To Cry" by carlosjackal

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And I can’t breathe
Because I feel like
I’m going to cry
And the mystery
Of the night is there
So I think I’m going to try
To fight my way
To the bars and clubs
Because a heart explosion
Hits my chest with a thud
Whilst the skies rain hard
With the red of my pain
And her irises are haunting
Shattered arteries
Insane



A quick glass knock back
The feel good polite chat
With a lady in classic
Backless dress and cute knack
Of smoothing any strains
Of a first time meet
Because she’s known my type before
Fallen hard but still taste sweet
Then I say something
That makes her laugh
And she’s sensing
Maybe
I’m different to the rest
So she buys a round
More talk ensues
I return the gesture
And my confidence grows



A few more later
We’re still talking
Smiling
Laughing
We’re game
So I ask if she’d like to move on
With me
To a place of care-free dancing
With a floor and lights
That make things feel alright
And she says, “Yes”
Like she means it
Like it’s meant to feel right

5 minutes later
We’re on the street
Arm-in-arm
Making our way
To the club of broken hearts
Where 3 hours
And you’re mended
With another
In joint recovery

Two blue pills later
Taken with calm
In locked cubicles
This lady and I
Are raising the bar
For a night we’ll always remember
Light touches and electricity
Gorgeous rushes that synchronise
The two of us together
As though there’s noone else around
Then we know
That this is more than just
Meant to feel right



The next morning
Sunlight wakes me
From my dream of sweet, sweet beauty
Then I look over
She’s there next to me
I get a rush
And I can’t breathe
Because I feel like
I’m going to cry
Her eyelids flutter
Open
In an instant
We’re together
The pain of our individual pasts
Making this moment fate
Because without it
Last night would not have come
The mystery unsought
And this beautiful morning
Moment leading to heart racing
Entanglement
Would only be twinkles
In two separate pairs of eyes
Of should’ve-been-lovers
Too scared to love again




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On Tuesday November 6th, 2007, Distorted_Reality (151) writes:
wow I can't believe I didn't read this before, It's such an amzing write I felt every word of it =0


On Thursday July 12th, 2007, GreyDividing (205) writes:
This is something only you could say. "Too scared to love again," I can feel this with a hand over my heart. Wow, man.


On Wednesday June 13th, 2007, ashottothetemple (73) writes:
This put an intellectual twist to the floodgates of a one night stand or for that fact, any chance encounter. Bloody fuckin' brilliant mate! +b+


On Saturday June 9th, 2007, wonderlandhysteria (2195) writes:
This had a sacred feel to it. You're so genuine and passionate in your language. A reeling story poem with a clenching climax and a gorgeously disheartening conclusion. It's a pleasure to read you.


On Thursday March 15th, 2007, Tania (318) writes:
excellent indeed.. a damn fine write :)


On Friday February 23rd, 2007, glasshouse (812) writes:
i didnt even know that i was reading, so clear the story was to me. well done. well done. -Glass


On Monday January 29th, 2007, Instant Insanity (773) writes:
Wow what an excellent display of emotion. I loved the way you painted a story through out this piece. Your a brilliant writer. Keep It up man. ][ ][


On Thursday January 25th, 2007, Bella Butchery (1171) writes:
ditto everyone else, this was really good


On Friday January 19th, 2007, Anna Helianthus (1165) writes:
damn. there really isn't much i can say that hasn't been said already..but god. this was not what i expected from the title, and i love how this went places my mind wasn't expecting..this really was a masterpiece.


On Thursday January 18th, 2007, braindead_poet (585) writes:
well... that was one hell of a portrayal. i saw where you were headed with this about halfway through, and yet you brought it to a close very close to home. talent is born in some of us, as is potential; some of us have both.


On Thursday January 18th, 2007, The Fool (1048) writes:
I feel as though I've said enough by I still want to stay more my pulse is still ticking like a time-bomb thats ready to corrupt and override my soul.. This.. Wow.. thats all I have to say.. is wow..


On Thursday January 18th, 2007, The Fool (1048) writes:
It gives me shocks up and down my spines, I feel like I've drank six shots of vodka in a row.. As I grow dizzier.. *ish speechless* ~Mirrored


On Thursday January 18th, 2007, The Fool (1048) writes:
Oh my god.. Carlos.. Jesus.. My heart can't stop pounding, you made me feel so many things in this poem.. It was incredible.. I can't believe I've missed all this breath-taking heart shooting.. Palm sweating work.. Its.. powerful


On Tuesday January 16th, 2007, An Expired Member (21) writes:
this was dazzling, wonderful, wonderful, write....I've been seeing alot of this lately, the one who have loved before and somehow have to deal with the prospect of a possible new lover affair,


On Tuesday January 16th, 2007, An Expired Member (21) writes:
but can you love more than once in life, I mean ever truly love again? the answer is beyond me, but wonderful write, Thank You ~Ashes~


On Sunday January 14th, 2007, Sin (1652) writes:
this was absolutely gorgeous...~kristy


On Thursday January 11th, 2007, K_Love (701) writes:
I love the beginning, beautifully said. "The pain of our individual pasts Making this moment fate Because without it Last night would not have come" Love it.


On Monday January 8th, 2007, soul dancer (180) writes:
Just beautiful...that is all I can find to say.


On Monday January 8th, 2007, Alanarchy (1611) writes:
This is one of my favorites from you. I was so caught up in the story, you told it emaculatly. "Arm-in-arm making our way to the club of broken hearts." I've been there. I believe the house drink is nine shots of tequila. Great job, man.


On Sunday January 7th, 2007, LOKI (276) writes:
this is magnificent man.What a great way to tell a story


On Sunday January 7th, 2007, Freebird (685) writes:
This was great. The emotions that come with this poem are overpowering.


On Sunday January 7th, 2007, alaskanamber (140) writes:
is always worth it to take a chance my friend, whether tears are shed. wonderfully painful emotion in this :)


On Sunday January 7th, 2007, Mylissa (1130) writes:
So wonderfully written.


On Sunday January 7th, 2007, Aunty Depressant (748) writes:
Yes, without certain endings...and a thirst for mystery, many a lost night of pleasure there would be...at our ages...who doesn't have those kind of pangs from the past:P


On Sunday January 7th, 2007, heartdripsblack (769) writes:
"with the red of my pain" i loved that line. or maybe cause it includes my sn? :P very well written my friend. i liked it. ~ red



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